Chasing the Elusive Dream
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Comment from patsolstad
I enjoyed this very much. You are a fine writer and this chapter held my interest throughout. Just a couple of SPAGs: I don't believe 'art department' should be capitalized; die-making (hyphenate); hands-on (hyphenate); ;...into the office...' (you left out 'the'); and did you mean to say gasped, rather than grasped? Great work...
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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I enjoyed this very much. You are a fine writer and this chapter held my interest throughout. Just a couple of SPAGs: I don't believe 'art department' should be capitalized; die-making (hyphenate); hands-on (hyphenate); ;...into the office...' (you left out 'the'); and did you mean to say gasped, rather than grasped? Great work...
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and nice comments. I really appreciate you finding those spags for me. I find it difficult to edit my own work, even though I worked as a proof reader once.
Beth
Comment from judiverse
Some men just can't control themselves. Obviously, the drinking only made Floyd's advances to you worse. You seemed to handle yourself very well throughout this, but you seemed to think you were partly to blame for his continued attentions. It's surely easier for women now, with the regulations in place regarding behavior like Floyd's. Very well told, Your comments about the workplace being like a jungle for young women at that time were excellent. judi
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Some men just can't control themselves. Obviously, the drinking only made Floyd's advances to you worse. You seemed to handle yourself very well throughout this, but you seemed to think you were partly to blame for his continued attentions. It's surely easier for women now, with the regulations in place regarding behavior like Floyd's. Very well told, Your comments about the workplace being like a jungle for young women at that time were excellent. judi
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much Judi. I really appreciate the review and comments. I was still pretty naive and since some like that had happened before, I had to wonder if if I had somehow encouraged it. Just the two of us, working in such close circumstances put us together too many hours during day. It would have been hard not to try to be friends.
Beth
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You are so welcome. It seemed to me that you really hadn't done anything wrong. We hear every day about men who need absolutely no encouragement to behave like that. judi
Comment from kiwijenny
This is well written and sincere....how hard to be both young .pregnant and the object of a drunk man's obsession ... I am glad your husband understood.....well done
God bless
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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This is well written and sincere....how hard to be both young .pregnant and the object of a drunk man's obsession ... I am glad your husband understood.....well done
God bless
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and understanding comments.
I really appreciate you reading this.
Beth
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is interesting. I think it will resonate with many women readers. I've been serenaded by someone drunk before, even though all I was doing was sitting in bleachers watching children I was in charge of. It might strengthen the composition to have another dialogue exchange, say with what Evan would have said when Floyd called on a repeated occasion.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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This is interesting. I think it will resonate with many women readers. I've been serenaded by someone drunk before, even though all I was doing was sitting in bleachers watching children I was in charge of. It might strengthen the composition to have another dialogue exchange, say with what Evan would have said when Floyd called on a repeated occasion.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much Crystie. I really appreciate your reveiw and comments. I think you are probably right. That type of dialogue would be helpful. The truth is, when my husband is upset, he grows strangely quiet and doesn't say anything. I put off telling him as long as possible because I hate that reaction.
Beth
Comment from Matoshka
I really enjoyed your chapter Beth. I think a lot of women can relate to situation, I know I can. I could feel all the anxiety and tension and the grief of losing a child. This is so well written. It is a message too for other women, sometimes the only way to get out is to leave. I'm grateful you had another daughter. Many Blessings
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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I really enjoyed your chapter Beth. I think a lot of women can relate to situation, I know I can. I could feel all the anxiety and tension and the grief of losing a child. This is so well written. It is a message too for other women, sometimes the only way to get out is to leave. I'm grateful you had another daughter. Many Blessings
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and the great comments. I'm thankful I had another daughter too. She was a life saver.
Beth
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You are most welcome Beth, and yes you were blessed with another daughter, I think the Lord say your broken heart and tears. Many blessings and peace.
Comment from firdousy
Really an awkward situation. I have learnt a very good lesson from this story..Sometimes some men just misinterpret women's friendly behavior.
However the the story is very good and naration is also good an easy.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Really an awkward situation. I have learnt a very good lesson from this story..Sometimes some men just misinterpret women's friendly behavior.
However the the story is very good and naration is also good an easy.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I guess it could work the other way around as well. Men and women don't think alike and as a result they can never know for sure what the other is thinking. If they are drinking their judgement is even more clouded.
Beth
Comment from Terror2s
Great story and I didn't find any errors. I imagine that both men and women have fielded unwanted advances in the workplace. Thanks for sharing. T2
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Great story and I didn't find any errors. I imagine that both men and women have fielded unwanted advances in the workplace. Thanks for sharing. T2
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and the comments. I'm sure you are right about the unwanted advances for both men and women.
Beth
Comment from trimple
Hi there Beth
I enjoyed reading about your early life as a twenty three year old suffering at the hands of an intoxicated collegue.
You must have been put into a pretty difficult situation indeed. One thing that stood out for me particularly was your concern regarding what your husband may have thought. "I hesitated about telling Evan. What if he thought I'd led this man on?" I may well be wrong here, but this suggests to me that you didn't know your husband very well. Or that you had a low opinion of yourself. In either case, or not, your story certainly encourages the reader to follow the chapters of your book.
I found your style of writing to have great clarity and read very smoothly.
Kindest regards
trimple :)
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Hi there Beth
I enjoyed reading about your early life as a twenty three year old suffering at the hands of an intoxicated collegue.
You must have been put into a pretty difficult situation indeed. One thing that stood out for me particularly was your concern regarding what your husband may have thought. "I hesitated about telling Evan. What if he thought I'd led this man on?" I may well be wrong here, but this suggests to me that you didn't know your husband very well. Or that you had a low opinion of yourself. In either case, or not, your story certainly encourages the reader to follow the chapters of your book.
I found your style of writing to have great clarity and read very smoothly.
Kindest regards
trimple :)
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and the nice comments. As to telling Evan, maybe I knew him too well. I did know he'd feel that he was obligated to do something and he wouldn't be quite sure what it was he should. Of course I didn't bring that into the story. I felt uncomfortable about putting him in that position. Thanks for reading.
Beth
Comment from Spitfire
Is that a picture of you? If so, no wonder he made a pass! I loved what you said when he kissed you. A scolding that wouldn't threaten. Dirty old man! This a well-told story of sexual harassment in the workplace. This put you in a difficult position at a bad time in your life.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Is that a picture of you? If so, no wonder he made a pass! I loved what you said when he kissed you. A scolding that wouldn't threaten. Dirty old man! This a well-told story of sexual harassment in the workplace. This put you in a difficult position at a bad time in your life.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Thanks for the review and comments. No that isn't me but I wasn't bad looking. I was very pregnant and I don't understand why a man would attracted to a pregnant lady.
Beth
Comment from joneau2
A very insightful story, which I take is based on your working experiences early in your career. Although matters have gotten better, I suppose, there's no doubt that the harassment still goes on today (just look at the most recent military cases). I enjoy your easy going writing style. You're obviously a gifted writer.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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A very insightful story, which I take is based on your working experiences early in your career. Although matters have gotten better, I suppose, there's no doubt that the harassment still goes on today (just look at the most recent military cases). I enjoy your easy going writing style. You're obviously a gifted writer.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and the nice compliments. Yes this is my story and you are right. Things have changed some but not nearly enough.
Beth
