CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from grassroots08
This was a great couple lines :
"The dark may wax
The light may wane"
Wonderfully penned piece. Keep it up!
Cheers, Don
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This was a great couple lines :
"The dark may wax
The light may wane"
Wonderfully penned piece. Keep it up!
Cheers, Don
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
Comment from mushroom
A very strong and forthright message, it is very well written and i love the battle cry last lines, the artwork you have chosen is very striking and a very good choice
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A very strong and forthright message, it is very well written and i love the battle cry last lines, the artwork you have chosen is very striking and a very good choice
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
Comment from dneves
A very stirring philipic! It is well conceived, I'm just a bit unclear as to why you wrote it. Every poem should have a story-that is what sets each individual piece apart. There is a little weakness in that there are a few idiomatomatic word choices (wax, wane). The challenge for the poet is always to discover fresh, new language-which is why absurd is good! However, you are proof positive that beautiful ladies can write good poetry! LOL
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A very stirring philipic! It is well conceived, I'm just a bit unclear as to why you wrote it. Every poem should have a story-that is what sets each individual piece apart. There is a little weakness in that there are a few idiomatomatic word choices (wax, wane). The challenge for the poet is always to discover fresh, new language-which is why absurd is good! However, you are proof positive that beautiful ladies can write good poetry! LOL
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Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
Comment from dportwood
It's amazing how a group of people can be energized by a well-known battle cry. Of course, the military makes good use this fact.
Duane
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It's amazing how a group of people can be energized by a well-known battle cry. Of course, the military makes good use this fact.
Duane
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
Comment from Somer
It's very nice. Had a good start to it. Kept my attention the whole way. It is about not giving up, am i right?
Very well Written.
Best Wishes
-Somer
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It's very nice. Had a good start to it. Kept my attention the whole way. It is about not giving up, am i right?
Very well Written.
Best Wishes
-Somer
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
Comment from Phil Kitom
Morale can often sway both sides and can easily
be swayed by just one member of a group. One
can bring it down with a sneer while one with
a smile can make lightness appear. Enjoyable
poem...
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Morale can often sway both sides and can easily
be swayed by just one member of a group. One
can bring it down with a sneer while one with
a smile can make lightness appear. Enjoyable
poem...
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
Comment from Steven Bishop
Wow. This near perfect. I like how you linked the first and last stanza with the same rhyme scheme, and the picture you chose was especially powerful. Where did you find it?
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Wow. This near perfect. I like how you linked the first and last stanza with the same rhyme scheme, and the picture you chose was especially powerful. Where did you find it?
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
Comment from Robbi Kayser-Stange
There is an obvious energy here that makes itself know past the words, around the words and through the words. Nice package..... Picture and words both convey the energy that this piece oozes. Robbi
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There is an obvious energy here that makes itself know past the words, around the words and through the words. Nice package..... Picture and words both convey the energy that this piece oozes. Robbi
Comment Written 07-Jul-2009
Comment from S.Yocom
This is an uplifting poem of will and courage, Sue. I like your ABCDC rhyme scheme. Nice meter too. In your author notes you mention that the phrase is also known as esprit de corps. I think that that would have been a better spelling in the poem. Anyway, you did nice work here.
Sally
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This is an uplifting poem of will and courage, Sue. I like your ABCDC rhyme scheme. Nice meter too. In your author notes you mention that the phrase is also known as esprit de corps. I think that that would have been a better spelling in the poem. Anyway, you did nice work here.
Sally
Comment Written 07-Jul-2009
Comment from jgaman
I liked this piece because you chose words that were not obvious. Your writing reads and flows just as the words of great poets before us.
Thank you for writting and sharing. Keep posting...we will all keep reading.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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I liked this piece because you chose words that were not obvious. Your writing reads and flows just as the words of great poets before us.
Thank you for writting and sharing. Keep posting...we will all keep reading.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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Your review has uplifted me so much. Wow! So much appreciated. Warmest regards, Sue