Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Exceptional

This speaks effect of experience, the old man now dares not raising his head to enjoy the sight of sighing trees both sides of the road, he walks down slow, as he remembers consequences he suffered at a sharp Fall; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR (6-STAR)

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2018

Many thanks both for your accurate summary and six-star rating, Dr. A..
Both much appreciated, as always. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from jenintorre

Excellent

Hi there Tony
I really enjoyed reading your 75 word flash fiction. It is a bit scary as I'm feeling a bit the same way at the moment. I think this is a very good entry for the competition. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2018

Thanks, Jenin. Yes, it does get a bit scary when this kind of writing verges on the autobiographical. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from phill doran

Excellent

Hello Tony
Very good. Firstly, Bill Gate's and I make it 75 on the nose - I am sure you counted too, but you never know. We all make mistakes.
The narrative, brief as it is, is very strong. I have the image of the character very quickly - some light strokes; old, head bent, liver-spots, stubble.
The light and shade analogy to the liver-spots also works (although I think 'liver-spotted' is hyphenated? Bill had no guidance for me, so I might be wrong).
Although hopefully not in your character's age-bracket, I am over 60 and fell recently. Nothing damaged, but the mere shock of falling was traumatic: I don't think I have fallen over since I was 8 or 9...
A strong entry and very crisp and clean writing. I wish you well with this and your future work.
cheers
phill

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2018

Thanks for the check on word count, Phill. You, me, and Bill Gates make a good team. Thanks, too, for the missing hyphen. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from Alexander Vasa

Excellent

Hi, a good analogy between the tree and leaves falling and the old man.. I enjoyed your story and it meets the requirements of the challenge, I think your style is easy to read and I noticed no errors, thanks for sharing this one, it was a fun word to review, Ana.

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 Comment Written 31-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2018

Glad you enjoyed the analogy, Ana, and found the poem entertaining. Thanks for the review. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Great ending with a pun, Tony. Also loved the description of the man and his careful gait to protect himself. I liked the way you showed us the age by "liver spotted skin" and "stubble face."

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 Comment Written 31-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2018

Thanks, Helen. It's scary when these poems begin to become partly autobiographical! LOL