Out On a Limb For Love
No Time For Reasoning51 total reviews
Comment from Sankey
Wow, mate. This was good. Wish it had been a tad longer. Sooooo short! Well done. had my interest all locked in... then! All Gone! Any more coming? Loved the picture also....no spags.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Wow, mate. This was good. Wish it had been a tad longer. Sooooo short! Well done. had my interest all locked in... then! All Gone! Any more coming? Loved the picture also....no spags.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Many thanks, Geoff. The reader definitely must participate when there's only 50 words. Thank you for doing just that and being so kind in your regards.
Jay
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Jay,
Great job with this one. Very few words to play with so straight to the meaty parts. I love this format. lol
It's all there. the illicit romance, cultural/race divide, prejudice, misguided religious beliefs.
Got to be in with a great chance of taking the prize.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Hi Jay,
Great job with this one. Very few words to play with so straight to the meaty parts. I love this format. lol
It's all there. the illicit romance, cultural/race divide, prejudice, misguided religious beliefs.
Got to be in with a great chance of taking the prize.
All the best
G
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Many thanks, G. I'm thrilled you enjoyed this and were able to take away from it all the main points. With only 50 bullets, the reader definitely must participate.
Comment from MelB
Wow! I had to read this twice (at 1:30 AM) to make sure I was getting it right. It's a powerful piece and should be a very strong contender for the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Wow! I had to read this twice (at 1:30 AM) to make sure I was getting it right. It's a powerful piece and should be a very strong contender for the contest.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Hey, MelB, thanks for your kind words and your prognostication.
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You're most welcome. Best wishes to you in the contest.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Powerful piece... very well done, and in just a few words. That takes real skill, and you have it. I had no idea where this was going, and it hit me like a brick. Sure wish I had a six.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Powerful piece... very well done, and in just a few words. That takes real skill, and you have it. I had no idea where this was going, and it hit me like a brick. Sure wish I had a six.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Your kind words are always worth more than a six any day. I hope the judges feel the same as you. Thanks, Phyllis.
Comment from Spitfire
Dynamite compression. Susie's pregnant. (Once it's born,)
Conflict ( they'll accept me.) Her boyfriend has been sneaking for some time into her bedroom by climbing a tree.
Daddy's caught on. The boyfriend is black and a trespasser. Yep, he can get away with murder as far as the law and God are concerned. Biting last line. Redneck dialect. Super, Jay.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Dynamite compression. Susie's pregnant. (Once it's born,)
Conflict ( they'll accept me.) Her boyfriend has been sneaking for some time into her bedroom by climbing a tree.
Daddy's caught on. The boyfriend is black and a trespasser. Yep, he can get away with murder as far as the law and God are concerned. Biting last line. Redneck dialect. Super, Jay.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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You don't know how thrilled I am to get such a positive review from you, Shari. It means so much to me. Thank you. I looked for a thumbs up, but discovered I have none. You are on my list for when the new arrival ... um arrives.
Comment from Fridayauthor
Nice job in a place I've not seen you visit! Concise and very much to the point. good luck in the contest.
I'm back from "down under" and found Australia a most fascinating country. Time to get back to writing and reviewing.
Six weeks before we're off to Cambria!
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Nice job in a place I've not seen you visit! Concise and very much to the point. good luck in the contest.
I'm back from "down under" and found Australia a most fascinating country. Time to get back to writing and reviewing.
Six weeks before we're off to Cambria!
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Thanks for your kind words and your sixer, Ray. So soon you're coming to Cambria? I thought you got there in July.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, Jesus, Jay, this little dribble might just as well have been that shotgun pointed at ME - straight through the heart - KAPOW! Man, I surrender. I thought I'D written a great dribble until I read this one. (LOL)
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Oh, Jesus, Jay, this little dribble might just as well have been that shotgun pointed at ME - straight through the heart - KAPOW! Man, I surrender. I thought I'D written a great dribble until I read this one. (LOL)
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Oh, Dawn ... you are so funny. You know how fickle these contests are. Besides, I read your dribble and thought it was very good. Or was it the drabble? You sure know how to make a body feel good, though.
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There are two contests, and yes - you read the drabble, I think, not the dribble - or was it vice versa.... LOL. (OMG)
Comment from Marvin Calloway
With an economy of words you've shown some things are agonizingly slow to change. I don't think this could have been said better with any other amount of words. This form could be your specialty.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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With an economy of words you've shown some things are agonizingly slow to change. I don't think this could have been said better with any other amount of words. This form could be your specialty.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Marv, you are too kind. It was such agony to write. Thank you so much for your confidence ... and the six!
Comment from Irish Rain
Oh! Crap!! No chance that limb might break and save him?? What a wonderful entry in this contest Mr. Jay. I actually KNOW people who think like this, sad to say. The realism...'And God, he fergives the Christian.' Gotta be the winner here!!! Brilliant. Blessings...
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Oh! Crap!! No chance that limb might break and save him?? What a wonderful entry in this contest Mr. Jay. I actually KNOW people who think like this, sad to say. The realism...'And God, he fergives the Christian.' Gotta be the winner here!!! Brilliant. Blessings...
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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You are too kind, Judy. That "brilliant" has a real ring to it! LOL, thanks for your well-wishes.
Comment from ciliverde
This really packs a punch, I was wondering at first about them calling the baby "it", and then her daddy shows up. Gun-totin' redneck bigot if I've ever read about one. Great job, I'm more or less speechless at this point - a strong contest contender for sure!
Carol
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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This really packs a punch, I was wondering at first about them calling the baby "it", and then her daddy shows up. Gun-totin' redneck bigot if I've ever read about one. Great job, I'm more or less speechless at this point - a strong contest contender for sure!
Carol
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Carol, you are so kind with your comments and your best wishes. And then you gave me a six! I feel sooooo gifted! LOL, thank you!
Jay