Chasing the Elusive Dream
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Help for the Brokenhearted"A southern couple's journey in the 60's,70's & 80'
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Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
This is truly a six star essay.
Your look at the series of 'broken hearts,' and their outcomes and resolutions really do ring true.
The touches of humour you introduce into the essay really lighten the feel without denigrating the pain the brokenhearted feels.
Juliette
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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This is truly a six star essay.
Your look at the series of 'broken hearts,' and their outcomes and resolutions really do ring true.
The touches of humour you introduce into the essay really lighten the feel without denigrating the pain the brokenhearted feels.
Juliette
Comment Written 05-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Juliette, Wow, Thank you so much for the lovely six star review. I'm so glad you liked it.
Hugs,
Beth
Comment from AnnaLinda
Beth,
Your "Help for the Brokenhearted" piece was delightful to read! It is full of lots of wisdom told in a very creative and clever way. Your reader can tell just what a great mom you are.
Here are some parts of your piece that I really enjoyed and that I could relate to:
"The world is full of jerks, and I guess I just got lucky."
I don't have any girls, so this was fun:
"Get used to seeing puffy eyes and tear-stained pillows. Their story is the great tragedy of the ages."
"Get a lawyer and take the bum for all he's got"
"Of course if it comes to that, you might as well know in advance that the problem always stems from their childhood, and somehow you're always going to get the lion's share of the blame instead of the jerk who really deserves it"
You did an outstanding job on this.
SweetLinda
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Beth,
Your "Help for the Brokenhearted" piece was delightful to read! It is full of lots of wisdom told in a very creative and clever way. Your reader can tell just what a great mom you are.
Here are some parts of your piece that I really enjoyed and that I could relate to:
"The world is full of jerks, and I guess I just got lucky."
I don't have any girls, so this was fun:
"Get used to seeing puffy eyes and tear-stained pillows. Their story is the great tragedy of the ages."
"Get a lawyer and take the bum for all he's got"
"Of course if it comes to that, you might as well know in advance that the problem always stems from their childhood, and somehow you're always going to get the lion's share of the blame instead of the jerk who really deserves it"
You did an outstanding job on this.
SweetLinda
Comment Written 05-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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I'm so glad you liked this and shared with me the parts you liked best. Thanks so much for the review and you delightful comments.
Cheers,
Beth
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You are so welcome! It was a pleasure to read.
Comment from Sally Carter
What a great piece of well written advice - both to parents and children. I reckon everyone with kids will identify with at least one of the scenarios you describe.
In the 2nd paragraph I think it should be "boys'" appetites, and in the last I think it should be "cliche" - just minor things.
A really interesting piece, and how reassuring to hear your wise view that all you can do is listen and feed! Best wishes, Sally
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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What a great piece of well written advice - both to parents and children. I reckon everyone with kids will identify with at least one of the scenarios you describe.
In the 2nd paragraph I think it should be "boys'" appetites, and in the last I think it should be "cliche" - just minor things.
A really interesting piece, and how reassuring to hear your wise view that all you can do is listen and feed! Best wishes, Sally
Comment Written 05-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Sally Thank you for the lovely review and for pointing out the spags. I have fixed them.
Hugs,
Beth
Comment from sunny39
Beth - you certainly wrote what so many mothers through the years have felt. It's so hard to watch one of our children experience heartbreak. (My first thought was always to break the neck of the one causing the heartbreak), but I didn't.
From this side of life, I do know 'this too shall pass.' It just awfully hard to believe when your young and heartbroken.
Excellent write!
Sunny
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Beth - you certainly wrote what so many mothers through the years have felt. It's so hard to watch one of our children experience heartbreak. (My first thought was always to break the neck of the one causing the heartbreak), but I didn't.
From this side of life, I do know 'this too shall pass.' It just awfully hard to believe when your young and heartbroken.
Excellent write!
Sunny
Comment Written 05-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Sunny, Thanks for the review and the nice and funny comments. I felt like breaking a few necks to but like you, I didn't.
Cheers,
Beth
Comment from hotstuff
This is a great story. It reads as though it is true rather than fiction. I am a mother to two daughters and I agree with your statement that girls like to dissect things over and over. You have obviously brought a lot of your own life experience and self knowledge into your fictional story. It is very convincing.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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This is a great story. It reads as though it is true rather than fiction. I am a mother to two daughters and I agree with your statement that girls like to dissect things over and over. You have obviously brought a lot of your own life experience and self knowledge into your fictional story. It is very convincing.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Oh, it is every bit true. Did I list it as fiction. I'll have to fix that. Yep, that was my life. I appreciate your review and you nice comments.
Beth
Comment from kingskid
Really loved this essay of yours on how to deal with a broken heart. Having three daughters I am quite an experienced one in this department, apart what happened in my life. Never having had boys I can't comment, but your advice is good and sound.
Sometimes when the girls were working through their heartache, it affected me more than them, seeing them so totally sad.
You have such a beautiful spirit and it comes across beautifully in your writing.
blessings
kingskid
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Really loved this essay of yours on how to deal with a broken heart. Having three daughters I am quite an experienced one in this department, apart what happened in my life. Never having had boys I can't comment, but your advice is good and sound.
Sometimes when the girls were working through their heartache, it affected me more than them, seeing them so totally sad.
You have such a beautiful spirit and it comes across beautifully in your writing.
blessings
kingskid
Comment Written 05-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. I'm so glad you like this. I really enjoyed your comments.
Beth
Comment from Sasha
You are very welcome. This is absolutely marvelous. I have had my heart broken on more than one occasion and you seem to have summed up the healing process perfectly and with just enough humor to bring a smile to my face. This is excellent writing and defininitely worth a 6 star rating. Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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You are very welcome. This is absolutely marvelous. I have had my heart broken on more than one occasion and you seem to have summed up the healing process perfectly and with just enough humor to bring a smile to my face. This is excellent writing and defininitely worth a 6 star rating. Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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I am so glad you liked it. I am also so glad you had that wonderful picture there for me to use. That is the second time I've used that one. You are a very talented artist as well as a talented writer. I really appreciate you six star rating.
Beth
Comment from Jnetgame
Excellent essay. I think you did a great job expressing what people go through when their hearts are broken and how there is very little you can do to help them except be there. I have one six star rating left, so I'm giving it to you.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Excellent essay. I think you did a great job expressing what people go through when their hearts are broken and how there is very little you can do to help them except be there. I have one six star rating left, so I'm giving it to you.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Thank you so much for the six star rating and for the lovely comments.
Beth
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I have boys and you pretty much nailed it. When my third son's girlfriend broke up with him because he forgot their third week anniversary, his line was, "I wondered what I did run. Lets go work out." I am glad I didn't have the drama of the girls. I don't deal with it well. You wrote a fun and easy to read short story. I've missed your writing lately. Glad to catch this one.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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I have boys and you pretty much nailed it. When my third son's girlfriend broke up with him because he forgot their third week anniversary, his line was, "I wondered what I did run. Lets go work out." I am glad I didn't have the drama of the girls. I don't deal with it well. You wrote a fun and easy to read short story. I've missed your writing lately. Glad to catch this one.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Thank you barbara, It's good to have you back. I've written mostly poems lately. I appreciate the reveiw and the nice comments.
Beth
Comment from Begin Again
Beth
I love your humor and your understanding that you put ionto you essay. Young people seem to get hurt quicker and more often I think now days. My son was engaged to his fiance of 4 years. She came home and without a fight said she was moving out. Three months later she was married to someone else and pregnant. He still isn't over the pain. Very well done, Beth.
Carol
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Beth
I love your humor and your understanding that you put ionto you essay. Young people seem to get hurt quicker and more often I think now days. My son was engaged to his fiance of 4 years. She came home and without a fight said she was moving out. Three months later she was married to someone else and pregnant. He still isn't over the pain. Very well done, Beth.
Carol
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Carol, Thank you for the review and nice comments. I'm sorry about your son. My son's wife of 19 years just moved out. Those teenage romances eventually pass but when they are older it may be a different story. I haven't dealt with this one yet.
It's the grandchildren whose hearts are the most broken.
Beth
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Beth
It's always a hard decision when children are involved. I stayed with my husband for the children and now that they are adults they say I should have left much earlier...One never knows. My thoughts and prayers are with you and your family. Carol
