Last Call
A final drink before you go...53 total reviews
Comment from kahpot
What an enthralling read, thanks for the notes they helped explain a lot, a welcome story after so many shootings lately, to read a lighter side of the victims, very well written with great artwork, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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What an enthralling read, thanks for the notes they helped explain a lot, a welcome story after so many shootings lately, to read a lighter side of the victims, very well written with great artwork, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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Thanx for your review on this one, sir: I do so enjoy playing with a presence of mythology in the present -- kindof an easy escape when you don't have a lot of time on your hands! And who doesn't like the 'quick escape' without chemical assistance?! LOL! ;) :) :) Take care and have an awesome weekend down over there!! ;) Yvette
Comment from Rikki66
Good luck in the contest. Charles was having a bad night even before he went into the bar. He was having memories he could not recall, he walked on leaden legs, he was having lascivious thoughts, (love that word). The single coin, he should have known he win trouble.
Thank you for the refresher in Greek mythology.
Rikki
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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Good luck in the contest. Charles was having a bad night even before he went into the bar. He was having memories he could not recall, he walked on leaden legs, he was having lascivious thoughts, (love that word). The single coin, he should have known he win trouble.
Thank you for the refresher in Greek mythology.
Rikki
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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Ooooo, don't you 'just'?! It's one of those words that carries every bit of its connotation! ;) LOL! ;) Thanx for your review on this one, Rikki: I do so enjoy playing with a presence of mythology in the present -- kindof an easy escape when you don't have a lot of time on your hands! And who doesn't like the 'quick escape' without chemical assistance?! LOL! ;) :) :) Take care and have an awesome weekend out there!! ;) Yvette
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It was my pleasure to read and review.
Rikki
Comment from Jesse James Doty
By the title and the line above it, I had no idea it was headed where it went. Thinking it was about another 'last call for drinks' story, I read on. It was quite entertaining and written well. Then, the somewhat underplayed reference to a massacre by a gun-wielding person, let me know a little more about what was to happen. I still did not know he was dead until "the memory of gunshots and pain ripped through Charles..." and then, he realizes it is too late for Brandy and too late for himself, he was already dead. The references to the Greek character of death was more obvious. I liked learning about the passageway to Hades, and other stories you told. Both in your Flash Fiction and in your author's notes. The surprise ending was very startling and effective. You drew me into reading about mythology when I wouldn't have chosen it if I had known. Now I know more and am more interested. I thank you for that.
Very well written with suspense, drama, a little dark horror, and a surprise ending. What's not to like? Thank you for sharing this tale.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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By the title and the line above it, I had no idea it was headed where it went. Thinking it was about another 'last call for drinks' story, I read on. It was quite entertaining and written well. Then, the somewhat underplayed reference to a massacre by a gun-wielding person, let me know a little more about what was to happen. I still did not know he was dead until "the memory of gunshots and pain ripped through Charles..." and then, he realizes it is too late for Brandy and too late for himself, he was already dead. The references to the Greek character of death was more obvious. I liked learning about the passageway to Hades, and other stories you told. Both in your Flash Fiction and in your author's notes. The surprise ending was very startling and effective. You drew me into reading about mythology when I wouldn't have chosen it if I had known. Now I know more and am more interested. I thank you for that.
Very well written with suspense, drama, a little dark horror, and a surprise ending. What's not to like? Thank you for sharing this tale.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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Oh, Jesse, you are too awesome!! What a wonderful review, my friend -- I am so very glad you enjoyed this one (even though it could be considered 'dark', I guess...didn't set out to write dark, but I just go with the muses, ya know?) I've always enjoyed playing with a presence of mythology in the present -- kindof an easy escape when you don't have a lot of time on your hands! And who doesn't like the 'quick escape' without chemical assistance?! LOL! ;) :) :) Take care and have an awesome weekend out there - those stars have already brightened mine!! ;) Yvette
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Hi Yvette.
You're very welcome. I'm glad you liked my review. I enjoyed reading and reviewing your post. Let's both have a wonderful weekend, my friend!
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry is well-written, YM. I enjoyed reading it. I could see the action as it unfolded. I'm familiar with the River Styx, but was still engaged by how you 'put this together.' Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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Your contest entry is well-written, YM. I enjoyed reading it. I could see the action as it unfolded. I'm familiar with the River Styx, but was still engaged by how you 'put this together.' Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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Thanx so much for stopping by for this ?Mythology in the Real World?, Jan? LOL! So glad you were entertained! Have a wonderful weekend! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment from Sugarray77
Such a dark and moody write, Yvette. Well done on setting the scene and building believable characters with diabolical dialogue... I love those two words together... LOL. Good luck on the contest!!
Melissa
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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Such a dark and moody write, Yvette. Well done on setting the scene and building believable characters with diabolical dialogue... I love those two words together... LOL. Good luck on the contest!!
Melissa
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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I do so enjoy playing with a presence of mythology in the present, Melissa -- kindof an easy escape when you don't have a lot of time on your hands! And who doesn't like the 'quick escape' without chemical assistance?! LOL! ;) :) :) Take care and have an awesome weekend out there!! ;) Yvette
Comment from Sally Law
Scary this one. It chilled me to the bone! It would qualify as a horror story for a contest, too. Good entry just before the clock tolls midnight. Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the contest,
Sal xo
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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Scary this one. It chilled me to the bone! It would qualify as a horror story for a contest, too. Good entry just before the clock tolls midnight. Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the contest,
Sal xo
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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Gotta watch the blonde over here -- you never know what she'll throw atcha - LOL!! ;) :) I do so enjoy playing with a presence of mythology in the present, Lady Sal -- kindof an easy escape when you don't have a lot of time on your hands! And who doesn't like the 'quick escape' without chemical assistance?! LOL! ;) :) :) Take care and have an awesome weekend out there!! ;) Yvette
Comment from Raul1
I think that this story is interesting. The words flow through all out the story. Well written. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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I think that this story is interesting. The words flow through all out the story. Well written. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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Thanx so much for stopping by for this ?Mythology in the Real World?? LOL! So glad you were entertained! Have a wonderful weekend! ;) ;) Yvette
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Thank you, my friend! You have a wonderful week, too! :) You're welcome.
Comment from Barbaraj1
I enjoyed reading your story. I really didn't know where you were going with it. But I found out soon enough with the surprise ending. The characters are realistic.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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I enjoyed reading your story. I really didn't know where you were going with it. But I found out soon enough with the surprise ending. The characters are realistic.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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I do so enjoy playing with a presence of mythology in the present, Barbara J -- kindof an easy escape when you don't have a lot of time on your hands! And who doesn't like the 'quick escape' without chemical assistance?! LOL! ;) :) :) Take care and have an awesome weekend out there!! ;) Yvette
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is an engaging story with a surprise ending which is not totally a surprise since it was indeed foreshadowed. It is a well written tale and an excellent contest entry.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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This is an engaging story with a surprise ending which is not totally a surprise since it was indeed foreshadowed. It is a well written tale and an excellent contest entry.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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I do so enjoy playing with a presence of mythology in the present, Susan -- kindof an easy escape when you don't have a lot of time on your hands! And who doesn't like the 'quick escape' without chemical assistance?! LOL! ;) :) :) Take care and have an awesome weekend out there!! ;) Yvette
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Y M. Roger,
Nice piece of General Fiction in the form of Flash Fiction meeting the desired norms, and beautifully depicting its theme.
Impressive, and perfectly matching the theme wording.
Smooth, spontaneous, and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
Best of Luck!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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Hello Y M. Roger,
Nice piece of General Fiction in the form of Flash Fiction meeting the desired norms, and beautifully depicting its theme.
Impressive, and perfectly matching the theme wording.
Smooth, spontaneous, and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
Best of Luck!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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I do so enjoy playing with a presence of mythology in the present, RP -- kindof an easy escape when you don't have a lot of time on your hands! And who doesn't like the 'quick escape' without chemical assistance?! LOL! ;) :) :) Thank you so very much for those wonderful stars and the encouraging review -- take care and have an awesome weekend out there!! ;) Yvette
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Y. M. Roger, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
