Comment from Writingfundimension

Excellent

This was a really fun poem to read. I found personally that the flow after the Bolded Line was not as crisp as the stanzas above. The first half would make a terrific children's book with the right illustrations. I think you should really consider that. Best wishes.

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2010

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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2010

Thank your for your kind review and tips.

reply by Writingfundimension on 28-Nov-2010

You are welcome.

Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran

Excellent

Brilliant little story for a child it flows well with imagery and good flow. I enjoyed reading your script. A good write. Mary

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2010

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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2010

Thank you for your kind words and review.

Comment from bhogg

Excellent

I grew up with a brother two years older and a brother two years younger. The classic, "middle child". You, of course know, that it was never me who made a mess. Just those damn brothers. Your poem made me smile. Well done in an easy to read format. Regards, Bill

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 Comment Written 28-Nov-2010

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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2010

Thank you for the kind words and great review. Middle children grow up to be great adults.

Comment from keimosobie

Excellent

Got to watch out for those elves. Very well written
poem I did enjoy it. I didn't see any spags. I'm
Sure your grandson is a good boy.

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 Comment Written 28-Nov-2010

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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2010

Thank you for the review. So far so good with bedtime for those grandsons.