Little Billy
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Love's casualty"memiors from my life experiences.
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Comment from dorts
What a sad turn of events, when your father died you would have thought that your mother would have wanted to hang on to the person she was closest too. Circumstances make people do drastic things, but leaving a child seems too much to bear. I liked your poem even if it was somber.
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What a sad turn of events, when your father died you would have thought that your mother would have wanted to hang on to the person she was closest too. Circumstances make people do drastic things, but leaving a child seems too much to bear. I liked your poem even if it was somber.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2010
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sorry thanks for the review.
Comment from InterestingRon
This is a sad, poignant little poem - only eleven words long. Yet, as the author's notes point out, it tells a tale of abandonment of a small child by her mother, and the death of her father. Thank you for sharing this with us. Ron
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This is a sad, poignant little poem - only eleven words long. Yet, as the author's notes point out, it tells a tale of abandonment of a small child by her mother, and the death of her father. Thank you for sharing this with us. Ron
Comment Written 13-Sep-2010
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NP thanks for the review.
Comment from c_lucas
Love turn sour can destroy one's world. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words making for an easy read. Good luck in your contest.
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Love turn sour can destroy one's world. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words making for an easy read. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2010
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thank you lucas
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You're welcome.
Comment from Valkarie
This is a graphic insight into your thoughts I think, which of course are he dramatic experience must have been harrowing at such a young age. Your poem is powerful and most visual and the word play used is extraordinary,and emotional. This is a most exacting piece of writing, and your words flow so eloquently. A well structured piece even though a small one.
Valkarie...
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This is a graphic insight into your thoughts I think, which of course are he dramatic experience must have been harrowing at such a young age. Your poem is powerful and most visual and the word play used is extraordinary,and emotional. This is a most exacting piece of writing, and your words flow so eloquently. A well structured piece even though a small one.
Valkarie...
Comment Written 13-Sep-2010
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thank you valkarie
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keomosobie...It was a pleasure to read.
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Comment from Paulpl52
This is a heart rending poem about the tragic events of your life. It shows us all, that time sometimes doesn't heal. Very moving, thought provoking and great imagery. Good contest entry, Paul.
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This is a heart rending poem about the tragic events of your life. It shows us all, that time sometimes doesn't heal. Very moving, thought provoking and great imagery. Good contest entry, Paul.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2010
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thank you.
Comment from LumchuckHickle
A terrific poetic expression. It truly stands out (I'm looking at the contest poems.) It is a plaint, an expression of lament deepened by inner pain, a howling out of grief. When you can craft words that bring feeling so close to the surface, your pain in this case, without having to explain them: as in "such pain," you've done something marvelous and magical. I am so sorry for your pain, truly am, but I want to thank it (and you) for this excellent poem.
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A terrific poetic expression. It truly stands out (I'm looking at the contest poems.) It is a plaint, an expression of lament deepened by inner pain, a howling out of grief. When you can craft words that bring feeling so close to the surface, your pain in this case, without having to explain them: as in "such pain," you've done something marvelous and magical. I am so sorry for your pain, truly am, but I want to thank it (and you) for this excellent poem.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2010
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thank you.
Comment from sgalletti
I found this by reading your portfolio as I am interested in your writing. While I know who you are, I will not name your name as I know this is a blind contest. However, this Naani is beautiful. First, love the multi-syllable and perfect rhyming words Idevastation/provocation). As you know, you were not the only child left in these circumstances after Viet Nam. It was a very horrific time for all of us, which you have described beautifully in few words. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
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I found this by reading your portfolio as I am interested in your writing. While I know who you are, I will not name your name as I know this is a blind contest. However, this Naani is beautiful. First, love the multi-syllable and perfect rhyming words Idevastation/provocation). As you know, you were not the only child left in these circumstances after Viet Nam. It was a very horrific time for all of us, which you have described beautifully in few words. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
Comment Written 13-Sep-2010
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Thank you.
Comment from rama devi
So sorry to hear of your childhood sufferings. this is a powerful poem and so true--the pendulum swings in both directions and Love can cause deep disappointment, grief, resentment and even hatred, when turned around or loss.
Potent emotional charge in this true to form and well presented naani.
Good luck.
Warmest wishes for your healing,
rd
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2010
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So sorry to hear of your childhood sufferings. this is a powerful poem and so true--the pendulum swings in both directions and Love can cause deep disappointment, grief, resentment and even hatred, when turned around or loss.
Potent emotional charge in this true to form and well presented naani.
Good luck.
Warmest wishes for your healing,
rd
Comment Written 13-Sep-2010
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thank you
Comment from rudywalsh
I have never come across a tragic naani poem before, it's why I love the naani poem and it's ability to be able to express what ever one feels, any suject with no bounderies.
I'm sorry for your misfortunes, after reading your poem and then authors notes it's easy to see how the two come together, a very powerful message heartfelt.
Very creative and well thought-out.
Vietnam, yet another silly war without justification.
A nicely written naani poem very well expressed, best wishes to you in what looks like a tough contest...Rudy
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I have never come across a tragic naani poem before, it's why I love the naani poem and it's ability to be able to express what ever one feels, any suject with no bounderies.
I'm sorry for your misfortunes, after reading your poem and then authors notes it's easy to see how the two come together, a very powerful message heartfelt.
Very creative and well thought-out.
Vietnam, yet another silly war without justification.
A nicely written naani poem very well expressed, best wishes to you in what looks like a tough contest...Rudy
Comment Written 13-Sep-2010
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thank you
Comment from Amicus
This is a well crafted rhymed and rhythmic naani on love that conveys effectively a highly personal and non traditional concept of love as a destructive force. I read smoothly and certainly is thought provoking.
Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2010
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This is a well crafted rhymed and rhythmic naani on love that conveys effectively a highly personal and non traditional concept of love as a destructive force. I read smoothly and certainly is thought provoking.
Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2010
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thank you