Swan Dive
A Reflective Sonnet37 total reviews
Comment from Charlene0513
A contest entry that identifies the humility and hurt that a woman experiences when she discovers that there is no foundation for their love.
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2012
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A contest entry that identifies the humility and hurt that a woman experiences when she discovers that there is no foundation for their love.
The right to own opinion drained and bled
The right to own opinion(s) (are) drained and bled-suggestion
Charlene
Comment Written 14-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2012
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Thanks so much for the thoughtful review Charlene
I appreciate the suggestion but there is a syllable count involved so just have to watch that but I'll take a look.
Much appreciated.
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Comment from vfbryant
I see this as not only a depiction of someone with self-worth issues, but even more as a poem about a person with a cruel selfish streak that is fed by intimidating others (or perhaps only one). You could not have described the scenario any more perfectly. These are the kinds of people who should be avoided like Lyme Disease, since the cycle of low self-worth, intimidation, more loss of self esteem, then more condemnation, continues until the "victim" breaks the cycle. Excellent poem.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2012
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I see this as not only a depiction of someone with self-worth issues, but even more as a poem about a person with a cruel selfish streak that is fed by intimidating others (or perhaps only one). You could not have described the scenario any more perfectly. These are the kinds of people who should be avoided like Lyme Disease, since the cycle of low self-worth, intimidation, more loss of self esteem, then more condemnation, continues until the "victim" breaks the cycle. Excellent poem.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2012
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Indeed you perceive my poem correctly. Its the other person and the reflection as well. Many thanks for your supportive comments and thoughtful review.
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Comment from Selestia
This is really great. As you said, it is something anyone can relate to somehow. I like the first stanza. I've known that feeling all too often in my life. When a person is comfortable in his/her own skin, it doesn't matter what other people see because you see your true self. Great job.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2012
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This is really great. As you said, it is something anyone can relate to somehow. I like the first stanza. I've known that feeling all too often in my life. When a person is comfortable in his/her own skin, it doesn't matter what other people see because you see your true self. Great job.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2012
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Thanks so much. Most appreciate your thoughtful review.
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Comment from Heaven Bound
Really nicely done. I can't see anything to make any comments about. I like the way you tell the message, and I really like the "right" picture to go with your words.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2012
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Really nicely done. I can't see anything to make any comments about. I like the way you tell the message, and I really like the "right" picture to go with your words.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2012
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Thanks very much. Most appreciate your review
Comment from ArmyWife07
This was really good and seemed very personal so thank you for sharing. It's upsetting when we let people inflict on who we are and how we view ourselves but I think it happens to the best of us at one point or another.. This was a really good poem that expressed that. Really nice work! Picture was a perfect pick!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2012
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This was really good and seemed very personal so thank you for sharing. It's upsetting when we let people inflict on who we are and how we view ourselves but I think it happens to the best of us at one point or another.. This was a really good poem that expressed that. Really nice work! Picture was a perfect pick!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2012
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Thanks very much...most appreciated your thoughtful analysis.
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Comment from Meta~Mark
what an analogy of the duck to the swan and self perception as viewed through this mirrow of you..You sabotage and stalk my state of mind- love these lines..
EXCELLENT!
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2012
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what an analogy of the duck to the swan and self perception as viewed through this mirrow of you..You sabotage and stalk my state of mind- love these lines..
EXCELLENT!
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Comment Written 14-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2012
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Thanks Mark, glad you enjoyed my poem.
Cheers and much appreciate your review.
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Comment from Allison78
I think this is a great poem you have written. I think you are right as it's taken me over 30 years to be comfortable in my own skin. Well written, great job!
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2012
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I think this is a great poem you have written. I think you are right as it's taken me over 30 years to be comfortable in my own skin. Well written, great job!
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Comment Written 14-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2012
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Thanks Allison, glad you are feeling comfortable these days. I think once we get over a certain age we can just be who we need to be...for some people the age varies. LOL
Cheers and thanks so much.
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