Selfish
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Comment from findingmyroom
Hey, Bob, I missed this one. It's quite vivid, with good characterization of Ramirez. Leaving it open-ended is just a tad annoying, but definitely a conversation starter. Congrats for the contest win!
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2010
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Hey, Bob, I missed this one. It's quite vivid, with good characterization of Ramirez. Leaving it open-ended is just a tad annoying, but definitely a conversation starter. Congrats for the contest win!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2010
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Hi, Steph. thanks for the review. Glad you liked it....Bob
Comment from Amfunny
There is no artwork on this right now, but I did enjoy your piece. It is awesome in the characters and your description. The dialogue is fitting for the characters also. Held my attention throughout. Well done. :)
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2010
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There is no artwork on this right now, but I did enjoy your piece. It is awesome in the characters and your description. The dialogue is fitting for the characters also. Held my attention throughout. Well done. :)
Comment Written 11-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2010
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LOL...I didn't realize the site can take the art work away from a piece of writing?? I had one...gone now as you say. Hmmmm. thanks for mtaking the time, Norma.....Bob
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yeah. i had some contest entries where the poem was based on the photo and then discovered that the photo was no longer there. :(
Comment from closetpoetjester
Wow this one was great Bob. I just love the way the words flowed so effortlessly. Absolutely faultless my friend.
You describe most of the male population well, yes they think with their c**ks for sure.
So typical of a scumbag who treats women like absolute shit including cheating and then is floored when the same might be done to them. How two faced and typical chauvinist. True to form. Are you sure this isnt NON FICTION cos it could well be?
Cheers for a fantastic and compelling read as always. A great storyline with plenty of action in the bedroom and with the silverware (LOL) and I enjoyed this as always. You never fail to disappoint my friend.
Thanks for sharing your immense talent and good luck with this stunning entry. I think your a cinch for a win here!
Great pic BTW.
Cheers closet xo
reply by the author on 17-May-2010
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Wow this one was great Bob. I just love the way the words flowed so effortlessly. Absolutely faultless my friend.
You describe most of the male population well, yes they think with their c**ks for sure.
So typical of a scumbag who treats women like absolute shit including cheating and then is floored when the same might be done to them. How two faced and typical chauvinist. True to form. Are you sure this isnt NON FICTION cos it could well be?
Cheers for a fantastic and compelling read as always. A great storyline with plenty of action in the bedroom and with the silverware (LOL) and I enjoyed this as always. You never fail to disappoint my friend.
Thanks for sharing your immense talent and good luck with this stunning entry. I think your a cinch for a win here!
Great pic BTW.
Cheers closet xo
Comment Written 17-May-2010
reply by the author on 17-May-2010
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"You never fail to disappoint my friend." Just thought you'd get a kick out of this tiny flub, Phillipa. LOL..I appreciate your thorough review very much...Bob
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Sorry, perhaps I should have put a comma between disappoint...and my!! LOL
Or perhaps dropped "my friend" and put "with your WRITING Bob!" LOL
Again sorry for the bad context but I think you know what I meant!
Cheers closet xo
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I certainly do know what you meant,Jester...inretrospect, I probably shouldn't have pointed it out anyway...Just thought it was "cute" Take careand thanks for your support as always....Bob
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Oh yes...it sounded real cute didn't it!! Sorry again and glad you can take my comments with tongue in cheek!! LOL
Cheers and thanks my friend.
Closet xo
Comment from Realist101
Ooooo, well done!!!! Superb, I see why your screen name is Mastery...you have mastered the short story very well with this one!! VIVID, realistic, and professionally written. VERY enjoyable Bob. :) Susan
reply by the author on 17-May-2010
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Ooooo, well done!!!! Superb, I see why your screen name is Mastery...you have mastered the short story very well with this one!! VIVID, realistic, and professionally written. VERY enjoyable Bob. :) Susan
Comment Written 17-May-2010
reply by the author on 17-May-2010
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Thanks again, Susan...I appreciate your reviews very much...and the sixer is great icing on the review....Bob
Comment from LovnPeace
Wow. I stay amazed at your descriptive abilities Bob. I chuckle at some of your fraizes, like cooking in China. Very cleaver. Good luck my friend. Blessings. Barbara
reply by the author on 16-May-2010
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Wow. I stay amazed at your descriptive abilities Bob. I chuckle at some of your fraizes, like cooking in China. Very cleaver. Good luck my friend. Blessings. Barbara
Comment Written 16-May-2010
reply by the author on 16-May-2010
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Thanks so much, barb. I always love to get your take on my work....Bob
Comment from Judian James
Hi Bob. This was so good. "was blessed with the body of an angel, but had the brains of an oyster" oh, ouch!
"Candy thought cooking was a city in China" I could quote the whole piece, Bob. Your description of Juan was perfect. The ending was excellent ... dramatic, terrifying and wide open for more to come. great!
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Hi Bob. This was so good. "was blessed with the body of an angel, but had the brains of an oyster" oh, ouch!
"Candy thought cooking was a city in China" I could quote the whole piece, Bob. Your description of Juan was perfect. The ending was excellent ... dramatic, terrifying and wide open for more to come. great!
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Awww. Thanks so much, Jude. I appreciate you taking the time, believe me...Bless you (glad you aren't going to prison...I had visions of you doing away with somebody....LOL) Bob
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I know. For a minute I thought it was hilarious. Then, thinking of you thinking of me as a murderer wasn't so funny afterall! I'm so glad I'm a fan. You never disappoint.
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XXX :) Thankyou, Bob
Comment from gene_ink
-It's all bullshit(;) I'd never
- -Great imagery: could suck a golf ball through a garden hose lol
-exceptional description of Remirez, lol
-Well, I'll tell you what's bullshit(.) (Y)ou and that whore in Tijuana--that's real bullshit, Ramirez."
-"You heard me. ()I'm Looking For A New Love Baby." (removed one quote. Do the italics represent thought or emphasis)
-Great classical end chapter hook.
-the eyes staring(space). . .
-He froze there(space). . . staring at her . . .(space)feeling nothing.
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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-It's all bullshit(;) I'd never
- -Great imagery: could suck a golf ball through a garden hose lol
-exceptional description of Remirez, lol
-Well, I'll tell you what's bullshit(.) (Y)ou and that whore in Tijuana--that's real bullshit, Ramirez."
-"You heard me. ()I'm Looking For A New Love Baby." (removed one quote. Do the italics represent thought or emphasis)
-Great classical end chapter hook.
-the eyes staring(space). . .
-He froze there(space). . . staring at her . . .(space)feeling nothing.
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Thanks for all this help, Gene. The italics is because it is a song title. I fixed the rest...I appreciate all of your time, my friend. Bob
Comment from rmdelta
mastery,
great piece of writing, my friend. this was a full story, not a beginning and the ending is terrific. Well, maybe not so much for Candy. lol The doorbell ringingis the perfect ending. Great work and good luck in the contest.
Reggie
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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mastery,
great piece of writing, my friend. this was a full story, not a beginning and the ending is terrific. Well, maybe not so much for Candy. lol The doorbell ringingis the perfect ending. Great work and good luck in the contest.
Reggie
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Hey, Regg..thanks so much for our generous review...Have you got anything new coming up that you want me to look at. Sometimes I just get so bogged down...Always let me know, okay? Bob
Comment from jack silver
loved the way you had the ending. perfectly written and put together. well suited to the contest and it involved the idea of the story starter into the story. enjoyed reading.
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Jack
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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loved the way you had the ending. perfectly written and put together. well suited to the contest and it involved the idea of the story starter into the story. enjoyed reading.
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Jack
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Thanks, Jack...good luck to you also...Bob
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good luck to you to
Comment from Tallteller
Can the brains of an oyster carry pearls of wisdom? Can the body of an angel fill a man with desire? Can an eager beaver be found in Brazil? Does the world have an ass? Can one blow one's nose with a woman? Can a heno lay an ego? Did Candy also think cleaning is a town in China? Do men tha follow thier cocks around remain steadfastly in chicken runs? All these questions amuse the reader in his delight at reading your words. You weave a gripping tale that ties us to the reading post until the chapter's end.
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Can the brains of an oyster carry pearls of wisdom? Can the body of an angel fill a man with desire? Can an eager beaver be found in Brazil? Does the world have an ass? Can one blow one's nose with a woman? Can a heno lay an ego? Did Candy also think cleaning is a town in China? Do men tha follow thier cocks around remain steadfastly in chicken runs? All these questions amuse the reader in his delight at reading your words. You weave a gripping tale that ties us to the reading post until the chapter's end.
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Hi, Les...LOL...Veryunique review, my friend...Thanks so much...Bob