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Pantygynt
While this is topically right on message, I would question its poetic worth. I seek poetic devices and fail to find them. Were this not written in lines of various lengths it would, I maintain be indistinguishable from prose, and that is not what free verse is about.
In addition there are a number of grammatical errors scattered within its lines.
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Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
JB you nailed it! Needed to spend a day on this before I pushed go...thanks forge kick in the head my friend.