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JOURNEY INTO REDEMPTION

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Comment from LIJ Red
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Not too long. Did get into the reading and forget to look for nits. Surely his medicos can find the Almighty Master a Viagra...the next chapter should be a doozy...

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2016


reply by the author on 27-Mar-2016
    Oh, there were enough people looking for nits. And they were there aplenty. Thanks, Red. Appreciate you being here.
Comment from Selina Stambi
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Hi Jay,

I've given up trying to keep up with your book. Quck question - did I miss the chapter in which Axtilia changes from an alien prototype to a beauty? Or was there some other explanation for how Doctrex perceived her.

Another complex, detailed chapter. Its evident that the tale is working to its conclusion. Final encounter with AX?

Well done, sir. Happy Easter.

Sonali





the illogic of what ... I never knew illogic was a word! Is it??

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2016


reply by the author on 27-Mar-2016
    Guess what's on my list of changes when I edit. First is to take away the alien image. I didn't need it, especially eyes the size of lemons. Happy Easter, Sonali. Illogic is so much a word that a hip-hop group are called Illogic. I've used the word for years. Thanks for being here for me, Sonali.
Comment from royowen
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The appearance of the bird again seems to have a quite deliberate role in the story Jay, but noticing that Doctrex/Pondria, writes almost prophetically. I enjoyed very much the verbal chess moves by both Doctrex and Glnot Reuther, Doctrex has to remember to keep his disciple, looking forward to the wedding day, what will happen, well done great episode, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2016


reply by the author on 27-Mar-2016
    Glad you enjoyed this, Roy. There's a lot of prophecy going on in this story. God bless you, Roy, on this Easter Sunday.
reply by royowen on 28-Mar-2016
    Well done Jay you too mate
Comment from Edgar Terrance
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Very interesting story. After like 20 minutes I finally finished reading it. I must say, it seems like it's coming along greatly. I'm even curious about the assignment, and the feud between Pondria and Glnot Reuther. Ieven read some of the character details to help fill on the story. Overall, I liked the plot and it feels very original. Good job.

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2016


reply by the author on 27-Mar-2016
    I am so privileged to have you stop by and read my post. I'm thrilled you liked it so much you awarded it a 6 star. Hope you decide to come back for the rest of the chapters.
reply by Edgar Terrance on 28-Mar-2016
    I very well might. It's quite attention grabbing actually.
Comment from lancellot
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Ah, very good. you know for a second there when Pondria was describing how it feels to be close to Axtilla, I thought he was going too far and was letting his true feeling show. You can tell your brother his girl is pretty but that's all.

Excellent work.

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2016


reply by the author on 27-Mar-2016
    Thanks, Lance. I hoped you picked up on the conflict that's developing in Pondria's head. That's why I'm walking that thin line in trying to develop Rhuether's all-too-humanness. Bless you for the six stars, pal. Have a wonderful Easter.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
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= WHOOHOO! Two pumpa ... you be da one! (*<*)

Hi, Jay

= Glnot might be letting his guard down ... huge mistake.
= Well, it couldn't happen to a nicer butthead!
= You're building up a great finale.
= Will there be another book after this one ... or is this it?
= Loved the cat and mouse between these two.

**** Happy Easter ****

(*>*) A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside Down (*_*)
Jacqueline (Jax) M Franklin

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2016


reply by the author on 27-Mar-2016
    No, this book ends the trilogy. Then the editing begins. I'm not up to that. You actually got to pumps for this? You earned it. It was long.
reply by Jacqueline M Franklin on 27-Mar-2016
    Yes ... twwooooo. (*<*) Thanks, pal.
Comment from Sankey
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Hi, old friend. Been su8chy a long time since I read your stuff. Not sure we are still in the same story or we have moved on to something else. Can see some of the old names so I wonder. Sorry we never got my tune on your song you had, Now one correction if you like. dared not guess where (he)was [he] going

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 Comment Written 27-Mar-2016


reply by the author on 27-Mar-2016
    Hey, Geoff, my mate! Thanks for dropping by. Same story. About five chapters to go before I reel it in and start the editing process. Have a blessed Easter!