Consequences
Actions have consequences41 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A great sonnet, the consequences of our actions will always catch up on us. Wherever you hide or run it will follow and find you every time.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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A great sonnet, the consequences of our actions will always catch up on us. Wherever you hide or run it will follow and find you every time.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you Sandra for your kind and thoughtful review.
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Comment from mvbrooks
What a deeply sad sentiment with a glimpse of hope at the end. The poem captures the emotional trial and grief of a past indiscretion and the terrible weight that cannot be born alone.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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What a deeply sad sentiment with a glimpse of hope at the end. The poem captures the emotional trial and grief of a past indiscretion and the terrible weight that cannot be born alone.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review.
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Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, a heartfelt poem of the pain of un-forgiveness and the quest of redemption. Of special note:
My brokenness released into the light.
On wings, of His forgiveness I'll take flight.
(The power and hope of faith)
Well said and written. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Hello author, a heartfelt poem of the pain of un-forgiveness and the quest of redemption. Of special note:
My brokenness released into the light.
On wings, of His forgiveness I'll take flight.
(The power and hope of faith)
Well said and written. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review.
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Comment from Bill O'Bier
A well written poem for the contest entry. All stanzas correctly written. The content and the rhyme are good. The picture is appropriate. I'm sure other readers will enjoy the piece as I did. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards, Bill~
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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A well written poem for the contest entry. All stanzas correctly written. The content and the rhyme are good. The picture is appropriate. I'm sure other readers will enjoy the piece as I did. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards, Bill~
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you Bill for your kind and thoughtful review.
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Comment from Writeling
Hi, Oh, such a sad narrative message in your poem. I particularly like:
'As tears flow down across this wrinkled face
Compassion passes by without a trace.'
With best wishes, Writeling
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Hi, Oh, such a sad narrative message in your poem. I particularly like:
'As tears flow down across this wrinkled face
Compassion passes by without a trace.'
With best wishes, Writeling
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review.
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Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a good poem. It rhymes well and describes the message of regret and waiting for some type of forgiveness having hope until the last breath.
Just a comment on this line -
I'm lost upon (on) this deep and brackish sea
- there is no need to mention 'on' like you have because you have used the word 'upon' before it.
Thank you for sharing this enjoyable read ~ DD
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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This is a good poem. It rhymes well and describes the message of regret and waiting for some type of forgiveness having hope until the last breath.
Just a comment on this line -
I'm lost upon (on) this deep and brackish sea
- there is no need to mention 'on' like you have because you have used the word 'upon' before it.
Thank you for sharing this enjoyable read ~ DD
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review. Thank you too for finding my "extra" word. I quickly removed it. It corrected my word count as well. Thank you again.
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Comment from Joycee
I like how the words you've chosen paint a picture of the consequences of life. Each stanza talks about a different phase of life and your words paint a memorable picture. First no comfort, then long years, then life's not over, still reflecting until the light is seen.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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I like how the words you've chosen paint a picture of the consequences of life. Each stanza talks about a different phase of life and your words paint a memorable picture. First no comfort, then long years, then life's not over, still reflecting until the light is seen.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you Joycee for your kind and thoughtful review.
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Comment from beizanten
Sad, heartbreaking and powerful. the emotion flow very well. Good description especially the emotion. The last stanza is very good.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Sad, heartbreaking and powerful. the emotion flow very well. Good description especially the emotion. The last stanza is very good.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review.
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Comment from brenda bickers
Hi ya,
how beautiful this reads and so sad. A lifetime waiting to receive forgiveness for a past sin from your maker is a lonely existence to bare.
Good luck.
Brenda
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Hi ya,
how beautiful this reads and so sad. A lifetime waiting to receive forgiveness for a past sin from your maker is a lonely existence to bare.
Good luck.
Brenda
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you Brenda for your kind and thoughtful review.
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Comment from Brewster
A very deep and compelling poem. It is rather dark to me, for it seems to relate to a lady who is so sorrowful for her sins that her body is in pain and people reject her-it seems like she also rejects herself even though she is forgiven and want to pass it on-it seem the only thing she passed on was guilt and sorrow. Very emotional poem.
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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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A very deep and compelling poem. It is rather dark to me, for it seems to relate to a lady who is so sorrowful for her sins that her body is in pain and people reject her-it seems like she also rejects herself even though she is forgiven and want to pass it on-it seem the only thing she passed on was guilt and sorrow. Very emotional poem.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you for your review. This is my first three star. In the past, when I have received four stars, the reviewer usually has a recommendation to make the poem better.
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