Writings From the Heart
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Comment from Just2Write
Oh Gary, this is so sad. Life and love - especially love can be so cruel. You capture the scene very well in this free verse. The memories of home and of his children a constant touch-stone in the isolated world of war.
The pain of the soldier, and the lash of his words are sweet revenge, but horrid in their intent. Folks do it all the time, but I find it so sad that anyone would give up their life for someone that no longer loved them.
The build up of the thoughts in the letter work really well.
Rose.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Oh Gary, this is so sad. Life and love - especially love can be so cruel. You capture the scene very well in this free verse. The memories of home and of his children a constant touch-stone in the isolated world of war.
The pain of the soldier, and the lash of his words are sweet revenge, but horrid in their intent. Folks do it all the time, but I find it so sad that anyone would give up their life for someone that no longer loved them.
The build up of the thoughts in the letter work really well.
Rose.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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thank you Rose
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is a really touching story in your poem. What started out as nice memories became sad as he knew his fate that lie ahead.
teresa
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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This is a really touching story in your poem. What started out as nice memories became sad as he knew his fate that lie ahead.
teresa
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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thank you Teresa
Comment from RYME4U
This is very emotional and sad. You have done a great job with the nostalgia. You have expressed the sadness and loneliness so well here. Excellent job!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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This is very emotional and sad. You have done a great job with the nostalgia. You have expressed the sadness and loneliness so well here. Excellent job!
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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thank you
Comment from Andrewajgblue
I loved this response to his letter, remembering all the good times and not sinking into bitterness and recriminations, i liked how at the end he allowed his broken heart to show, a great poem ,
Andrew
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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I loved this response to his letter, remembering all the good times and not sinking into bitterness and recriminations, i liked how at the end he allowed his broken heart to show, a great poem ,
Andrew
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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thanks Andrew
Comment from Karen B.
What a beautifully poignant response to a Dear John letter. Well written and I like how the response is not angry but filled with good memories shared from a broken heart. You've summed up what too many of our dear mean in uniform have been thru, and the picture gives it a timeless feeling. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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What a beautifully poignant response to a Dear John letter. Well written and I like how the response is not angry but filled with good memories shared from a broken heart. You've summed up what too many of our dear mean in uniform have been thru, and the picture gives it a timeless feeling. Nicely done.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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thank you Karen
Comment from Dom G Robles
A very touching letter. I enjoyed reading it from beginning to end. Very strong and powerful. It ran smoothly and the images are vivid, varied and strong. But if there is anything that me hard, it is the last part which says: "But now only to find your soul travels with another...this letter brings for me death this day." Very poignant. I recommend sending this letter to a magazine regarding soldiers at war.
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A very touching letter. I enjoyed reading it from beginning to end. Very strong and powerful. It ran smoothly and the images are vivid, varied and strong. But if there is anything that me hard, it is the last part which says: "But now only to find your soul travels with another...this letter brings for me death this day." Very poignant. I recommend sending this letter to a magazine regarding soldiers at war.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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again thank you Don
Comment from NicciFaye
Reflective and thoughts that dangle in the air. As a vet myself, I can relate. I can sympathize with the segments in this very deep and felt poem. It is an experienced upon experience or emotion well communicated that you've presented here.
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Reflective and thoughts that dangle in the air. As a vet myself, I can relate. I can sympathize with the segments in this very deep and felt poem. It is an experienced upon experience or emotion well communicated that you've presented here.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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thank you for this
Comment from DerivedBetter
This was good. Well written. I'm in the Navy though and I'm not quite sure that this is how that return letter would sound. A few more expletive remarks I would think. Thanks for sharing.
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This was good. Well written. I'm in the Navy though and I'm not quite sure that this is how that return letter would sound. A few more expletive remarks I would think. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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lol thanks
Comment from mrsmajor
The sadness you portray in this well written poem, is what I believe has happened to many of our young men, such a terrible letter to have received...bad enough you were in a foreign land fighting to protect your wife and children, then to have all your memories be the only thing you have left...
Hold on to your memories...they may be all you have for now...but not for the future...there's going to be someone for you once again
I don't know if this was a true story of not, if not, then I wish all the best to you...the writer.
Thanks for sharing..
Warmly,
Victoria
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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The sadness you portray in this well written poem, is what I believe has happened to many of our young men, such a terrible letter to have received...bad enough you were in a foreign land fighting to protect your wife and children, then to have all your memories be the only thing you have left...
Hold on to your memories...they may be all you have for now...but not for the future...there's going to be someone for you once again
I don't know if this was a true story of not, if not, then I wish all the best to you...the writer.
Thanks for sharing..
Warmly,
Victoria
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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thank you Victoria
You're very welcome!
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hi deepwater..Moving and morbid. A soldier has nothing, but memories to keep him warm. Hate those dear John letters because they hit to the core. Your work does great to hit the reality of war. "Whatever the army issued," that's my favorite line..Take care!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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Hi deepwater..Moving and morbid. A soldier has nothing, but memories to keep him warm. Hate those dear John letters because they hit to the core. Your work does great to hit the reality of war. "Whatever the army issued," that's my favorite line..Take care!
Comment Written 25-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2014
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thank you Ben
