Cellophane Child
a fairy story ... without fairies ... (2321 words)66 total reviews
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is pretty interesting. Sometimes we need very quiet protagonists to remember what's important in life. It seems like this story plays out a keen sense of justice in the sense that "it served them right" when it comes to the two specific male characters.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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This is pretty interesting. Sometimes we need very quiet protagonists to remember what's important in life. It seems like this story plays out a keen sense of justice in the sense that "it served them right" when it comes to the two specific male characters.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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I always did have a keen sense of justice Crystie - thx for noticing! :))Sharyn
Comment from Selina Stambi
You unbelievably creative lady, Twinnie!
I'm not allowed any more sixes for you - here's a virtual one xxxxx
Just beautiful - what poetic justice ... literally!
Hugs xxx
Purple is also the symbol of royalty ....
He was playing that very nasty rap music - you know the kind I mean - very disrespectful to mothers.... feel your heartbeat here, sister!
So that's how the law came about .... !!
Spags:
pop out into not(h)ing
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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You unbelievably creative lady, Twinnie!
I'm not allowed any more sixes for you - here's a virtual one xxxxx
Just beautiful - what poetic justice ... literally!
Hugs xxx
Purple is also the symbol of royalty ....
He was playing that very nasty rap music - you know the kind I mean - very disrespectful to mothers.... feel your heartbeat here, sister!
So that's how the law came about .... !!
Spags:
pop out into not(h)ing
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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thx for catching that spag! No one else noticed! Damn - just when you think you have everything, too! Glad you enjoyed this one - it started out as an entry for the 500 word thing, but it sort of had other plans ... glad you enjoyed brilliant-Twin! And I'll take your virtual 6 any time!
:)S
Comment from Spitfire
Excellent job of suspending the reader's belief. I'm wearing my purple blouse now until my hives go away! You also built in the reason Miranda ended up marrying a jerk like her Dad. Deja vu at the end except for the change of color. I do hope no birds were hurt while creating this plot. LOL
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Excellent job of suspending the reader's belief. I'm wearing my purple blouse now until my hives go away! You also built in the reason Miranda ended up marrying a jerk like her Dad. Deja vu at the end except for the change of color. I do hope no birds were hurt while creating this plot. LOL
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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aah, didn't like the change of color, hmm? How about if she received the package, and as it passed into her hands (or as she opened it) she could see it TURNING from purple to yellow????
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You misinterpreted what I said. The color yellow is fine. I meant that it was parallel to earlier events except this time the scarf was yellow.
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ooh,ok! Didn't get that - I thought you were scratching your head over the color change! Bummer - I just changed it, too. Oh well ... I actually rather like it ... :)))
Comment from MercyWraith
Absolutely amazing. I loved this. I have to say this might actually be on eof the very best stories I have read on here. Miranda seemed so real, so ethereal. I loved your use of colors in this as well, it is not something many know about. Thank you for sharing this wonderful story.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Absolutely amazing. I loved this. I have to say this might actually be on eof the very best stories I have read on here. Miranda seemed so real, so ethereal. I loved your use of colors in this as well, it is not something many know about. Thank you for sharing this wonderful story.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Well bless you for enjoying my piece, Mercy, and for your lovely review and magic six! Love your high praise and very much appreciate your feedback.
Blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh dear friend this is a wild ride. Such a wonderful ending. Absolutely the best surprise I have read. I usually shoot for them too but you have me topped
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Oh dear friend this is a wild ride. Such a wonderful ending. Absolutely the best surprise I have read. I usually shoot for them too but you have me topped
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Glad you came along for the ride Barb - I have NO idea where this one came from - started out as a quickie 500 word entry but it just kept on going ... I had fun - glad you did too!
:)Sharyn
Comment from josieg521
Very inventive and creative. We would all love to have the protection of the gods in whatever form we can get it. Good job. I totally enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Very inventive and creative. We would all love to have the protection of the gods in whatever form we can get it. Good job. I totally enjoyed it.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Agreed! Thx so much Josie!
:)Sharyn
Comment from jobax
Riveting story with a fantastic opening. The story line continues unabated in action and the detail in the Edgar Cayce type psychic phenomena. For those who like psychic stories and for those unfamiliar with the genre, the story is captivating. One typo error- toherself. Misogyny is also an interesting subject to captivate people. A great read!
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Riveting story with a fantastic opening. The story line continues unabated in action and the detail in the Edgar Cayce type psychic phenomena. For those who like psychic stories and for those unfamiliar with the genre, the story is captivating. One typo error- toherself. Misogyny is also an interesting subject to captivate people. A great read!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much John - I got that typo early on, thank goodness. There's always SOMETHING, isn't there!
So glad you enjoyed it - short stories are something I'm still learning about!
:) Sharyn
Comment from fairy77
WoW!That was amazing and very original:)I really liked the magic part and the plan accident. I enjoyed it and it held my attention.Virtual six.Sore stomach:(beth fairy77.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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WoW!That was amazing and very original:)I really liked the magic part and the plan accident. I enjoyed it and it held my attention.Virtual six.Sore stomach:(beth fairy77.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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oh poor Beth - are you okay?? Thx so much for reviewing and still enjoying dear. Get better soon, ok?
:)Sharyn
Comment from GregoryCody
Wow this is such a fantastic read. Completely threw a twist. Its SO beautiful. SO WEIRD because it reminds me of a dream I had! Your piece is so descriptive, it paints such a pretty picture in every scene. I love your dialogue as well. I also very much like the "color" references. Such a great story. I wish I had a six, or a seven ;) I loved this.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Wow this is such a fantastic read. Completely threw a twist. Its SO beautiful. SO WEIRD because it reminds me of a dream I had! Your piece is so descriptive, it paints such a pretty picture in every scene. I love your dialogue as well. I also very much like the "color" references. Such a great story. I wish I had a six, or a seven ;) I loved this.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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oh good! I'm so glad you loved this one, Greg. I really have no idea where this came from. We've done a lot of the metaphysical Lazaris work, so every time I take off in a plane, I think of it as being bubbled in purple light (so I don't crash, right?) ... heaven only knows how a story rose from there!
Blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from vkmack
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Oh, how I wish I could give this six, sixty, six hundred, sixty-six thousand stars! Sharyn, your talent astounds me. You shifted from tragically to mysticism to fairy tale, and I held my breath all the way. Not for a moment did I waver in my quest to follow our magical Miranda on her path. Everything here works, and your style, your language, your phrasing, all of it, just flows through and reads as though you Miranda were recounting the story to her new husband in the not too distant future. I'm sure Prince Charming would understand. You've written some incredible things for posting here, but this is the best I've seen on the site--period. It's among the best I've seen.
Fantastic. Go forth and write some more! I'm anxious to read it.
Thanks for this lovely break from my hectic and a bit out-of-control-for-now life. Loved it!
Vista Kay
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Oh, how I wish I could give this six, sixty, six hundred, sixty-six thousand stars! Sharyn, your talent astounds me. You shifted from tragically to mysticism to fairy tale, and I held my breath all the way. Not for a moment did I waver in my quest to follow our magical Miranda on her path. Everything here works, and your style, your language, your phrasing, all of it, just flows through and reads as though you Miranda were recounting the story to her new husband in the not too distant future. I'm sure Prince Charming would understand. You've written some incredible things for posting here, but this is the best I've seen on the site--period. It's among the best I've seen.
Fantastic. Go forth and write some more! I'm anxious to read it.
Thanks for this lovely break from my hectic and a bit out-of-control-for-now life. Loved it!
Vista Kay
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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wow! vk!! thank you so much for your awesome reaction and review to my story! I have a big grin now to go with my 2nd morning cup of coffee!
Blessings
Sharyn