Is It The End?
How much worse does it need to get?37 total reviews
Comment from royowen
There's no doubt in my mind that things are completely different now to how they used to be, things now are much more "me" based than ever before, even a drover's dog knows that when "me" becomes more important than you or even we, society's on the skids. Well written piece, you make some good points, a good entry in this contest, clever using the words of the song, I couldn't find any spags, well done, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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There's no doubt in my mind that things are completely different now to how they used to be, things now are much more "me" based than ever before, even a drover's dog knows that when "me" becomes more important than you or even we, society's on the skids. Well written piece, you make some good points, a good entry in this contest, clever using the words of the song, I couldn't find any spags, well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Many thanks for your thoughts. These questions are very prevalent in society today. It can lead to wavering and abandonment all together from religion.
Something needs to redress the balance.
Many thanks. Much appreciated
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Most welcome
Comment from chasennov
How much worse does it need to get? "Is It The End?" This was a good attempt at having a beef and trying to question the balance which seems not to exist. Do I have the answers? Hell no. Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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How much worse does it need to get? "Is It The End?" This was a good attempt at having a beef and trying to question the balance which seems not to exist. Do I have the answers? Hell no. Well done.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Many thanks for the review. Much appreciated
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You are most welcome.
Comment from Dawn Munro
WOW! This is incredibly clever - I just happen to love Louis Armstrong and that tune, too. (*smile*) You've used it admirably. I'll bet Sachmo wouldn't see this comin'.
Before I offer this suggestion, I confess - punctuation is NOT my strong suit. However, I do think a comma is needed after "stronger" here -
1) "...before it becomes stronger(,) but..."
2) Likewise after "there is one(,) but", and any place similar to these two examples
3) "...and I worry if today's world (is) a..."
4) since you differentiate everywhere else, you don't want the quotation marks here - "I would crawl right over you."
5) A comma is needed after "Sincerely(,) with Reverence,"
I enjoyed this immensely! Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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WOW! This is incredibly clever - I just happen to love Louis Armstrong and that tune, too. (*smile*) You've used it admirably. I'll bet Sachmo wouldn't see this comin'.
Before I offer this suggestion, I confess - punctuation is NOT my strong suit. However, I do think a comma is needed after "stronger" here -
1) "...before it becomes stronger(,) but..."
2) Likewise after "there is one(,) but", and any place similar to these two examples
3) "...and I worry if today's world (is) a..."
4) since you differentiate everywhere else, you don't want the quotation marks here - "I would crawl right over you."
5) A comma is needed after "Sincerely(,) with Reverence,"
I enjoyed this immensely! Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Thanks Dawn I will look at these suggestions. Thanks for your thoughts. Much appreciated as always.
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You're very welcome. :)
Comment from Dean Kuch
Nice take on the prompt, as well as Louis Armstrong's classic tune, "What a Wonderful World", Anonymous.
I've often wondered many of the same things you expressed in this contest entry. Are the times we are now living a punishment of sorts for our sins and transgressions, our failure to care and tend to our earth and it's people in the proper manner?
Things to ponder...
Good luck to you in the contest. ~Dean
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Nice take on the prompt, as well as Louis Armstrong's classic tune, "What a Wonderful World", Anonymous.
I've often wondered many of the same things you expressed in this contest entry. Are the times we are now living a punishment of sorts for our sins and transgressions, our failure to care and tend to our earth and it's people in the proper manner?
Things to ponder...
Good luck to you in the contest. ~Dean
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Many thanks for your thoughts on this. It is very much appreciated
Comment from scd41
Your letter to God has been written with lot of frankness and it expresses deep concern about degeneration of His creation. You have adopted a novel style of writing this letter with questions put in quotation mark which are from 'What a Wonderful World'. Best of luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Your letter to God has been written with lot of frankness and it expresses deep concern about degeneration of His creation. You have adopted a novel style of writing this letter with questions put in quotation mark which are from 'What a Wonderful World'. Best of luck for the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Many thanks for your thoughts on this. it is very much appreciated
Comment from Eric1
This is a wonderful thought provoking entry for this Dear God competition, Your take on the old Louis Armstrong No1 is absolutely spot on, I once heard an Irishman singing a song with this title, the opening two lines were
I go to church on a Sunday
The vows that I make
I break them on Monday.
Says it all doesn't it, good luck in the contest my friend.
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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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This is a wonderful thought provoking entry for this Dear God competition, Your take on the old Louis Armstrong No1 is absolutely spot on, I once heard an Irishman singing a song with this title, the opening two lines were
I go to church on a Sunday
The vows that I make
I break them on Monday.
Says it all doesn't it, good luck in the contest my friend.
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Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Many thanks for your thoughts on this. I think it kind of sums up where we are at the minute. Much appreciated
Comment from Dopeless Hopefiend
A wonderful writing prompt entry. Truly conveying the current situation of man and their position on god. I enjoyed the take on what a wonderful world. A superb job.
Keep writing and best wishes,
-D.H
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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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A wonderful writing prompt entry. Truly conveying the current situation of man and their position on god. I enjoyed the take on what a wonderful world. A superb job.
Keep writing and best wishes,
-D.H
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Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Many thanks D.H. I think this is a realistic take on where we are. Much appreciated