It Consumes My Breath
Dealing with Anger Issues.33 total reviews
Comment from Gungalo
Holding back the pain that consumes every inch of my lost soul,
I transform into a creature like no other, it will destroy all.
Letting out a futile last call to exist the vicinity,
I give in to the beast and begin my downfall into the darkness.
Excellent writing!! You've told her what to expect but I don't think she can comprehend it. It is all encompassing and over the top. The above passage is awesome!!
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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Holding back the pain that consumes every inch of my lost soul,
I transform into a creature like no other, it will destroy all.
Letting out a futile last call to exist the vicinity,
I give in to the beast and begin my downfall into the darkness.
Excellent writing!! You've told her what to expect but I don't think she can comprehend it. It is all encompassing and over the top. The above passage is awesome!!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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Thank you once again for your fab support...dark lord
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No problem, Dark Lord.
Comment from Linda England Bonam
I liked your rather dark poem. It was very graphic in wording and description. I liked the line 'I warn you of the terror that will soon take place in your presence'. (I felt so mad at work yesterday, that I can totally relate with what you are saying here.
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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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I liked your rather dark poem. It was very graphic in wording and description. I liked the line 'I warn you of the terror that will soon take place in your presence'. (I felt so mad at work yesterday, that I can totally relate with what you are saying here.
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Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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Thank you so very much for the thoughtful review...dark lord
Comment from babylonia
It seems like I haven't seen you here in a while. I'm glad to see you now. I definitely feel the anxiety and pain. Imagery is excellent. Made me smile as the beast prepares to return. Oh yeah.
Love,
Barbara
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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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It seems like I haven't seen you here in a while. I'm glad to see you now. I definitely feel the anxiety and pain. Imagery is excellent. Made me smile as the beast prepares to return. Oh yeah.
Love,
Barbara
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Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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Thank you so very much for the kind review, the beast is back...dark lord
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Dark lord,
You are welcome.
Love,
Barbara
