CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "An Unexpected Smile"A collection of poetry
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Comment from lennis
You've done a good job staying true to the confines of the technical requirements of the sonnet, while at the same time penning an enjoyable read. Not easy to do! This flows well and your message is clear. Good work!
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You've done a good job staying true to the confines of the technical requirements of the sonnet, while at the same time penning an enjoyable read. Not easy to do! This flows well and your message is clear. Good work!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2009
Comment from drivenbackward
Good poem, Six. Romance isn't really my thing, but I appreciated it. Good luck in the contest.
My memories of past, are all ignored
--- Comma doesn't really make sense here.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2009
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Good poem, Six. Romance isn't really my thing, but I appreciated it. Good luck in the contest.
My memories of past, are all ignored
--- Comma doesn't really make sense here.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2009
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Why is it one reads and re-reads their work over and over and a terrible punctuation problem like that is totally missed??? Thanks so much for bringing that up. All fixed. And thank you for your very kind review. With regards, Sue
Comment from Alexander E Poet
Great poem good message, love the imagery and the thoughts behind it. You done a great job and are a talented poet it has a clear message vision of life . There were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one. And Bully for you QQ
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2009
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Great poem good message, love the imagery and the thoughts behind it. You done a great job and are a talented poet it has a clear message vision of life . There were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one. And Bully for you QQ
Comment Written 19-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2009
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BrQQLYN, thank you very much for your great review and compliments. :-)) Sue
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'An Unexpected Smile' is a delightfully written piece which brings with it a message on love lost, renewed strength and love gained. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2009
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'An Unexpected Smile' is a delightfully written piece which brings with it a message on love lost, renewed strength and love gained. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2009
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Duchess, thank you for your very kind review and compliments. Very much appreciated, Sue
Sue, you're more than welcome.
All the best,
the Duchess
Comment from Fireflyte
Excellent. The phrase "In shatters" confused me for a moment, but I realized that was partly because I wasn't reading in iambic pentameter. On reread it made perfect sense. All other lines flowed very well, which is particularly impressive given the difficult constraints you had to work in. Excellent job.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2009
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Excellent. The phrase "In shatters" confused me for a moment, but I realized that was partly because I wasn't reading in iambic pentameter. On reread it made perfect sense. All other lines flowed very well, which is particularly impressive given the difficult constraints you had to work in. Excellent job.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2009
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Fireflyte, thank you for your very kind review and compliments. I do love a sonnet! And glad you enjoyed this one. With regards, Sue
Comment from yachtworknz
Switch-That was great. Strong and true.
I liked this bit-
But now your glint, a razor-sharpened sword
has slashed through my defenses, with a hush
My memories of past, are all ignored
as I return your smile, I'm pink with blush
Kind of the change that only love can bring.
Scott
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2009
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Switch-That was great. Strong and true.
I liked this bit-
But now your glint, a razor-sharpened sword
has slashed through my defenses, with a hush
My memories of past, are all ignored
as I return your smile, I'm pink with blush
Kind of the change that only love can bring.
Scott
Comment Written 19-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2009
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Scott, yes, one glance sometimes and, voila! Thanks for highlighting the stanza you liked. And for your very kind review. With regards, Sue
Comment from justmade
I love the ending in this poem I think it is perfect really.
I love how it went from a quite sad beginning to a happy ending. Nice work Sue.
Much love,
Justmade.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2009
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I love the ending in this poem I think it is perfect really.
I love how it went from a quite sad beginning to a happy ending. Nice work Sue.
Much love,
Justmade.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2009
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Justmade, yeah, I decided to mix it up (time-frame wise) and glad it worked. Thanks very much for commenting on that and for your very generous review. With Regards, Sue
Comment from mmichelle97219
I really do like this one, and thought it read so fantastically out loud. You know from me I don't just praise lightly. Good luck in the voting booth. its a solidly good entry.
Michelle
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2009
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I really do like this one, and thought it read so fantastically out loud. You know from me I don't just praise lightly. Good luck in the voting booth. its a solidly good entry.
Michelle
Comment Written 19-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2009
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You are a hardcore truth-teller! HA! (oh, God, here comes Michelle - LOL!) I always appreciate your very close reads and thanks so much for your great review and compliments. With regards, Sue
Comment from SteveI
Excellent piece for the young at heart and young in age. For me though it is gentle, kind reminder to keep my heart within its sheath as every time I have taken it from there it has been lied to get it out and then used upon my own person for the enjoyment of conquering what ever I was at that time in my life; a famous athlete, a famous Professor, a famous writer but never , ever for just who I am behind the titles and money and fame.
Excellent work
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Excellent piece for the young at heart and young in age. For me though it is gentle, kind reminder to keep my heart within its sheath as every time I have taken it from there it has been lied to get it out and then used upon my own person for the enjoyment of conquering what ever I was at that time in my life; a famous athlete, a famous Professor, a famous writer but never , ever for just who I am behind the titles and money and fame.
Excellent work
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
Comment from EllenV
A delightful sonnet, Sixteezkid.
So happy to read a poem about love as so beautifully expressed in these lovely last lines:
My hardened, tempered heart has taken flight
Now melted by your beckoning delight
Enjoyed the read,
ellen
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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A delightful sonnet, Sixteezkid.
So happy to read a poem about love as so beautifully expressed in these lovely last lines:
My hardened, tempered heart has taken flight
Now melted by your beckoning delight
Enjoyed the read,
ellen
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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Ellen, so glad you enjoyed this sonnet. Thank you for highlighting the lines you liked. And for your very kind review and compliments. With regards, Sue