Chasing the Elusive Dream
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "You Really Do See Stars"A southern couple's journey in the 60's,70's & 80'
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Comment from Spitfire
LOL ending on this. How resilient and delightful young children can be. What a nightmare-having to move so fast, then having the tenants change their mind. Oh well, as Forest Gump said, "Life is a box of chocolates.." you know the rest. Good write, Beth.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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LOL ending on this. How resilient and delightful young children can be. What a nightmare-having to move so fast, then having the tenants change their mind. Oh well, as Forest Gump said, "Life is a box of chocolates.." you know the rest. Good write, Beth.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the review. I'm glad you found the ending funny. Moving is always a nightmare for me. I don't know how to declutter and I keep accumulating more and more stuff that most people would discard. I tend not to worry about packing on anything like that until I'm pushed into a corner.
Beth
Comment from madhatter1977
Really interesting read about moving to a bigger house and the problems this brings. There was interest in the rush to get moving and the accident with the son as well. I enjoyed reading it and loved the last line. Best wishes, Pete
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Really interesting read about moving to a bigger house and the problems this brings. There was interest in the rush to get moving and the accident with the son as well. I enjoyed reading it and loved the last line. Best wishes, Pete
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thank you Pete. I really appreciate the review and nice comments. I'm so glad you enjoyed this story.
Beth
Comment from James Chaima Phiri
I liked the conversation between the husband and his wife. This is the best example of a couple which plans and works as a team. I was disappointed when the renters decided that they did not want the house. I smiled when Don talked about stars. This is a nice story.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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I liked the conversation between the husband and his wife. This is the best example of a couple which plans and works as a team. I was disappointed when the renters decided that they did not want the house. I smiled when Don talked about stars. This is a nice story.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much James. I really appreciate the review and the insightful comments. I'm so glad you liked it.
Beth
Comment from thequeencatalyst
This is magnificent! I've never moved from house to house in my life, but I can still relate to the emotions your characters produce in this work! You bring life to each person and your words form a fantastic tapestry of human nature. This is beautiful and I love the way you incorporated the title into the work. A big, fat, marvellous kudos to you!
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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This is magnificent! I've never moved from house to house in my life, but I can still relate to the emotions your characters produce in this work! You bring life to each person and your words form a fantastic tapestry of human nature. This is beautiful and I love the way you incorporated the title into the work. A big, fat, marvellous kudos to you!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the six star review and for you lovely comments. I really enjoyed reading what you wrote.
Beth
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Well, I wouldn't say things like this if they weren't true!
- Jasmine May
Comment from danielleurban24
Amaizing dialog. keeps readers wanting more.excellent characterization. characters are life like. story development should be longer. great story plot. feels real. reafers can connect with the characters.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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Amaizing dialog. keeps readers wanting more.excellent characterization. characters are life like. story development should be longer. great story plot. feels real. reafers can connect with the characters.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the review, I'm wondering why the four star rating instead of five since your only suggestion is that it could be longer. I can't make it longer because it is a chapter of much longer book. This is longer than most of the chapters need to be.
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ooh okay. well then know it was amazing. is it possible to re- review the same piece. if so ill give you the five you very well deserve. and thank you! i enjoyed reading it.
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Thank you so much. I really appreciate you changing the rating.
Smiles.
Beth
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i did it because its what ur writin deserved. and your welcome. hope my new rating helps you win on here!!!! :)
Comment from adewpearl
typo - we could go ahead A move in
Look how much different there is - difference
rented a U-hall - haul
stairs always worried me when my kids were smaller - at a certain age they seem incapable of being cautious :-)
You explain the various problems in outgrowing a house and in finding new, suitable, affordable accommodations well :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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typo - we could go ahead A move in
Look how much different there is - difference
rented a U-hall - haul
stairs always worried me when my kids were smaller - at a certain age they seem incapable of being cautious :-)
You explain the various problems in outgrowing a house and in finding new, suitable, affordable accommodations well :-) Brooke
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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Thank you Brooke. You are so good at spotting the typo I seem to miss no matter how many times I read it. I appreciate the thoughtful comments.
Beth
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it's a curse LOL I can't read a published book without finding the little typos either, even when I just want to enjoy myself with the book :-)
Comment from nancy_e_davis
OMG, I had the same problem with the son on the couch. I had to laugh at that statement he made about stars because it happened to me. I was pulling a great big nail out with a claw hammer. It was above my head and I was on a ldder. When it gave teh hammer hit me in the forehead and i saw stars just befor I passed out and fell off the ladder. This sounds so much like our history it is funny. I am enjoying it. Nancy
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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OMG, I had the same problem with the son on the couch. I had to laugh at that statement he made about stars because it happened to me. I was pulling a great big nail out with a claw hammer. It was above my head and I was on a ldder. When it gave teh hammer hit me in the forehead and i saw stars just befor I passed out and fell off the ladder. This sounds so much like our history it is funny. I am enjoying it. Nancy
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much, Nancy, for the review and for sharing your story with me. I've never seen the stars, but I'm glad you confirmed that they are really there. Your accident sounds horrible. It is funny that some of our history coincides with yours.
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I guess that's just life. .
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
And I thought we had a crazy time moving! Yikes! But hopefully they came back to finish the job and it turned out great.
I love his comment about the stars. Leave it to kids to make life simple. :)
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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And I thought we had a crazy time moving! Yikes! But hopefully they came back to finish the job and it turned out great.
I love his comment about the stars. Leave it to kids to make life simple. :)
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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Thank you Phyllis. Yes, the job did get finished. The problem was we only got to live there two years before my husband was transfered. I will be writing more.
Beth
Comment from lindalcreel
What a cute and appropriate last line from Don. Plans don't always seem to go the way that you want them to. Even the best thought out, can go wrong. I have a feeling they will find another couple to rent the old house and that will take some of the pressure off to complete the new one. This is a cute story, but I'm certain there's still a lot more to tell. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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What a cute and appropriate last line from Don. Plans don't always seem to go the way that you want them to. Even the best thought out, can go wrong. I have a feeling they will find another couple to rent the old house and that will take some of the pressure off to complete the new one. This is a cute story, but I'm certain there's still a lot more to tell. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and the great comments. Yes, there is more. This will be the twenty-first chapter but it will continue for a while. Thanks for reading.
Beth
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Welcome:)
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh my!!! He could actually see stars. I know Don wants his own room bad. Once again I really enjoy following this story. I think it's a must read for young couples.
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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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Oh my!!! He could actually see stars. I know Don wants his own room bad. Once again I really enjoy following this story. I think it's a must read for young couples.
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Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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Thank you Barbara. I really appreciate the review and comments. I guess young couples might realize some of the things they are in for if they read my story but it probably wouldn't stop them. I would do it all over again.
Beth
