Comment from judiverse

Excellent

Oh, my goodness. You probably know where anonymous lives, too. Dire threats in this, all laid out in grim detail. Love the rhyme, with the internal rhyme added as a bonus. This has a rollicking flow for such a menacing piece. You keep the mood throughout. Very scary. I wouldn't want to be Anonymous. judi

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2015

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Exceptional

Hey, Dean,

Whoohoo! You go, buckeye.

What a great rant. I've no doubt that anonymous deserves your wrath too, so crush them like the worm they are. (*<*)

Such a fine tuned write. WEll DONE!

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2015

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

I'd like to see that Donner party dance on Dancing with the Stars. Hmmm... A square dance with machetes. Very suitably chilling and if you happen to come across that dude who doled out attack ones and twos with nothing in his portfolio, tell him I said hi.

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2015

Comment from Neonewman

Excellent

LOL! Glad you know my damn name Dean! Just brilliantly penned as usual my friend. I loved the flow and the wording was quite embalming. Thank you for sharing this awesome piece.
God bless!
Steve

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2015

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

Uh ... I think you have the wrong number. I knew I should have let this go over to voice mail. But, what I said before was just a review, Dean. I was just trying to help. Besides, I'll give you back your star.

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2015

Hah, good enough, Jay. We will call it even...this time, heh-heh.

Thanks for the fun and entertaining review. I expect you to release that star you're holding hostage in no more than fifteen minutes.

I'll be watching... :)

~Dean

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Excellent poem Dean, yet again. This time in the genre you do so well. God rhyming couplets with near rhyme in breath/left, I think! Good inclusion, reference to the Donner Part - didn't they resort to cannibalism on their journey to California way back when? You start your poem by speaking to someone behind their mask of anonymity - later the writer says 'my name is Anonymity - repetition a little confusing? A mere detail on such a disgustingly well written poem. What does your wife make of these poems - is she slightly worried, wondering what's going on in that head of yours LOL. Warm regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2015

The narrator is just as anonymous as is the one he feels he was verbally attacked by, Dorothy. There-in lies the gist of this poem. Is the guy who's threatening the anonymous reviewer any better than the cad who reviewed him? I suppose that is left completely up to the discretion of those who care enough to read this poem.

As for my wife, she always gets the benefit of my gentler nature. However, she does read and offer critique on everything that I write. She's my biggest fan and staunchest critic. She doesn't understand my penchant for horror in the slightest, but she tolerates it. She never -- under any circumstances -- reads my work at night. She scares very easily, hence my gentle, easy-going nature I display when around her. Otherwise if I didn't, she'd probably kill me, bwa-ha-ha-a-a-a!

Thanks for the great feedback, my friend. ~Dean :)

reply by Dorothy Farrell on 04-Feb-2015

Great explanation Dean and as interesting as your poem LOL. You always give full measure and this piece of writing amused me. Regards Dorothy x

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

You are clearly NOT someone to piss off. These are some powerful threats that scare the bejesus out of me. I don't know how you do it but you continue to outdo your self. Excellent work with this deeply creepy one.

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2015

Thanks, Sasha. I just go with my gut instincts when an idea strikes me then sit down to start writing. Sometimes they come very naturally and easily, as this poem did, while other times days of rewrites and edits seem to go on endlessly. Like my entry into the site sponsored Share A Story In A Poem contest titled "I, Man!". That one took three months to where I got it to where I felt it needed to be to have a chance of winning. Time will tell...

Thanks very much for the great feedback. I appreciate it as always. ~Dean

Comment from Dustybones

Exceptional

Dean, you write creepy stuff, much like Dean Koontz, but creepier. Oh, that's a compliment by the way. Creepy is as Creepy does. LOL. I just thought of that line. I'm going to the 575 with that count of syllables.

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2015

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi Dean,

I hope this is the same one as before and not another!

Again superbly written, with a lot of menace. Anonymous, eh. That's just cowardice of the highest order. I have a few ideas myself, if you are interested but none probably as justified as yourself.

All the best
G

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2015

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

I'll keep it in mind not to ever make you mad at me.
I shiver to think of the consequences.Someone has riled you and all I can say is put down the ax and slowly face the wall
hands behind your back.. LOL Scared me Dean.Calm down! :<) Nancy

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2015