Tantalizing Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Chapter 3 Part 6"Dishonesty VS Love. Which will win?
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Comment from Belinda
Nothing to correct, Barbara, except for a little spelling 'slip'. Some one should be one word. The rest... this chapter is enjoyable to read.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Nothing to correct, Barbara, except for a little spelling 'slip'. Some one should be one word. The rest... this chapter is enjoyable to read.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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I corrected before I wrote your reply so I wouldn't forget. Thank you for catching it. You're the only one who has. I appreciate it and your continued support.
Comment from L.lora
The old cat and mouse game, yes
I think they both have designs
on each other only in a different
way and I think their feelings are
totally unfamiliar territory for
both leaving them inept as how to
handle/deal with what they are feeling.
Very strong write, with just the right
amount of levity to balance out the
situation. no nits...Lora
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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The old cat and mouse game, yes
I think they both have designs
on each other only in a different
way and I think their feelings are
totally unfamiliar territory for
both leaving them inept as how to
handle/deal with what they are feeling.
Very strong write, with just the right
amount of levity to balance out the
situation. no nits...Lora
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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You have caught onto the entire plot. Oh dear, now where do I go. Thank you for the review. I alway enjoy hearing from you.
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You are most welcome Barbara, I'm sure there is much more to the plot than you are letting on. Will they wise up or won't they...will they act upon their feelings or no... so much can happen...can't wait to read what's next...Lora
Comment from wrdtrctr
Interesting plot line with the phony marriage but the story reads a lot like a daytime soap. Not sure if that is on purpose or not. The writing is good.
I think you meant a lat machine, not lap.
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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Interesting plot line with the phony marriage but the story reads a lot like a daytime soap. Not sure if that is on purpose or not. The writing is good.
I think you meant a lat machine, not lap.
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Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Hummmmm.... I never really thought of a daytime soap. I will have to give it some thought. Thank you for your review. Will get on the typo.
Comment from Readywriter52
Leya doesn't know what to do with herself now that she's married. I really think she wants a real wedding but a pretend marriage is better than being married to Carlos. She has a lot of adjusting to do.
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Leya doesn't know what to do with herself now that she's married. I really think she wants a real wedding but a pretend marriage is better than being married to Carlos. She has a lot of adjusting to do.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Yes, Leya is a smart young lady, but has herself in over her head. I have a feeling Steven will help her adjust. Thank you for the review and the support.
Comment from Arturo Palavicini
Well, I read the last part of a very extended story, so I don't have all the issues at hand to make a full review, but what I read is marvelous, very interesting. The story keep the intertest all the time and the ambience is very well constructed.
I promise I will read the other chapters.
Congratulations.
Best Regards.
Arturo Palavicini
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Well, I read the last part of a very extended story, so I don't have all the issues at hand to make a full review, but what I read is marvelous, very interesting. The story keep the intertest all the time and the ambience is very well constructed.
I promise I will read the other chapters.
Congratulations.
Best Regards.
Arturo Palavicini
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Thank you for your review. I will hold you to your promise. I want to make sure it all flows nicely.
Comment from Begin Again
Barbara
Maybe Steven is mellowing a tiny little bit after all. That would be a good thing! Enjoyed the chapter as usual. Great job, Barb.
Carol
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Barbara
Maybe Steven is mellowing a tiny little bit after all. That would be a good thing! Enjoyed the chapter as usual. Great job, Barb.
Carol
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Thank you for your review. I always appreciate hearing from you.
Comment from MHindt
This is a very enjoyable story. The dialogue is engaging and the story moves just fast enough to where you aren't finishing too fast but your also not wanting to skip paragraphs. All in all this is a very well done chapter in what I am sure is an excellent book! I say kudos to you this is an extremely well written story! I look forward to reading the coming chapters! Keep up the good work,
-Matt
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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This is a very enjoyable story. The dialogue is engaging and the story moves just fast enough to where you aren't finishing too fast but your also not wanting to skip paragraphs. All in all this is a very well done chapter in what I am sure is an excellent book! I say kudos to you this is an extremely well written story! I look forward to reading the coming chapters! Keep up the good work,
-Matt
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Thank you for your review and you kind words. I appreciate the support.
Comment from adewpearl
I feel so bad for her - all alone on a treadmill on her wedding night - all dressed up in stilettos and no place to go - I'm so glad Steven came in and then the others so she felt part of their circle of friendship at least. Yeah, he's interested!! LOL Brooke
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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I feel so bad for her - all alone on a treadmill on her wedding night - all dressed up in stilettos and no place to go - I'm so glad Steven came in and then the others so she felt part of their circle of friendship at least. Yeah, he's interested!! LOL Brooke
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Oh yea, he's interested. Thank you for your review.
Comment from c_lucas
Quite a wedding night. Get married in the afternoon and spend time tossing a medicine ball in the evening. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Quite a wedding night. Get married in the afternoon and spend time tossing a medicine ball in the evening. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Thank you for your review and your support.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from nora arjuna
oh, steven, he can be that naive, huh? he doesn't understand women! :)
for us, Muslims, even though a couple get married out of a certain arrangement, it has to be culminated.
Wanting to impress him, she tapped on the speed-up button
-impress or draw his attention?
i wonder where this couple will be going. write on!
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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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oh, steven, he can be that naive, huh? he doesn't understand women! :)
for us, Muslims, even though a couple get married out of a certain arrangement, it has to be culminated.
Wanting to impress him, she tapped on the speed-up button
-impress or draw his attention?
i wonder where this couple will be going. write on!
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Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Thank you. To Steven the marriage is strictly a business arrangement so he can get it annulled. We'll see. Thank you for your review. I always enjoy hearing from her.
