Fleas
A sestina40 total reviews
Comment from Just2Write
Anyone who has tried to write a Sestina (with or without the benefit of Gin) knows how tough they are. Good for you to attack one in such a humourous way.
Loved the tone on this sestina - the timing and thought-stream impeccable.
Rose.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2014
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Anyone who has tried to write a Sestina (with or without the benefit of Gin) knows how tough they are. Good for you to attack one in such a humourous way.
Loved the tone on this sestina - the timing and thought-stream impeccable.
Rose.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2014
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What a lovely review, Rose. One day I may try another one. Perhaps in response to Poetry Mechanics #5...
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A sestina? Oh, no...
I love 'em - but even I'm not that cruel.
Rose.
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
I have no idea, Tony, whether or not you've succeeded in the mastery of this complex format, but you have entertained me riotously for several minutes; I damn near peed myself. Thank you. Kenny
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I have no idea, Tony, whether or not you've succeeded in the mastery of this complex format, but you have entertained me riotously for several minutes; I damn near peed myself. Thank you. Kenny
Comment Written 28-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2014
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I think mastery might take a mightier mind than mine, Kenny. Six stars for humor is honorable reward from the kelper.
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Fleas? Advantage plus.
Comment from GeorgieBoy
My goodness! What a complication! I so much enjoyed your poem. I can feel the poets frustration, and I wanted to assist in his scratching to stop the agony. So well done, my friend.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2014
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My goodness! What a complication! I so much enjoyed your poem. I can feel the poets frustration, and I wanted to assist in his scratching to stop the agony. So well done, my friend.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2014
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Ah, when I itchez, I scratchez, GeorgieBoy - but rarely when I scratchez do I come up with six stars. What a true delight! Almost like winning the lottery!
Comment from nancy_e_davis
That does not compute, that does not compute! Static , static! My poems go where they want to go and just drag me along for the fun of it. They make sure I rhyme so they can lead me astray, therefore I have no idea how to judge poems that do not rhyme. Especially the Sestina! LOL Well done (I think) Big Six for effort! Hugs. Nancy
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2014
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That does not compute, that does not compute! Static , static! My poems go where they want to go and just drag me along for the fun of it. They make sure I rhyme so they can lead me astray, therefore I have no idea how to judge poems that do not rhyme. Especially the Sestina! LOL Well done (I think) Big Six for effort! Hugs. Nancy
Comment Written 28-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2014
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I do enjoy your reviews, Nancy! I must say that, when I started this one, I did feel a bit as if I was working in binary code!
Comment from Domino 2
I haven't a clue whether you've followed the sestina rules in your notes, Tony, as I'd find rocket science easier to follow. :-)
I assume this is a piss-take of the form, but I could be wrong.
Anyway, I read it as very clever and funny.
Cheers, Ray
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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I haven't a clue whether you've followed the sestina rules in your notes, Tony, as I'd find rocket science easier to follow. :-)
I assume this is a piss-take of the form, but I could be wrong.
Anyway, I read it as very clever and funny.
Cheers, Ray
Comment Written 28-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Many thanks, Ray. You are right! A certain amount of piss-taking going on here!
Comment from mikemagine
Yes, poetry has lots of bugs to be worked out so much of the time! It's like trying to straighten tangled barbed wire...not much fun. I luv how you've eloquently described the difficulty/ies here!
Mike
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Yes, poetry has lots of bugs to be worked out so much of the time! It's like trying to straighten tangled barbed wire...not much fun. I luv how you've eloquently described the difficulty/ies here!
Mike
Comment Written 28-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thanks, Mike. I like your references to bugs and barbed wire!
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Lol. Yes, I've done PLENTY of itching and dressing cuts...:-)
Mike
Comment from Nosha17
I am afraid that is far too complex for my uncomplicated mind, I will leave it to the experts. You seem to have mastered it and confused the reader in the process!! That is not meant as a moan, just in jest. Fun, whimsical read about a pen, a flea and a poet! Faye
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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I am afraid that is far too complex for my uncomplicated mind, I will leave it to the experts. You seem to have mastered it and confused the reader in the process!! That is not meant as a moan, just in jest. Fun, whimsical read about a pen, a flea and a poet! Faye
Comment Written 28-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thanks, Nosha. I did try to take this seriously to start with but eventually took refuge in a bit of silliness!
Comment from Dean Kuch
Holy technical data over-load, Tony! I was almost forced to take a "Siesta" from trying to figure out the aspects of a "Sestina"! I awoke rather quickly, however, as I began reading and feeling the most unusual compunction to begin to scratch myself. No, not there! It was more my head, and back, than anything else that began to itch. Besides...my daughter's here in the room with me, and even if I had to...well, you know... scratch there, I fear i would have to discreetly sneak off to the lavatory to do so.
I'll bet that was your intent for this poem all along, to allow those fleas of fear fortuitously forsake our privacy and attack our pot brains.
If so, it worked, and quite brilliantly at that!
Good stuff, Tony, and an interesting format.
~Dean
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Holy technical data over-load, Tony! I was almost forced to take a "Siesta" from trying to figure out the aspects of a "Sestina"! I awoke rather quickly, however, as I began reading and feeling the most unusual compunction to begin to scratch myself. No, not there! It was more my head, and back, than anything else that began to itch. Besides...my daughter's here in the room with me, and even if I had to...well, you know... scratch there, I fear i would have to discreetly sneak off to the lavatory to do so.
I'll bet that was your intent for this poem all along, to allow those fleas of fear fortuitously forsake our privacy and attack our pot brains.
If so, it worked, and quite brilliantly at that!
Good stuff, Tony, and an interesting format.
~Dean
Comment Written 28-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thanks for your entertaining review, Dean. I confess to descending into the banal because I hadn't the patience to construct a serious attempt at this convoluted form. The French should stick to wine-making.
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Hah-ha, perhaps they should indeed, Tony.
I thought it was brilliant in its hilarity. I rather enjoyed it, myself, save for the constant scratching...LOL. ;}
Comment from c_lucas
I read through the author's notes three times and the poem twice. All I can say is your poem is well written without any errors. (spags) I'm befuddled.
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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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I read through the author's notes three times and the poem twice. All I can say is your poem is well written without any errors. (spags) I'm befuddled.
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Comment Written 28-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thanks, Charlie. I was a bit befuddled, too.
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LOL you're welcome, Tony. Charlie
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is hilarious Tony - lol. I've written one sestina in my life for a class. It is very difficult indeed to do but you did it and had fun with it:)
teresa
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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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This is hilarious Tony - lol. I've written one sestina in my life for a class. It is very difficult indeed to do but you did it and had fun with it:)
teresa
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Comment Written 28-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Many thanks, Teresa. I relapsed into a comic send-up as I hadn't the patience to write a serious one. It's a bit of a brain-twister!
