All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Alone in Paris"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Dawn Munro
Sssssizzling! How did I miss this? Oh my, sister, you are hot! This poem was marvelous my friend - I swear my heartbeat increased! No wonder you won! Congrats you little minx! Love, Dawn ;0) (Still no sixes for this sexy poem!! Sheesh!)
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2012
Sssssizzling! How did I miss this? Oh my, sister, you are hot! This poem was marvelous my friend - I swear my heartbeat increased! No wonder you won! Congrats you little minx! Love, Dawn ;0) (Still no sixes for this sexy poem!! Sheesh!)
Comment Written 05-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2012
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aaaah you found it! when something is in a competition, you don't get notification of it as a "new release" ... as you can tell, I had fun with this one! :)))))
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Hahaha - I know - it happened with my work before as well! I didn't even look to see if it was a blind entry previously!
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
Every woman's fantasy in poetic form! A great piece of romantic verse. Congratulations on the win! Obviously well deserved. Leaves the reader, as you said in your author's notes, feeling a cold bath is in order. Great job!
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2012
Every woman's fantasy in poetic form! A great piece of romantic verse. Congratulations on the win! Obviously well deserved. Leaves the reader, as you said in your author's notes, feeling a cold bath is in order. Great job!
Comment Written 05-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2012
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Thanks so much MW - glad to have you along for a fun write!
Blessings,
Sharyn
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You're welcome. Great piece of poetry! :)
Comment from Spitfire
Wow! This is so erotic. Easy to see why you won. Slowly you draw the reader into your encounter with a stranger in the most romantic of cities- Paris. Great drama with the repetition of I don't know you. The baby steps leading up the climax (pun intended). Favorite "stage direction":
I know you're luscious
like chocolate - try this one now
between my teeth
feel me ... taste me
breathe me in
Mention chocolate and you got me. LOL
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2012
Wow! This is so erotic. Easy to see why you won. Slowly you draw the reader into your encounter with a stranger in the most romantic of cities- Paris. Great drama with the repetition of I don't know you. The baby steps leading up the climax (pun intended). Favorite "stage direction":
I know you're luscious
like chocolate - try this one now
between my teeth
feel me ... taste me
breathe me in
Mention chocolate and you got me. LOL
Comment Written 05-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2012
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oh you're so EASY spits! :)
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:-)
Comment from Grammies
Excellent poem. Love the descriptive passion in the words and the picture for the poem is hilarious. Thank you for bringing wit and fun to this work.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2012
Excellent poem. Love the descriptive passion in the words and the picture for the poem is hilarious. Thank you for bringing wit and fun to this work.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2012
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Thx Grammies - this was a totally fun write! :)
Comment from donaldww
Ou la la!
I love your poem about being alone in Paris. Instead of showing us the Eiffel Tower and Champs Elise, you meet someone and it is steamy and dreamy. Full of passion and in your kisser.
It's a tall order.
Bespoke to the yoke!
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
Ou la la!
I love your poem about being alone in Paris. Instead of showing us the Eiffel Tower and Champs Elise, you meet someone and it is steamy and dreamy. Full of passion and in your kisser.
It's a tall order.
Bespoke to the yoke!
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Mais merci beaucoup mon cher! Who could resist such a prompt as this one? And a special "merci" for your magic '6' my dear! I'm really glad you enjoyed some steam with me! Blessings, Sharyn
Comment from Val Crisson
Wow! Love it, and love Paris an Parisians. This is such a hot and romantic piece, without being vulgar. I love the juicy peach part the best. Fabulous and well deserved win
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
Wow! Love it, and love Paris an Parisians. This is such a hot and romantic piece, without being vulgar. I love the juicy peach part the best. Fabulous and well deserved win
Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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thx so much Val - I had fun with this one! :) Sharyn
Comment from kiwigirl2821
You have definitely written a first place entry with this strikingly passionate piece of art. I love the way you let the words drift and then sweep your reader along. It's beautifully passion's heart. Loved it and congrats on the first place win.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
You have definitely written a first place entry with this strikingly passionate piece of art. I love the way you let the words drift and then sweep your reader along. It's beautifully passion's heart. Loved it and congrats on the first place win.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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thx Kiwi - this one was a lot of fun! :) S
Comment from Littlegirl38732
That is as passionate as it can get! I loved it! I love the flow of it. I love every word. This poem is delicious! I cannot wait to see more of your stuff. I enjoy it so much. Best wishes to you!
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
That is as passionate as it can get! I loved it! I love the flow of it. I love every word. This poem is delicious! I cannot wait to see more of your stuff. I enjoy it so much. Best wishes to you!
Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Well I had a lot of fun writing it Lg! So thank YOU very much for loving it with me! Blessings, Sharyn
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Oh boy, need a very long cold shower. I remember that picture I used it in one of my hotter pieces:)
Your poem was delicious and delivers everything in one fluid rush.
Congrats on winning the contest I can see whey.
Brilliant work dear Sharyn.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
Oh boy, need a very long cold shower. I remember that picture I used it in one of my hotter pieces:)
Your poem was delicious and delivers everything in one fluid rush.
Congrats on winning the contest I can see whey.
Brilliant work dear Sharyn.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much Maureen - I LOVED that pic! so difficult to find hot, seductive, tasteful pictures - everything led me to dating services! GRRR! nothing much on photobucket either , that I could find - maybe I'm looking in the wrong places! Glad you enjoyed my "hottie" - I still have yours book-cased somewhere, because I remember them as being gorgeous. How ARE you lovely lady? I'm so happy to hear from you.
hugs
sharyn
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keep improving and I've got my neck wrapped in ice packs to try and bring down the swelling. Ice chips to soothe the burn inside. I was ready for a cold shower after your poem:)
Loving hugs.
Maureen
I think you have inspired me, may have to write a hot one just to have a change of pace:)
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I LOVE your "hot" ones!!!!
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and what the heck's going on with your neck???
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That's where the cancer is...so it swells and burns on the inside. Which makes it swell on the outside too. Lost my voice again...made the children happy :)
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are you in radiation tx??
Comment from Oldsteamer
My goodness! I don't know where to start. " play the world for us " made me sit up. The fact it takes place in France scores a point.
That it's an interlude with a stranger is a couple of points .
Now we get to the peach. The glorious peach.
I shall never look at a peach the same way again.
Your slave,
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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
My goodness! I don't know where to start. " play the world for us " made me sit up. The fact it takes place in France scores a point.
That it's an interlude with a stranger is a couple of points .
Now we get to the peach. The glorious peach.
I shall never look at a peach the same way again.
Your slave,
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Comment Written 04-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2012
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Well YOU are a peach, with your lovely '6' for me, my dear!!! Merci beaucoup!!! Who could resist a Parisian Passion fling???