Chasing the Elusive Dream
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "The Help"A southern couple's journey in the 60's,70's & 80'
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Comment from marre5
You have a good way of telling a story, simply and directly. We feel the tension in worrying about providing for the family, possible layoffs, etc.
Some typos: change to "one of the largest companies." and "he never seemed to get past" and "What did you call her?" and "feelings" and "times" (no apostrophe).
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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2013
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You have a good way of telling a story, simply and directly. We feel the tension in worrying about providing for the family, possible layoffs, etc.
Some typos: change to "one of the largest companies." and "he never seemed to get past" and "What did you call her?" and "feelings" and "times" (no apostrophe).
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Comment Written 15-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for your review on my story. I really appreciate you pointing out the spags and typos without deducting form the five star rating.
Beth
Comment from cinderbella
This piece of writing is very illuminating. I did not find it to be dramatic, which I know was not the intent, but it is a very sincere and heartfelt story. Well-written, and entertaining, it makes me want to find more of your story and read it. I like the picture. Good luck with your work.
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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2013
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This piece of writing is very illuminating. I did not find it to be dramatic, which I know was not the intent, but it is a very sincere and heartfelt story. Well-written, and entertaining, it makes me want to find more of your story and read it. I like the picture. Good luck with your work.
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Comment Written 15-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the review and comments. You probably realize this is an essay, and not a fictional story meant to be dramatic. Anything less than five stars usually means the reviewer will give suggestions as to how the story can be improved. If you have no suggestions for improvement, maybe you'd consider a better rating.
Beth
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Sorry Beth, I did not mean to sound negative, I was fully aware the intent was not to create drama. I think your writing is great, I will gladly improve the rating to a five. I am very new to this site and thank you for pointing that out to me.
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Thank you so much. I do appreciate that and hope you'll continue to read my story. You might enjoy "Battleing the Baby Blues" which is still active. It has more humor in it than this one.
Beth
