CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Quilt of Nature"A collection of poetry
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Comment from bard owl
Autumn is indeed a patchwork quilt. The picture you have chosen is a great accompanyment to your words. Green does indeed yield to the beautiful autumn reds and golds. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings to you, Linda
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Autumn is indeed a patchwork quilt. The picture you have chosen is a great accompanyment to your words. Green does indeed yield to the beautiful autumn reds and golds. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings to you, Linda
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
Comment from Psychonaut X
While I like the idea in the second line - green yielding to more autumnal colors - I think the use of yellow and gold together is somewhat redundant. Technically, yellow and gold are different colors on the spectrum, but in the context of autumn they are essentially the same. Maybe omit the plurals and use orange, red, and gold? It would keep the 7 required syllables. Just a thought.
First line was good and the last line was spectacular! I loved the image of the leaves forming a patchwork quilt. If it weren't for the redundancy in the second line, I would have given this a 5 star.
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While I like the idea in the second line - green yielding to more autumnal colors - I think the use of yellow and gold together is somewhat redundant. Technically, yellow and gold are different colors on the spectrum, but in the context of autumn they are essentially the same. Maybe omit the plurals and use orange, red, and gold? It would keep the 7 required syllables. Just a thought.
First line was good and the last line was spectacular! I loved the image of the leaves forming a patchwork quilt. If it weren't for the redundancy in the second line, I would have given this a 5 star.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
Comment from Winslow
Dear Sixteen,
Indeed autumn does produce an array of colors, woven into a showy quilt. Some provide there square early, some provide it late and the conifers sit and applaud the change.
Warm regards,
Winslow
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Dear Sixteen,
Indeed autumn does produce an array of colors, woven into a showy quilt. Some provide there square early, some provide it late and the conifers sit and applaud the change.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
Comment from The Cowboy Poet
I mentioned to another poet that I hesitate to review short poems like haikus because there is little to review. However, sometimes I get a surprise. This one is very nice. It has excellent imagery, a little alliteration for that musical quality, and a superb metaphor-personification combination in the last line. Don't change a thing. Rhymeman.
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I mentioned to another poet that I hesitate to review short poems like haikus because there is little to review. However, sometimes I get a surprise. This one is very nice. It has excellent imagery, a little alliteration for that musical quality, and a superb metaphor-personification combination in the last line. Don't change a thing. Rhymeman.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello!
Softly crafted - warmth exudes from your chosen words. And yes, autumn surely appears like a beautifully constructed quilt of Nature's choicest hues. Simplicity yet creating a memorable visual picture! Take Care...diane
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Hello!
Softly crafted - warmth exudes from your chosen words. And yes, autumn surely appears like a beautifully constructed quilt of Nature's choicest hues. Simplicity yet creating a memorable visual picture! Take Care...diane
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is well written giving the reader beautiful imagery very well presented with the photograph good luck in the contest regards Fuller
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This is well written giving the reader beautiful imagery very well presented with the photograph good luck in the contest regards Fuller
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
Comment from Kingsland
you're kind of rushing the seasons here .Unless you happen to be down under. This was a well written verse that was my pleasure to have reviewed it... John
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you're kind of rushing the seasons here .Unless you happen to be down under. This was a well written verse that was my pleasure to have reviewed it... John
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Yeah, I have no idea why there was a contest on "Autumn", but thought I'd enter it anyway. Thanks for your very kind review. Sue :-))
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Nicely done haiku for the contest. Great imagery with awesome picture to accompany it, though it stands on its own merit through your well-chosen words. Good luck. Susanne
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Nicely done haiku for the contest. Great imagery with awesome picture to accompany it, though it stands on its own merit through your well-chosen words. Good luck. Susanne
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
Comment from jeslaf
Sue, love the imagery of the 'patchwork quilt', the soft, gentle verb 'yield', the change from 'summer green' to autumn's array. Good job! :)
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Sue, love the imagery of the 'patchwork quilt', the soft, gentle verb 'yield', the change from 'summer green' to autumn's array. Good job! :)
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Good Saturday morning to you poet friend Susy.
This is indeed a breath taking beauty of a quilt, spokedn well. I enjoyed the photo pic! Loyd
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Good Saturday morning to you poet friend Susy.
This is indeed a breath taking beauty of a quilt, spokedn well. I enjoyed the photo pic! Loyd
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009