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Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "He Leads Me"poems inspired by Psalm 23
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Comment from The Prince of Poetry
Short and sweet. Relatable as a Christian. It paints the picture of his grace perfectly when referring to Peter's denial and Christ's faithfullness. I really enjoyed this poem.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
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Short and sweet. Relatable as a Christian. It paints the picture of his grace perfectly when referring to Peter's denial and Christ's faithfullness. I really enjoyed this poem.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the shiny six stars. I appreciate your gracious comments and encouragement. I am so happy to hear you enjoyed it.
Comment from thomdble
The art work was stunning. A fantastic message delivered with authority and grace. This is the first Norwegian sonnet I have ever read (as far as I can remember) well done and may God bless you.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
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The art work was stunning. A fantastic message delivered with authority and grace. This is the first Norwegian sonnet I have ever read (as far as I can remember) well done and may God bless you.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the gracious review and kind words. I appreciate the encouragement.
Comment from waterartist707
I really enjoyed the entire poem. The flow felt right through the entire thing except the last line felt slightly out of place with the wording. I'm not sure if contrite fits. Other that than that, I think its beautiful.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
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I really enjoyed the entire poem. The flow felt right through the entire thing except the last line felt slightly out of place with the wording. I'm not sure if contrite fits. Other that than that, I think its beautiful.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
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Thank you for your kind review. Another reviewer felt it was the word "contrite" that threw off the rhythm. I looked it up and was surprised to find that some people say "contrite" with the emphasis on the first syllable and some on the second. To avoid confusion, I changed the word to "humble" which only has one pronounciation in the dictionary.
Thank you for the kind words of encouragement.
Comment from krys123
Debi;
+ Near notable alliteration's: /"storm and sorrow"/"dawn, deny"/"pay the price"/
+ Rhyming words are very contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore it is being neither forced nor labored and helpful in the rhythmic flow.
+ Rhythmic meter (pentameter), timing, cadence and tempo all are very helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and easy.
+ The picture was very relative and reflective and complementary to your poem as it showed the Tempest sea as it's related to the story paths our faith will take.
+ Imagery is outstanding and very distinct, exquisitely expressive in a vividly descriptive as it depicts the Bible's parables of Peter not being able to walk on water and having less faith and Peter denying thrice that he knew Jesus.
+ I must say thank you for sharing this Italian sonnet for your taught me a new sonnet to learn to write. And I enjoyed this writing because of its unique originality
in your imagination which was resourceful, inventive and ingeniously creative.
+ Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
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Debi;
+ Near notable alliteration's: /"storm and sorrow"/"dawn, deny"/"pay the price"/
+ Rhyming words are very contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore it is being neither forced nor labored and helpful in the rhythmic flow.
+ Rhythmic meter (pentameter), timing, cadence and tempo all are very helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and easy.
+ The picture was very relative and reflective and complementary to your poem as it showed the Tempest sea as it's related to the story paths our faith will take.
+ Imagery is outstanding and very distinct, exquisitely expressive in a vividly descriptive as it depicts the Bible's parables of Peter not being able to walk on water and having less faith and Peter denying thrice that he knew Jesus.
+ I must say thank you for sharing this Italian sonnet for your taught me a new sonnet to learn to write. And I enjoyed this writing because of its unique originality
in your imagination which was resourceful, inventive and ingeniously creative.
+ Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
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Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
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Hi Alex,
Thank you so much for the excellent review. I appreciate you taking the time to give such detailed analysis. I appreciate the encouragement.
Debi
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You are so sincerely welcome Debi.
Alex
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You are so sincerely welcome my dear friend.
Alex
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Debi,
Beautiful piece referencing scripture and reminding what He did for us all, no matter our sins and imperfections.
Well penned and presented with great artwork and formatting.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*:*)
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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
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Hi, Debi,
Beautiful piece referencing scripture and reminding what He did for us all, no matter our sins and imperfections.
Well penned and presented with great artwork and formatting.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*:*)
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Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
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Hi Jax,
Thank you for the wonderful comments and encouragment. I appreciate it.
Debi