Little Billy
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Foster Mother"memiors from my life experiences.
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Comment from adewpearl
had know where to run - nowhere
all my efforts where in vain - were
Keimosobie, what a loving poem, filled with appreciation and gratitude for this woman who saved your life, at least emotionally. I hear so many horrible things about the foster care system that it is great to hear a huge success story. I'm so sorry your mother gave you up like that, but what a happy ending you had because of this woman, whose story you tell so well in your rhyming couplets. Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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had know where to run - nowhere
all my efforts where in vain - were
Keimosobie, what a loving poem, filled with appreciation and gratitude for this woman who saved your life, at least emotionally. I hear so many horrible things about the foster care system that it is great to hear a huge success story. I'm so sorry your mother gave you up like that, but what a happy ending you had because of this woman, whose story you tell so well in your rhyming couplets. Brooke :-)
Comment Written 02-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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thank you corrections made. Much appriciated and thanks for the review.
Comment from Cedar
This poem deserves a six star rating and more. As I read it, I could feel your pain. Your words touched my heart
and made me realize that there are so many children in this world that go through what you did, each day of their lives. And it makes me even more thankful that I was blessed with a loving mother and father, both are gone now,
but definitely not forgotten. And thanks to your father, for giving the ultimate sacrifice. I served during that era also, but was lucky enough to come home in one piece.
You wrote such a touching poem about your foster mother,
please consider writing about your father and the
55,000 other troops that did not come home alive from
that crazy war. With your talent, you'll do just fine and I will be watching for it. God Bless you.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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This poem deserves a six star rating and more. As I read it, I could feel your pain. Your words touched my heart
and made me realize that there are so many children in this world that go through what you did, each day of their lives. And it makes me even more thankful that I was blessed with a loving mother and father, both are gone now,
but definitely not forgotten. And thanks to your father, for giving the ultimate sacrifice. I served during that era also, but was lucky enough to come home in one piece.
You wrote such a touching poem about your foster mother,
please consider writing about your father and the
55,000 other troops that did not come home alive from
that crazy war. With your talent, you'll do just fine and I will be watching for it. God Bless you.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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thanks again for your 6 star rating it was my first.
Comment from telespectral
This is such a touching and loving poem. Your feelings towards your foster mom is so strong and very emotionally moving to the reader. What a great job writing this poem you have done.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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This is such a touching and loving poem. Your feelings towards your foster mom is so strong and very emotionally moving to the reader. What a great job writing this poem you have done.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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thank you.
Comment from heyjude
This is a lovely poem to tell about a selfless love of
your foster mother and how she nurtured and care for
you at a time when you needed so badly. Great rhyming.
There are few changes to be made. Santa's add apostrophe
and also I'll needs an apostrophe. Also, you might leave off
the second all - all my efforts were (all) in vain
just put all my efforts were in vain. Just a suggestion.
I'm sure your foster mom would love to read this poem. Good luck on the contest.
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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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This is a lovely poem to tell about a selfless love of
your foster mother and how she nurtured and care for
you at a time when you needed so badly. Great rhyming.
There are few changes to be made. Santa's add apostrophe
and also I'll needs an apostrophe. Also, you might leave off
the second all - all my efforts were (all) in vain
just put all my efforts were in vain. Just a suggestion.
I'm sure your foster mom would love to read this poem. Good luck on the contest.
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Comment Written 02-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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thanks
Comment from Rama Rao
Your poem is an excellent tribute to your foster mother.
Dear foster mother I hope I'm not late.
Ill never know of your fate. This line disturbed me. Where is she and what happened to her?
ILL=I'll
Otherwise the poem is fine.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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Your poem is an excellent tribute to your foster mother.
Dear foster mother I hope I'm not late.
Ill never know of your fate. This line disturbed me. Where is she and what happened to her?
ILL=I'll
Otherwise the poem is fine.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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I left the home when I was adopted at seven my new parents cut me off from my old mother I tried to contact her later but couldnt.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, it is a beautiful and loving tribute to your foster mother. my cousin and his wife were foster parents and they adopted two of them. spag alert-it should be all my efforts were all in vain. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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this is very well written, it is a beautiful and loving tribute to your foster mother. my cousin and his wife were foster parents and they adopted two of them. spag alert-it should be all my efforts were all in vain. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 02-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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thank you
Comment from chells36
Now look what you did, you made me cry
This is a very moving tribute to your foster mum and that is so lovely
well written
The flow is good and the meter is great
thanks xx
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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Now look what you did, you made me cry
This is a very moving tribute to your foster mum and that is so lovely
well written
The flow is good and the meter is great
thanks xx
Comment Written 02-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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did it really make you cry or are you just saying that cause i cried a little when I wrote it.
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really, really im a soft hearted person xx
Comment from Suzie Q
Thanks for letting me know about your new post. It's beautiful and quite a tribute to her. It'd be great if she could see it. What a blessing that would be. Great job!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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Thanks for letting me know about your new post. It's beautiful and quite a tribute to her. It'd be great if she could see it. What a blessing that would be. Great job!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2010
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thanks for the review and I dont know if she is still alive.
Comment from Dom G Robles
This poem is a reminiscent of a child being left her mom and she is wondering all about her past. She was left at an early age and stayed in an orphanage and now deeply longing for her biological mom. She says, "You never know how much I needed you--Everyday you labored and toiled--I could nto know what you have done...I was in pain and did not know where to run...I remember when I was three and I sat on santas (santa's) knee. Addressing her foster mother she said, "Dear foster mother I hope I'm not late I'll never know of your fate...But I need to say I know what you did a hero for me and my love I do bid."
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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This poem is a reminiscent of a child being left her mom and she is wondering all about her past. She was left at an early age and stayed in an orphanage and now deeply longing for her biological mom. She says, "You never know how much I needed you--Everyday you labored and toiled--I could nto know what you have done...I was in pain and did not know where to run...I remember when I was three and I sat on santas (santa's) knee. Addressing her foster mother she said, "Dear foster mother I hope I'm not late I'll never know of your fate...But I need to say I know what you did a hero for me and my love I do bid."
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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thank you
Comment from msdebra
This is a beautiful poem. You put so much heart into it. I can't even imagine not having had my mom growing up. She was such a big part of my life. I write a lot about her. I'm so sorry you had to go through this, but this is a wonderful tribute to someone who didn't have to do this. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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This is a beautiful poem. You put so much heart into it. I can't even imagine not having had my mom growing up. She was such a big part of my life. I write a lot about her. I'm so sorry you had to go through this, but this is a wonderful tribute to someone who didn't have to do this. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Your welcome and thanks I know its personal but i want to move people I dont know why.
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It's just something that is in some of us, that need to move people. I think it is usually those of us who have come from difficult backgrounds. We have emotions pent up inside of us that need to come out. I understand completely. Most all of my writing is usually meant to move people.