A true story about messed up dreams
I need so many things;66 total reviews
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Mystery Writer,
Your poem exudes truth in this world of ours today. Wants have replaced Needs. It takes a mature person to realize when those wants are temporary to the real needs - as the narrator of your poem does: "The life I seek cannot be bought." Wise words, indeed.
Well-executed!
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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Hello Mystery Writer,
Your poem exudes truth in this world of ours today. Wants have replaced Needs. It takes a mature person to realize when those wants are temporary to the real needs - as the narrator of your poem does: "The life I seek cannot be bought." Wise words, indeed.
Well-executed!
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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Hey Mrs. KT... you are always right on point with your sage review... I am grateful that you read and then reviewed... Makes my day. thanks so much.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is really interesting with quite a few messages conveyed here. It speaks of the many facets of the life of an extravagant dreamer. I like the colorful and descriptive language along with the accompanying artwork. Thanks for sharing this well written poem. Well done!
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This is really interesting with quite a few messages conveyed here. It speaks of the many facets of the life of an extravagant dreamer. I like the colorful and descriptive language along with the accompanying artwork. Thanks for sharing this well written poem. Well done!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
Comment from karenina
"I close the door tod soak in silent reckoning"----Perhaps a spelling error in "tod"??? That aside (and so easily edited!) this speaks to so many of us in today's world where the trapping of life seem to become the "life"--that is, until we have a soul awakening and realize (as within this poem) that "things" will never fulfill us. Loved the theme!--Karenina
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"I close the door tod soak in silent reckoning"----Perhaps a spelling error in "tod"??? That aside (and so easily edited!) this speaks to so many of us in today's world where the trapping of life seem to become the "life"--that is, until we have a soul awakening and realize (as within this poem) that "things" will never fulfill us. Loved the theme!--Karenina
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
Comment from seaglass
This is beautiful and well describes the craving of the hungry soul. I also see it describing are overly stimulated society who has been brainwashed into thinking they need to buy the next new bell or whistle. But coming to this conclusion in my own soul, I've become a minimalist and find myself so much happier as I don't give in to the cravings but strive to be mindful of the blessings.
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This is beautiful and well describes the craving of the hungry soul. I also see it describing are overly stimulated society who has been brainwashed into thinking they need to buy the next new bell or whistle. But coming to this conclusion in my own soul, I've become a minimalist and find myself so much happier as I don't give in to the cravings but strive to be mindful of the blessings.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
Comment from Blue Hendrix
Absolutely perfect choice in subject I found no mistakes you did an amazing job and I thought this to be a great read with an easy flow and great message.
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Absolutely perfect choice in subject I found no mistakes you did an amazing job and I thought this to be a great read with an easy flow and great message.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The author's words are heart felt,
deep, creative and thought provoking. The reader
pondered on the theme of this poem. The artwork
is perfect and compliments this poem well.
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Excellent Poem! The author's words are heart felt,
deep, creative and thought provoking. The reader
pondered on the theme of this poem. The artwork
is perfect and compliments this poem well.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
Comment from bhogg
I'm not a poet, so I look for things that bring me in to the moment. Your work does that. Well written, no suggestions at all. Sad, sad, sad, but ends on positive introspection. Very nice.
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I'm not a poet, so I look for things that bring me in to the moment. Your work does that. Well written, no suggestions at all. Sad, sad, sad, but ends on positive introspection. Very nice.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
Comment from fm wright
It speaks so eloquently of what we think we need in this life and what we really do need in this life. A truly poetic reminder to us all of what is really important. It has a nice flow to it and I like the picture really well!
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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It speaks so eloquently of what we think we need in this life and what we really do need in this life. A truly poetic reminder to us all of what is really important. It has a nice flow to it and I like the picture really well!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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Hey fm wright... thanks for you thoughtful and accurate view of the person in this ditty... your stellar/plus-one review reigned down on me and made me grateful for your review... looking forward... fm
Comment from Joy Graham
This is an interesting story poem. I have always thought of a story poem as having characters that tell a tale and maybe get into mischief and then they solve the problem and everyone lives happily ever after. But the ones I read on fanstory aren't like that. I will have to change my thinking, I guess.
Best wishes to you in this contest. I obviously have no idea what type of poem will win this contest.
Joy xx
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This is an interesting story poem. I have always thought of a story poem as having characters that tell a tale and maybe get into mischief and then they solve the problem and everyone lives happily ever after. But the ones I read on fanstory aren't like that. I will have to change my thinking, I guess.
Best wishes to you in this contest. I obviously have no idea what type of poem will win this contest.
Joy xx
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I need so many things; just not trinkets or ponzi schemes.
Finally, I grasp my own pain.
For the first time, in a long time, I see my eyes.
They are witness to this house of lies.;
Virtual six, these were my perfect lines, it is all fabulous, I adore your way with words and found this a delight to read and very very wise. Well done kindest regards and well done Meia x
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I need so many things; just not trinkets or ponzi schemes.
Finally, I grasp my own pain.
For the first time, in a long time, I see my eyes.
They are witness to this house of lies.;
Virtual six, these were my perfect lines, it is all fabulous, I adore your way with words and found this a delight to read and very very wise. Well done kindest regards and well done Meia x
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
