Late Winter Snow
Making the best of it52 total reviews
Comment from Kingsland
Enough of this snow and wintertime. I'm ready for the warm breezes of springtime. Although I am not a friend to cold weather. I do think this is a well-written piece of poetic art that was my pleasure to have read and written this response for... John
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Enough of this snow and wintertime. I'm ready for the warm breezes of springtime. Although I am not a friend to cold weather. I do think this is a well-written piece of poetic art that was my pleasure to have read and written this response for... John
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you John for your kind review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written uplifting poem. A great surprise awaits in early Spring, when old man Winter makes a last turn to bring some last snow before he retreats from the scene.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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A very well-written uplifting poem. A great surprise awaits in early Spring, when old man Winter makes a last turn to bring some last snow before he retreats from the scene.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you Sandra for your kind review.
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
This is a lovely poem about a late fall of snow, your description of it's joy is prominent throughout with some wonderful lines.
Have a great day
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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This is a lovely poem about a late fall of snow, your description of it's joy is prominent throughout with some wonderful lines.
Have a great day
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Lu Saluna
This is a heartwarming poem telling a story which reminded me of when I was a kid out playing in the snow. Me and my brothers played all day with our sled, up and down the hill. Wore ourselves right out. What a wonderful poem.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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This is a heartwarming poem telling a story which reminded me of when I was a kid out playing in the snow. Me and my brothers played all day with our sled, up and down the hill. Wore ourselves right out. What a wonderful poem.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you Lu for your kind review.
Comment from Mary Wakeford
Ha! This was delightful to read and then to come to that ending, even more so!
Excellent rhyme throughout and it read almost like a lilt, so cleverly woven such as:
And so I dragged my mittens out --
my heavy coat and sled;
those boots I thought were stowed away--
beneath my old sleigh bed.
Great imagery throughout!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Ha! This was delightful to read and then to come to that ending, even more so!
Excellent rhyme throughout and it read almost like a lilt, so cleverly woven such as:
And so I dragged my mittens out --
my heavy coat and sled;
those boots I thought were stowed away--
beneath my old sleigh bed.
Great imagery throughout!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you Mary for your kind review.
Comment from Sis Cat
Of the two poems I have read in this contest so far, I love yours the most. You describe something I can see and imagine--a late snow storm in early spring. You have vivid details:
"And so I dragged my mittens out --
my heavy coat and sled;
those boots I thought were stowed away--
beneath my old sleigh bed."
The weather is wacky and you take advantage of it with a joyful romp in late winter snow:
"We laughed and played throughout the day --
delighted by each thrill."
But this comes at a cost:
"We had a notion for romance --
Instead....we fell asleep."
Ha! This is certainly an uplifting poem.
Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Of the two poems I have read in this contest so far, I love yours the most. You describe something I can see and imagine--a late snow storm in early spring. You have vivid details:
"And so I dragged my mittens out --
my heavy coat and sled;
those boots I thought were stowed away--
beneath my old sleigh bed."
The weather is wacky and you take advantage of it with a joyful romp in late winter snow:
"We laughed and played throughout the day --
delighted by each thrill."
But this comes at a cost:
"We had a notion for romance --
Instead....we fell asleep."
Ha! This is certainly an uplifting poem.
Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind review and good luck wishes.
Comment from Alex Biasin
This was a fun read.
It was an uplifting story and put a smile on face.
Good rhymes and nice pacing to it as well.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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This was a fun read.
It was an uplifting story and put a smile on face.
Good rhymes and nice pacing to it as well.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you Alex for your kind review.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, very good, very cute. I could feel the child within. I especially liked:
The sun was brightly shining down
when we met on the hill.
We laughed and played throughout the day --
delighted by each thrill.
(The day after a snow storm is usually a beautiful sunny day. I don't know why, but that's just the way it is.)
I also liked:
We had a notion for romance --
Instead....we fell asleep.
(Ahh, that happens. Romance put on hold, but just think how peaceful and rested each will feel when the gold of dawn appears and romance resumes.)
Good imagery throughout. Silky rhyming. Good complementary artwork choice. A pleasure to read. As this is a writing prompt entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Hello author, very good, very cute. I could feel the child within. I especially liked:
The sun was brightly shining down
when we met on the hill.
We laughed and played throughout the day --
delighted by each thrill.
(The day after a snow storm is usually a beautiful sunny day. I don't know why, but that's just the way it is.)
I also liked:
We had a notion for romance --
Instead....we fell asleep.
(Ahh, that happens. Romance put on hold, but just think how peaceful and rested each will feel when the gold of dawn appears and romance resumes.)
Good imagery throughout. Silky rhyming. Good complementary artwork choice. A pleasure to read. As this is a writing prompt entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 12-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind review.
Comment from valmay
A lovely poem with a great twist in the tail. The second stanza puts the weather into a personal setting, and the third expresses youthful joy. It was joyous and therefore uplifting without being unduly sentimental. Thanks for sharing, I need a bit of cheering up, as I am recovering from a fall. Good luck.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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A lovely poem with a great twist in the tail. The second stanza puts the weather into a personal setting, and the third expresses youthful joy. It was joyous and therefore uplifting without being unduly sentimental. Thanks for sharing, I need a bit of cheering up, as I am recovering from a fall. Good luck.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your kind review. I'm glad this cheered you up - get better soon from you fall.
Comment from MelB
This is a fun poem. It flows well with nice abab rhyme. Spending time outside in the cold does have a way of making you sleepy. I love the last two lines!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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This is a fun poem. It flows well with nice abab rhyme. Spending time outside in the cold does have a way of making you sleepy. I love the last two lines!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you Mel for your kind review.
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You're welcome.
