Comment from rhymer1

Excellent

I could swear I recently read a vignette that commenced exactly as this one did, but then they differed. Your prose are spot on and the vignette entertaining, if scary. Slainte, rhymer1

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2009

Thank rhymer1, Maybe your read something else I wrote and style was the same. I appreciate you comments.
Beth

Comment from yachtworknz

Good

Beth-Nice work. I know the feeling of vacation scrooge. Like we need a vacation from the vacation type feeling.

The four stars is for the length to plot progression. I think if you did a word count then cut the work by 40% you would tighten up the writing and get more reviews.

Just a thought. Feel free to PM me if you make any corrections and I'll re-review.
Cheers
Scott

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 Comment Written 08-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2009

Thanks for the review.
Beth

Comment from eliz100

Excellent

This was a great story and you told it well. It brings back memories for me and family vacations. Migraines were not part of the problem but motion sickness was at least you did not have to deal with throw up. I do not see any room for improvement.

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2009

Eliz, Thank you for reading and commenting. All the comments I've gotten so far are from people who have been there.
Beth

Comment from Amfunny

Excellent

Interesting essay on your vacation. Some vacations can be like that. I bet we all have a horror story or two to tell. This was nice to read. I think you need to change a word in this sentence: Nevertheless by the second day, in was in the best interest of all concerned

I think you meant IT was in the best interest...not in was in the best interest.

Nicely done.

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2009

Thank you for pointing that misspelling out. It is so easy to pass over those little words. I'm glad you caught it. Thank you for your review and rating.

Comment from WRITER1

Excellent

I have had these vacations, husband with migraine, the whole nine yards.... You did a good job on this piece. I see no need for revision.

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 Comment Written 08-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2009

Thank you writer. I appreciate you comments.
Beth