Shana's Valentine
A Love Story48 total reviews
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
go off his hand. (of)
This is a very enjoyable story hidden inside a very sad one.
Well written and interesting. Certainly holds the readers attention. Good luck to you in the valentines Day contest! Debbie
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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go off his hand. (of)
This is a very enjoyable story hidden inside a very sad one.
Well written and interesting. Certainly holds the readers attention. Good luck to you in the valentines Day contest! Debbie
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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Hi, Debbie. Thank you for your lovely review and generous rating, and for taking the time to read this rather long story ... it took on a life of its own! LOL! Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
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Your
welcome! debbie
Comment from RebelRose
It was pretty evident what was going to be in his pocket.
I like the happy ending to this story. Well written and an interesting story line.
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It was pretty evident what was going to be in his pocket.
I like the happy ending to this story. Well written and an interesting story line.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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Hi, Rose. Thank you for your lovely review and generous rating, and for taking the time to read this rather long story ... it took on a life of its own! LOL! Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from Judith Ann
What a sweet and moving Valentine's Day story. I don't believe have ready any of your work that was not a poem. This is splendid writing. I enjoyed how you moved your reader along with such gripping dialog. Your lead character, Shana is an interesting sort. Now I would really like to learn more about John. He too seems like a genuine individual. Very nice work. -Judy
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What a sweet and moving Valentine's Day story. I don't believe have ready any of your work that was not a poem. This is splendid writing. I enjoyed how you moved your reader along with such gripping dialog. Your lead character, Shana is an interesting sort. Now I would really like to learn more about John. He too seems like a genuine individual. Very nice work. -Judy
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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Hi, Judy. Thank you for your lovely review and generous rating, and for taking the time to read this rather long story ... it took on a life of its own! (Perhaps a follow up story to expand on Shana and John's characters? Mmmmm - maybe? LOL! Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from wrdtrctr
Excellent writing Fionageorge. Really good story. Not really what I was expecting when seeing the romance label but I enjoy being surprised.
I like the font and the italics you use, have rarely seen italics work on this sight.
Two small spags:"I'm Mr. Lockyear'(s) girlfriend...
...She placed the ring ...forefinge(t).
There was one more but I was unable to find it again. Sorry.
Like I mentioned, excellent work.
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Excellent writing Fionageorge. Really good story. Not really what I was expecting when seeing the romance label but I enjoy being surprised.
I like the font and the italics you use, have rarely seen italics work on this sight.
Two small spags:"I'm Mr. Lockyear'(s) girlfriend...
...She placed the ring ...forefinge(t).
There was one more but I was unable to find it again. Sorry.
Like I mentioned, excellent work.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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Wow! Thank you so much for your generous rating of this piece, my friend. And of course, for taking the time to read the rather long story - it kinda kept on growing! LOL :o)I truly appreciate your lovely comments and generous six star rating. I have fixed those spag (yes, there was another one - 'off' instead of 'of'. You've put a big smile on my dial this morning! Warmest regards, Marijke :o0
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completely welcome, mark
Comment from Fireshadow
Marijke, this is a wonderful entry for the Valentine Story contest and, as far as I'm concerned, it's a winner ! Excellent narrative with descriptive details, credible dialogue, strong characterization and a very romantic Valentine's storyline. Good luck in the contest, my dear friend.
Ama
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Marijke, this is a wonderful entry for the Valentine Story contest and, as far as I'm concerned, it's a winner ! Excellent narrative with descriptive details, credible dialogue, strong characterization and a very romantic Valentine's storyline. Good luck in the contest, my dear friend.
Ama
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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Hi, Ama. Thank you for your lovely review and generous rating, and for taking the time to read this rather long story ... it took on a life of its own! LOL! Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from marcellawachtel
All the ingredients for a happy love story with a happy ending- It is well-written and reads smoothly from the start to the finish.
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All the ingredients for a happy love story with a happy ending- It is well-written and reads smoothly from the start to the finish.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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Hi, Marcella. Thank you for your lovely review and generous rating, and for taking the time to read this rather long story ... it took on a life of its own! LOL! Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from Gungalo
Sigh girl, you nearly broke my heart with this one. Amazing tale you spin for Valentine's Day. I loved the drama and the romance all tied into one tragic event that ended happily ever after. WEll done, sweet girl, well done. Sigh ...
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Sigh girl, you nearly broke my heart with this one. Amazing tale you spin for Valentine's Day. I loved the drama and the romance all tied into one tragic event that ended happily ever after. WEll done, sweet girl, well done. Sigh ...
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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Hi, Pam. Thank you for your lovely review and generous rating, and for taking the time to read this rather long story ... it took on a life of its own! LOL! Warmest regards, Marijke :o) xxxxx
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It's wonderful you, simply wonderful!!!
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this story about getting engaged on valentin's day. i wish you the best of luck in the contest
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this story about getting engaged on valentin's day. i wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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Thank you for your lovely review and generous rating, and for taking the time to read this rather long story ... it took on a life of its own! LOL! Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from Joan E.
Two Valentine offerings in one day--you are on a roll and obviously find this celebration SPECIAL! I admired your intriguing and suspenseful love story. (In about the 31st paragraph from the end, "let go of" picked up an extra "f.") I really liked her waiting to open the box! Happy V-day to you and yours- Joan
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Two Valentine offerings in one day--you are on a roll and obviously find this celebration SPECIAL! I admired your intriguing and suspenseful love story. (In about the 31st paragraph from the end, "let go of" picked up an extra "f.") I really liked her waiting to open the box! Happy V-day to you and yours- Joan
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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Hi, Joan. Actually, the opposite is true. We don't really do Valentine, but that doesn't mean I can't get the feel for it ... Mmmmm! Thanks, my friend, for your lovely review and generous rating, and Happy Valentine to you too! Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
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I sort of pleased to hear that what can become a very commercialized celebration has not turned the head of you Aussies! -Joan
Comment from N.K. Wagner
A wonderful love story, full of suspense and handled as realisticly as the drama allows. Your treatment of the protagonist's internal doubts is perfect. She's obviously been hurt before. A great read. :) Nancy
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A wonderful love story, full of suspense and handled as realisticly as the drama allows. Your treatment of the protagonist's internal doubts is perfect. She's obviously been hurt before. A great read. :) Nancy
Comment Written 13-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
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Hi, Nancy, thank you for reading, your kind review and generous rating. Happy Valentine to you! Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
