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Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Shattered Dreams"
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Comment from Judian James
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Oh, I wanted a sixer for you and I have none ... I'm so sorry. This was really, REALLY brilliant Carol. What an amazing story in so few words. Just superb. Sad but superb

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
    Jude,

    Your kind thoughts are worthy of more than six stars...Thanks you...Smiles, Carol
Comment from cheyennewy
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Hi Carol,

What a sad tale, but unfortunately I am sure it happens more than we know. The poor girl she was probably glad she drifted away to the angels...she won't have to re-live that horrible experience the rest of her life. Excellent, as always. Good luck in the contest....blessings....chey

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
    Chey,

    Yes, unfortunately in our society it does happen more than we even know about. Life is discarded like trash. Thank you for reading and commenting. Carol
Comment from missy98writer
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Carol,
A very tragic tail that happens everyday unfortunately. So sad what violence and alcohol can lead people to do. It's a shame the poor girl was defiled in such a horrible fashion. At least she was welcomed in heaven. Outstanding micro-fiction. Only a brilliant writer can get so much out of 100 to 110 words. This story of yours is a real winner for the micro fiction contest. Great art work you used to illustrate your story. Powerful theme.
Melissa.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
    Melissa,

    Once again you make my morning with your praise and wonderful comments. Thank you so much my dear friend. Smiles, CArol
Comment from Realist101
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Hi Carol, this is so sad. It reminds me of that movie "The Lovely Bones"...and sadly, this happens all too often. I have had close calls, and feel lucky to not have winded up this way. Excellent short my friend!! Hugs, Susan

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
    Susan,

    Haven't ever heard of the movie but I imagine unfortunately this happens in every walk of life too. Just a different setting. Thanks, CArol
Comment from Sasha
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This is deeply moving and so tragic. Very well written and a great entry for the contest. I usually stay away from flash fiction, especially macro flash fiction since I have no idea how to write anything without always using more words than necessary. This is very good and I wish you all the best.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
    Sasha,

    It's very difficult for me too since I prefer to describe...I could use 100 words in the first paragraph to draw the setting..LOL Thanks, CArol
Comment from DearlB
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This is a complete story written in the few words allowed.
The only nit I found was the word banditos I don,t think it is a word bandits would have worked as well.
Best of luck,
Dearl

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
    Dearl,

    Thanks jfor reading and commenting. Appreciate your time and thoughts. Carol
Comment from Writeaway...
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Another inspiring well written piece, great job Begin Again, I found no spags as always, the picture also went well, keep writing!!

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
    Jake,

    Thanks jfor taking the time to read my short story. I appreciate it very much. Smiles, Carol
Comment from c_lucas
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It is never safe enough for a young person to take chances. This is very well written with very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
    Charlie,

    You are so right! Thank you for the kind review and comments. Smiles, Carol
reply by c_lucas on 22-Apr-2010
    You're welcome, Carol. Charlie
Comment from misscookie
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that's some artwork
It alone gae me chills yu were perfectly cxorrect this poem would be different
Sorry to say Life i not always happy momemnts You express the poem so well
I find on fail in your write.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
    Cookie,

    Thank you as always for your kind words and support. I wish this type of tragedy was never a part of our lives..So sad..

    Carol
reply by misscookie on 22-Apr-2010
    Your welcome, so do I. take care.
Comment from hotstuff
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Oh, how very sad. I wasn't expecting this ending even though you have written 'violence under the stars.' You have packed so much in, in so few words. Very clever writing. Good luck in the competition.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
    hotstuff,

    Thank you so much for the continued support. Your comments are always appreciated. Smiles, Carol