Comment from Treischel

Excellent

Very well done entry into the Six Line poem contest. The sexy picture certainly lays the foundation like a silken snare. The four words definitely describe. The last two lines where the leering old men could only wish are exquisite.

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012

I'm flattered what a great review. Thanks so much

Comment from Titanx9

Excellent

I don't think you are too far off with your analysis of the situation - lol. You definitely have the form and structure of the writing instructions correct. Good luck in the contest, this is a well-written piece.

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012

thanks for the read and comment

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

this is absolutely fine i think. not that i'm an expert on anything. but now it makes you laugh! i think you hit the parameter now.
rebekka x

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 Comment Written 28-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012

I did Fixed it Thanks for the read

reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012

thanks so much I'LL work on ot

reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012

take a look thanks

Comment from ocruickshank

Excellent

I love the imagery, great choice. The poem peaked my interest but seems incomplete because you're missing another 9 syllable line according to the rules contained in the authors notes - add a line to increase rating. Good luck in contest.

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 Comment Written 28-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012

Fixed it thanks for the read