Little Billy
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 " Im Waiting......."memiors from my life experiences.
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Comment from misscookie
The artwork is so powerful and it is perfect for your poem.
Your words were so surd-real that as I read it. My voice change like an old witch or how I thought death voice would sound, my body slightly move as if I was holding the long stick stirring the pot as it boil. Wow It's not every day I truly get into a poem.********************
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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The artwork is so powerful and it is perfect for your poem.
Your words were so surd-real that as I read it. My voice change like an old witch or how I thought death voice would sound, my body slightly move as if I was holding the long stick stirring the pot as it boil. Wow It's not every day I truly get into a poem.********************
Comment Written 08-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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thanks for the excellent review.
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Your welcome, take care
Comment from animatqua
I'm glad you included the explanation of the villanelle in the author's notes. I was trying to get my head around the rhyme scheme and having difficulty with it.
As to the content, I found the macabre warning in it not only timely, but very chilling.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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I'm glad you included the explanation of the villanelle in the author's notes. I was trying to get my head around the rhyme scheme and having difficulty with it.
As to the content, I found the macabre warning in it not only timely, but very chilling.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from pickthorn
This is a very interesting form of poetry. Looks like it would be hard to do. You have done a magnificent job of giving me the feeling that I am listening to the Grim Reaper himself chanting to me. Very effective in getting your emotions to show through on this one.
pickthorn
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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This is a very interesting form of poetry. Looks like it would be hard to do. You have done a magnificent job of giving me the feeling that I am listening to the Grim Reaper himself chanting to me. Very effective in getting your emotions to show through on this one.
pickthorn
Comment Written 08-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RazberryBullet
Ominous words here: Stir the pot it's going to boil
What will you do when the earth's out of oil?
suggestion: All of /you're king's>your kings/ that think they are royal.
Good job!
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Ominous words here: Stir the pot it's going to boil
What will you do when the earth's out of oil?
suggestion: All of /you're king's>your kings/ that think they are royal.
Good job!
Comment Written 08-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Thank you correction made.
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very well written poem with a very unique structure. It has a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good job.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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This is a very well written poem with a very unique structure. It has a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good job.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your Kind review. I'm glad you liked it.
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You're welcome.
Comment from cheyennewy
HI keminosobie,
This is a fine villanelle. The rules sound complicated but you have made it look easy (I know it's not!) All of your word choices are successful and the flow is like liquid. The rhyme is good and the message powerful. What will we do indeed? chey
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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HI keminosobie,
This is a fine villanelle. The rules sound complicated but you have made it look easy (I know it's not!) All of your word choices are successful and the flow is like liquid. The rhyme is good and the message powerful. What will we do indeed? chey
Comment Written 08-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Thank you.
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hello keimosobie,
You did a wonderful job with your villanelle. It is very expressive and the subject, for this type of poem, worked well. Excellent example of top notch writing.
Cheers, W ^-^
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Hello keimosobie,
You did a wonderful job with your villanelle. It is very expressive and the subject, for this type of poem, worked well. Excellent example of top notch writing.
Cheers, W ^-^
Comment Written 08-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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thank you for you excellent review.
Comment from amada
Very original and creative this work based on "Stir the pot it's going to boil." I stopped several times while reading it, it has so many universal truths. Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Very original and creative this work based on "Stir the pot it's going to boil." I stopped several times while reading it, it has so many universal truths. Well done.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Thank you amanda.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
What will they all do indeed!
A good and serious question.
Cleverly thoughtout and well presented.
all in all - most impressive.
the pain's of hunger
the pains of hunger
Margaret
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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What will they all do indeed!
A good and serious question.
Cleverly thoughtout and well presented.
all in all - most impressive.
the pain's of hunger
the pains of hunger
Margaret
Comment Written 08-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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thank you for the correction.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a great well written poem in a style that i have not tried yet. i enjoyed reading it and wish you well with your venture
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a great well written poem in a style that i have not tried yet. i enjoyed reading it and wish you well with your venture
Comment Written 08-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Thank you.