Free Verse Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Hawk Moths"A collection of free verse poems
72 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
Superb, free verse, Tony. Just the right length to communicate the pure sensuality of nature.
Your imagery, divine. Best wishes to you in the contest with this gem.
Gloria
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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Superb, free verse, Tony. Just the right length to communicate the pure sensuality of nature.
Your imagery, divine. Best wishes to you in the contest with this gem.
Gloria
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2017
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Thanks, Gloria. I very much appreciate your lovely review and the six-star award. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Tony.
The sixes haven't arrived yet, mate, or you'd have one. What a fabulous descriptive piece of poetry. Outstanding imagery about these beautiful creatures and their environment.
A brilliant contest entry and I wish you luck in it.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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G'day Tony.
The sixes haven't arrived yet, mate, or you'd have one. What a fabulous descriptive piece of poetry. Outstanding imagery about these beautiful creatures and their environment.
A brilliant contest entry and I wish you luck in it.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Thanks, Fez. Good to here from you. Tony
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This one should bring some results, Tony, because your descriptions and images are wonderful. For example, the sequined velvet dress of night. That is just what night is, sequined by stars, lovely. Giddy
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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This one should bring some results, Tony, because your descriptions and images are wonderful. For example, the sequined velvet dress of night. That is just what night is, sequined by stars, lovely. Giddy
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Many thanks, Giddy. As always, I appreciate your kind words and the six stars. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Halfree
You have me on the horns of a dilemma, liked the first verse very much. I know that the second verse is a statement of faith, I think. I am giving the first verse a 5 which does not incliude the last or the second verse. The first is very beautiful and deserves a six.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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You have me on the horns of a dilemma, liked the first verse very much. I know that the second verse is a statement of faith, I think. I am giving the first verse a 5 which does not incliude the last or the second verse. The first is very beautiful and deserves a six.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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I, too, have been ambivalent about this. I initially edited out the second part, then put it back in again. Perhaps the poem is better without it. I'm still not sure, but think you may be right.
Comment from Liberty Justice
"On wings of moonlit lace" such beautiful personification and metaphors in this poem. Rhymes about eternity and the beauty of a simple way a moth munches on a scented velvet flower. LOVELY! lol liberty justice
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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"On wings of moonlit lace" such beautiful personification and metaphors in this poem. Rhymes about eternity and the beauty of a simple way a moth munches on a scented velvet flower. LOVELY! lol liberty justice
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Many thanks, LJ. As always, I appreciate your kind words and the six stars. I understand that these moths hover like hummingbirds while taking the nectar. Best wishes, Tony
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Comment from lyenochka
Another "virtual six," Tony! This is so beautiful and what a remarkable looking moth!
(Frankly, from all the nature shows Australia has some of the scariest wildlife but this one doesn't scare me.)
My favorite lines were:
"to kiss the sequined, velvet dress of night
on wings of moonlit lace."
I like that you take the poem to a higher level as the moth may be driven by "lust" his actions will lead to his future generations. So we take note that the love we give in this life will have an impact for eternity.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Another "virtual six," Tony! This is so beautiful and what a remarkable looking moth!
(Frankly, from all the nature shows Australia has some of the scariest wildlife but this one doesn't scare me.)
My favorite lines were:
"to kiss the sequined, velvet dress of night
on wings of moonlit lace."
I like that you take the poem to a higher level as the moth may be driven by "lust" his actions will lead to his future generations. So we take note that the love we give in this life will have an impact for eternity.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Many thanks, Helen. As always, I appreciate your kind words. I have hesitated about the second part of the poem but have now taken it out again, believing that it is better to let the reader draw his or her own conclusions from the imagery. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Irish Rain
Oh, so sorry I'm out of sixes. This is so lovely. 'on wings of moonlit lace'....just so delicately dazzling. I'm afraid of moths, ha ha. I don't know why. BUT...I like yours, as long as it stays on the page!! A luminous entry!!! Blessings...
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Oh, so sorry I'm out of sixes. This is so lovely. 'on wings of moonlit lace'....just so delicately dazzling. I'm afraid of moths, ha ha. I don't know why. BUT...I like yours, as long as it stays on the page!! A luminous entry!!! Blessings...
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Thanks, Judy. They're pretty ugly looking beasts, aren't they? Especially these hawk moths, or hummingbird moths as they are sometimes called.
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Yes, I've seen them here...and they just give me willies, ha ha. 'Be a hummingbird, or a butterfly'...no spin-offs!!!
Comment from zanya
A snapshot of a moment of animal 'night life' as the' Hawk moths hover' enhancing the 'jasmine 'filled air - sensual and scented in its appeal - great pic
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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A snapshot of a moment of animal 'night life' as the' Hawk moths hover' enhancing the 'jasmine 'filled air - sensual and scented in its appeal - great pic
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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I appreciate your review, Zanya. Thank you! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from country ranch writer
Very beautiful work up and presentation. First time I seen the a few years back thought them humming birds till I found out they are similar only moths.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Very beautiful work up and presentation. First time I seen the a few years back thought them humming birds till I found out they are similar only moths.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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I appreciate your review, CRW. Thank you!
There are several varieties of hawk moth, some of which are actually called hummingbird moths.
Best wishes, Tony
Comment from nancyjam
This is a gorgeous free verse - beautifully descriptive
lines, wonderful metaphors, giving the reader a lovely
vision and sense of the scene before the poet.
Should do well in the contest.
Nancy
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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This is a gorgeous free verse - beautifully descriptive
lines, wonderful metaphors, giving the reader a lovely
vision and sense of the scene before the poet.
Should do well in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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I appreciate your complimentary review and six stars, Nancy. Thank you!
I have amended the poem slightly, altering the end and adding a few more lines
Best wishes, Tony
