When We Were Once Five
Contest Entry: Children's Poem37 total reviews
Comment from TinyTeena
A very clever use of Nursery Rhymes that are favourites of five year olds (and some adults too!) Questioning makes us think what life would have been like without all these lovely make-believe verses. Children's minds need to be stimulated to help them learn and create. Hearing how others have expressed their ideas can be helpful in developing the child's experiences and knowledge. Well done
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A very clever use of Nursery Rhymes that are favourites of five year olds (and some adults too!) Questioning makes us think what life would have been like without all these lovely make-believe verses. Children's minds need to be stimulated to help them learn and create. Hearing how others have expressed their ideas can be helpful in developing the child's experiences and knowledge. Well done
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi Diane,
The whole piece is darling. The art work and your poem. As usual your creative voice provides an excellent read. Rhyme and flow are great. Interesting and sends us back into those nursery rhyme days. Thank you for sharing this well written contest entry. God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
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Hi Diane,
The whole piece is darling. The art work and your poem. As usual your creative voice provides an excellent read. Rhyme and flow are great. Interesting and sends us back into those nursery rhyme days. Thank you for sharing this well written contest entry. God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
Comment from chrisweigand
Interesting contemplation. I'd like to think that if those wonderful rhymes, stories and poems had not been there that our fertile little imaginations would have created some for our childish purposes. Good work.
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Interesting contemplation. I'd like to think that if those wonderful rhymes, stories and poems had not been there that our fertile little imaginations would have created some for our childish purposes. Good work.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
Comment from mmichelle97219
Suppose Jack Sprat never ate any fat
Jack Sprat at no fat his wifee would eat no lean.
You need to adjust this line a little. Otherwise it is a strong entry into the contest. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. I really did like it.
Michelle
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Suppose Jack Sprat never ate any fat
Jack Sprat at no fat his wifee would eat no lean.
You need to adjust this line a little. Otherwise it is a strong entry into the contest. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. I really did like it.
Michelle
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Thank you so much Michelle for pointing that out to me!! I adjusted it right away this morning! What a fun contest! Am glad you enjoyed! Thank you for your kind suggestion and comments. diane
Comment from Marathonwriter
Hello Mrs. KT,
I loved this! I would give you a six, if I had any left! I love how you used nursery rhymes and put your own twist on them. Congratulations on a delightful poem. Love, Chris
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Hello Mrs. KT,
I loved this! I would give you a six, if I had any left! I love how you used nursery rhymes and put your own twist on them. Congratulations on a delightful poem. Love, Chris
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
Comment from fayesh
I think this was a lovely poem, but I see a problem with the content since young children, nowadays, have no idea about some of the nursery rhyme characters you reference. Your poem speaks of a gentler time, one in which we grew up. Now, it's Thomas the Train, Clifford the Red Dog, Jane and the Dragon.
I see this poem as being for us adults who remember those precious nursery rhymes.
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I think this was a lovely poem, but I see a problem with the content since young children, nowadays, have no idea about some of the nursery rhyme characters you reference. Your poem speaks of a gentler time, one in which we grew up. Now, it's Thomas the Train, Clifford the Red Dog, Jane and the Dragon.
I see this poem as being for us adults who remember those precious nursery rhymes.
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Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
Comment from adewpearl
I love that you incorporate all the different children's stories and nursery rhymes and I think the cadence and rhyming are great - in the end it starts sounding like you're writing to an adult audience instead of to children, but I won't rate down for that as I love the first part so much.
Brooke
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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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I love that you incorporate all the different children's stories and nursery rhymes and I think the cadence and rhyming are great - in the end it starts sounding like you're writing to an adult audience instead of to children, but I won't rate down for that as I love the first part so much.
Brooke
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Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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Hello! So pleased you enjoyed! I have taught school for 30+ years, and the ending of my offering has a great deal to do with that, for even children seven years old will say, "Do you remember when we were little? Like when we were five?" Take Care! diane
