Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from HPicasso
Hello Mrs. Barbara:
Your story is very well written. Quite and intense day in Court for Anna.
This chapter brings a completely unexpected twist at the end (or is it just hepatitis B in the past?).
Thanks for sharing I look forward to reading more. This was amazing... can't wait for the next part..
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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Hello Mrs. Barbara:
Your story is very well written. Quite and intense day in Court for Anna.
This chapter brings a completely unexpected twist at the end (or is it just hepatitis B in the past?).
Thanks for sharing I look forward to reading more. This was amazing... can't wait for the next part..
Comment Written 24-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Ah, we finally get to Troy's demons you have been teasing us with since the beginning - I didn't see that coming - a definite spanner in the works and a large one.
One small point - I think you have used 'refrain' when you probably meant 'restrain' - as far as I know, 'refrain' is an intransitive verb i.e. it cannot be used with an object.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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Ah, we finally get to Troy's demons you have been teasing us with since the beginning - I didn't see that coming - a definite spanner in the works and a large one.
One small point - I think you have used 'refrain' when you probably meant 'restrain' - as far as I know, 'refrain' is an intransitive verb i.e. it cannot be used with an object.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I will check that out, thank you for your eagle eye.
Comment from Nanashirley
WOW what a wrench in the story. I was hoping the judge would hit Brown with contempt, I found him contemptible. I wait for more.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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WOW what a wrench in the story. I was hoping the judge would hit Brown with contempt, I found him contemptible. I wait for more.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Herb
Another well penned chapter. The dialog I thought good and natural sounding. Also, i'm impressed by your research the legal stuff all seems accurate to me.
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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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Another well penned chapter. The dialog I thought good and natural sounding. Also, i'm impressed by your research the legal stuff all seems accurate to me.
:)
Comment Written 24-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Cheryl Daphine
Oh wow,does Troy have a disease? That 'lady' is a case.Very real to life of many I have seen. Very good chapter,and I do hope Paul pulls out an ace or two. Well written.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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Oh wow,does Troy have a disease? That 'lady' is a case.Very real to life of many I have seen. Very good chapter,and I do hope Paul pulls out an ace or two. Well written.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from rosine (roneth)
Excellent dialogue!
I did not expect this twist at all.
The exchange in the courtroom was very real, to me. I felt all the tension and suspense.
I do appreciate that you take the time to write your notes. It shows that you are not writing just to entertain, but to educate as well.
Very good job.
Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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Excellent dialogue!
I did not expect this twist at all.
The exchange in the courtroom was very real, to me. I felt all the tension and suspense.
I do appreciate that you take the time to write your notes. It shows that you are not writing just to entertain, but to educate as well.
Very good job.
Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
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You are welcome!
Comment from peggles
Hello Barbara
I have been off site for some time so had to spend some time reading the previous chapters to catch up
Certainly not time wasted
What a lot has happened over this period
the tension and suspense is so tight its enthralling
This is incredible and I loved every minute of it
I shall be looking out to see where you go from here
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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Hello Barbara
I have been off site for some time so had to spend some time reading the previous chapters to catch up
Certainly not time wasted
What a lot has happened over this period
the tension and suspense is so tight its enthralling
This is incredible and I loved every minute of it
I shall be looking out to see where you go from here
Comment Written 24-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from ameyrowitz
This chapter is a fine addition to the progress of your narrative. I liked especially your description of the give and take between the court room players, very realistic. It reminds me of the best I have read in legal-based novels over the last few years.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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This chapter is a fine addition to the progress of your narrative. I liked especially your description of the give and take between the court room players, very realistic. It reminds me of the best I have read in legal-based novels over the last few years.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Adri7enne
Is there anything more frustrating than a court case? Lawyers can twist everything that comes out of a witness' mouth and make it sound like something else. I get a little overwhelmed just reading about it. You did a good job of showing all the twists and turns that guarantee the confusion can only be untangled by the legal minds who created the games.
Well done, barb.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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Is there anything more frustrating than a court case? Lawyers can twist everything that comes out of a witness' mouth and make it sound like something else. I get a little overwhelmed just reading about it. You did a good job of showing all the twists and turns that guarantee the confusion can only be untangled by the legal minds who created the games.
Well done, barb.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and insight.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Wow, you sure dropped a bomb-shell in this chapter, barbara. Very exciting drama through your excellent dialogue. Looking forward to finding the mystery's answer. Take care, Bev
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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Wow, you sure dropped a bomb-shell in this chapter, barbara. Very exciting drama through your excellent dialogue. Looking forward to finding the mystery's answer. Take care, Bev
Comment Written 24-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You're welcome.
