Little Billy
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Chasing my Tail."memiors from my life experiences.
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Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
LOL- I 'think' there's too many 'thinks' here! I like the cute idea, and the great presentation- but 'think' you could have come up with a better description of this dog chasing his tail? "Am I a ship ready to sail?" did not make a lot of sense to me.."This is what we learn in college"?..don't get it. Thanks for sharing. Betty
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010
LOL- I 'think' there's too many 'thinks' here! I like the cute idea, and the great presentation- but 'think' you could have come up with a better description of this dog chasing his tail? "Am I a ship ready to sail?" did not make a lot of sense to me.."This is what we learn in college"?..don't get it. Thanks for sharing. Betty
Comment Written 31-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010
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well its not for everybody.
Comment from Renee' J Thomas
I think this is very creative and very cute. I LOVE the picture with it, that is the cutest thing. Adding your words to it, just make it all the better.
Renee'
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010
I think this is very creative and very cute. I LOVE the picture with it, that is the cutest thing. Adding your words to it, just make it all the better.
Renee'
Comment Written 31-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010
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thank you for the review.
Comment from telespectral
You captured the true essence of college so well. I like the picture you chose, it really adds a great visual to the point of your poem. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010
You captured the true essence of college so well. I like the picture you chose, it really adds a great visual to the point of your poem. Nicely done.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010
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thank you for your good review.
Comment from Paulpl52
Nice little poem with a humourous touch. I teach people how to drive and I always want them to think for them selves. I think your experience is a personal one and not indicative of education as a whole. A good first poem, keep it up. Paul
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010
Nice little poem with a humourous touch. I teach people how to drive and I always want them to think for them selves. I think your experience is a personal one and not indicative of education as a whole. A good first poem, keep it up. Paul
Comment Written 31-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010
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all poems are personal at least I like to think so. Thanks for the review.
Comment from anabellapongasi
Hi there,
Here's a warm welcome to this wonderful site! :)
Your poem is very well written in free verse with some rhymes.
I like its thinking and reflective tone, and especially the questions at the end:
Am I a ship,
ready to sail?
Or just a dog,
chasing my tail?
I enjoyed reading this. Well done.
Anabella
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010
Hi there,
Here's a warm welcome to this wonderful site! :)
Your poem is very well written in free verse with some rhymes.
I like its thinking and reflective tone, and especially the questions at the end:
Am I a ship,
ready to sail?
Or just a dog,
chasing my tail?
I enjoyed reading this. Well done.
Anabella
Comment Written 31-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010
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Im glad you liked it. I hope its the first of many.
Comment from words
An interesting write.
The purpose of University, should be to teach us how to think ... not what to think.
I think that when school crosses that boundary and starts
pushing content not process ...then it is time for our mind's ship to set sail.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010
An interesting write.
The purpose of University, should be to teach us how to think ... not what to think.
I think that when school crosses that boundary and starts
pushing content not process ...then it is time for our mind's ship to set sail.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010
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thanks for the review. and all too often thats what happens.
Comment from pickthorn
I like the message you send. Yes, while you are being taught, you think as the teacher... for awhile. Hopefully all will have the good sense to think for themselves and not follow, blindly, someone elses thoughts. I like the illustration with the poem too. Great job.
pickthorn
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010
I like the message you send. Yes, while you are being taught, you think as the teacher... for awhile. Hopefully all will have the good sense to think for themselves and not follow, blindly, someone elses thoughts. I like the illustration with the poem too. Great job.
pickthorn
Comment Written 31-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010
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thanks for the great review.
Comment from afternoonlight
Excellent! The topic, subject and scene setting are all good. Even without the author's note of explaination the poem is connected and understandable. Your word choices paint a great picture of the conundrum.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010
Excellent! The topic, subject and scene setting are all good. Even without the author's note of explaination the poem is connected and understandable. Your word choices paint a great picture of the conundrum.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010
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thank you. you get it thanks.
Comment from c_lucas
Freethinkers choose their own paths. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Very good imagery.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010
Freethinkers choose their own paths. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Very good imagery.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010
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thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome
Comment from lucyanne1977
this is a good piece of poetry. I really enjoyed reading this. The wording was good and so was the flow. It was short but straight to the point.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010
this is a good piece of poetry. I really enjoyed reading this. The wording was good and so was the flow. It was short but straight to the point.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010
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yes straight to my tail. thank you for your kind review on my first posting.