My Broken Heart
Can't help myself39 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
your poem is in good 5/7/5 form and you incorporate the proverb well into your poem
good use of strong rhymes
and compelling expression of emotion Brooke
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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your poem is in good 5/7/5 form and you incorporate the proverb well into your poem
good use of strong rhymes
and compelling expression of emotion Brooke
Comment Written 25-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much for you lovely comments.
Comment from wordsfromsue
I don't know.... I might be tempted to shoot his backside with a load of b b pellets.... let HIM feel the pain for a change! "I'm sorry" can get a little old. But your poem is one shared by many a broken hearted lass. The things we do for love.
Good writing!
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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I don't know.... I might be tempted to shoot his backside with a load of b b pellets.... let HIM feel the pain for a change! "I'm sorry" can get a little old. But your poem is one shared by many a broken hearted lass. The things we do for love.
Good writing!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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You are right of course, thank you for your great comments, and the proverb back,'the things we do for love'
Comment from ScarletClearwater
This is great! Such a good message and thanks for the author note. Wonderful work portraying the pain in love. Fabulous write.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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This is great! Such a good message and thanks for the author note. Wonderful work portraying the pain in love. Fabulous write.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the 'fabulous', it means a lot
Comment from terry drake
5-7-5 verse format I wish I had such an understanding companion when I goofed up. You completed the challenge with style. And your theme is understood.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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5-7-5 verse format I wish I had such an understanding companion when I goofed up. You completed the challenge with style. And your theme is understood.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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Thank you for your great review.
Comment from nhinchliff
Very nice. I liked the way you used a well know phrase on which to base you poem, as instructed. The form was perfectly constructed.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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Very nice. I liked the way you used a well know phrase on which to base you poem, as instructed. The form was perfectly constructed.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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Glad it worked well, thank you for the great comments
Comment from Father Flaps
Dear Mystery Poet
A good job with this entry for the Proverb 5-7-5 contest!
You have said a lot in just three short lines. You have included the Spanish proverb that, basically, love does not come without a certain amount of pain. True love will last through any pain. (I think of how much God loves us even when we curse Him....He loves us with an everlasting love, not desiring that any should perish.) Sometimes pain might not be brought by the pair of lovers. It might be external, and have terrible consequences... just look at Romeo & Juliet!
But in your poem, it is one of the two... and he/she forgives the other. Forgiveness promotes love.
Nicely penned!
Good Luck in the contest!
cheers
Kimbob
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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Dear Mystery Poet
A good job with this entry for the Proverb 5-7-5 contest!
You have said a lot in just three short lines. You have included the Spanish proverb that, basically, love does not come without a certain amount of pain. True love will last through any pain. (I think of how much God loves us even when we curse Him....He loves us with an everlasting love, not desiring that any should perish.) Sometimes pain might not be brought by the pair of lovers. It might be external, and have terrible consequences... just look at Romeo & Juliet!
But in your poem, it is one of the two... and he/she forgives the other. Forgiveness promotes love.
Nicely penned!
Good Luck in the contest!
cheers
Kimbob
Comment Written 25-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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Thank you for this wonderful review, and you are so right, we are loved by Him, whatever we do. So pleased you enjoyed it.
Comment from Lateonia
Your poem is brilliant and the artwork is absolutely fitting of the message. I like the way that you crafted this and you did a good job of sticking with in the confines of the style that you were required to write in. Great work.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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Your poem is brilliant and the artwork is absolutely fitting of the message. I like the way that you crafted this and you did a good job of sticking with in the confines of the style that you were required to write in. Great work.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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Your comments means a lot, thank you so much
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this 5 7 5 poem about the proverb on pain, i enjoyed reading it and wish you the best ofl uck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this 5 7 5 poem about the proverb on pain, i enjoyed reading it and wish you the best ofl uck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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Thank you for your lovely comments, and glad you enjoyed it
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well done I am enjoying reading these proverb poems in this form they all show the creativity in the form I enjoyed good luck regards Jill
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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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Yes this is well done I am enjoying reading these proverb poems in this form they all show the creativity in the form I enjoyed good luck regards Jill
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Comment Written 25-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2012
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Its good to here that you liked it. Thank you
