Comment from Eigle Rull

Excellent

This was a heavy, well written chapter, my friend. The visions he saw were interesting and frightening. It held my attention well. I look forward to the next chapter. This is a bit scary, but it was excellent.

Always with respect.

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015

Many thank, Elgie. I'm glad you're getting into this. I don't think you read much of The Trining, so it's understandable you may feel a little disconnected with it's larger vision. Please come back, my good friend.

Comment from Tomes Johnston

Excellent

This is yet another interesting addition to the story that the author has created with this piece of work. The story continues to hold my interest and it will be interesting to see what happens next.

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015

Thank you, Tomes.

reply by Tomes Johnston on 09-Jul-2015

My pleasure

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Jay...

_ Whoohoo! My Doctrex is back!
_ I can see why he didn't want to close his eyes, whether he was seeing things or not---can't be good when one hurt so badly.
_ Great chapter encapsulating his dread.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015

Many thanks, Jax. I hope I can carry over the following my other stories gathered to this. I appreciate your rating and kindness, Jax. I tried to congratulate you for your second place showing in the book of the month, but it's not on your profile. So, congrats to you.

reply by Jacqueline M Franklin on 09-Jul-2015

Thanks. (*<*)

I don't think 2nd or 3rd place shows on the profile---just 1st place.

It would be nice if the runners up got an honorable mention or something at the bottom of their work/profile.

But, I'm pleased to have been in great company. (*<*)

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

I would provide the general's body and myself the proof of it.
( as proof? )

Thus unmindful, and mentally free-floating, I found (is the first comma necessary?)

Well written as always, Jay. I'm not sure about the above--I've been editing my children's book all day, and my brain is tired. I'm reading, hoping I wind down.

I always look forward to your work, and this does not dissapoint. Have a good night, my friend~Debbie

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 Comment Written 09-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015

I'm just happy to see you're reading this, Debbie. I'll check on the suggestions. I tend to agree with you on the comma. Thanks for pointing it out.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

A very internal episode, Doctrex appeared to die in inexorable pain, and was out, dead, then back in the body, hallucinating... Great descriptive episode Jay, hallucinations must be like that, then some sort of release, a most interesting part of the story, the imagination must be working, running in its own direction, great episode, my friend. Blessings, Roy.

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 Comment Written 09-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015

Thanks for reading, Roy. I'm a little uneasy about beginning the new chapters since they are so different from the shorter works I've gained a following from. Time will tell. Thank you for your loyalty and your kind rating.

reply by royowen on 09-Jul-2015

You're a great writer, you can't fail, too introspective,