CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Minglement
This is a very powerful and telling story told in your poem. Someone needs to help her (or him) not to see themselves as a victim forever. They couldn't help what happened but they have to get past it. Thanks for telling the story.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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This is a very powerful and telling story told in your poem. Someone needs to help her (or him) not to see themselves as a victim forever. They couldn't help what happened but they have to get past it. Thanks for telling the story.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Marcia, you have a big heart. Thank you so much for reading and for your very kind review. Always, Sue
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I meant what I said. I know it's easy to allow the characterization of a victim, but it needs to change to victor! Trust me, I know. Do take care, friend. Marcia
Comment from Jazh
This is a powerful poem and it conveys the message about child abuse very clearly. You've made good use of alliteration. I particularly like the sound of "Traumatized and paralyzed" - very effective. :)
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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This is a powerful poem and it conveys the message about child abuse very clearly. You've made good use of alliteration. I particularly like the sound of "Traumatized and paralyzed" - very effective. :)
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Jazh, thanks for your very generous review. Always, Sue
Comment from Dreamdancer
Hello my friend,
I was touched by this for I have a friend who has experienced being the victim. It's sad that I have always been the one who had to pick up the pieces... Great message my friend... Dreamdancer
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Hello my friend,
I was touched by this for I have a friend who has experienced being the victim. It's sad that I have always been the one who had to pick up the pieces... Great message my friend... Dreamdancer
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Then, you've seen "the damage done". The ripple effect is enormous and incalculable. Thanks very much for your very kind review. Sue
Comment from minopavlic
This brilliantly crafted tragedy goes beyond descriptive words, as to the horrors felt and the irreplacable scars left. In complete unsuspecting innocent purity, a life is forever changed.... I myself have my own brand of justice towards such a premeditated, malicious predator
No_obstacle
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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This brilliantly crafted tragedy goes beyond descriptive words, as to the horrors felt and the irreplacable scars left. In complete unsuspecting innocent purity, a life is forever changed.... I myself have my own brand of justice towards such a premeditated, malicious predator
No_obstacle
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Yes, "complete unsuspecting". Thank you for your very kind review. Always appreciated, Sue
Comment from mslyla216
No, it seems no one ever sees these things coming. I think most of us have either been molested in this way or had our trust completely violated when it has happened to someone we know well. This poem is filled with pain and tells a truth that is devastating. A victim forever. This is a good telling of this horror. mslyla
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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No, it seems no one ever sees these things coming. I think most of us have either been molested in this way or had our trust completely violated when it has happened to someone we know well. This poem is filled with pain and tells a truth that is devastating. A victim forever. This is a good telling of this horror. mslyla
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Yes, completely life altering. Trust gone out the door. Thanks so much for your very kind review. With regards, Sue
Comment from Hitcher
A Very disturbing offering friend, unbelievably sad and tragic, I hope the monster has been dealt with in the nastiest of manners and I mean Nastiest! That kind of shit ignites the kind of rage in me that scares me sometimes Sue! It cannot of been easy writing this one, I hope you are OK friend!
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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A Very disturbing offering friend, unbelievably sad and tragic, I hope the monster has been dealt with in the nastiest of manners and I mean Nastiest! That kind of shit ignites the kind of rage in me that scares me sometimes Sue! It cannot of been easy writing this one, I hope you are OK friend!
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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The monster now lives a very sad life. Thankfully. Thank you for your kind review, Hitch. Sue
Comment from jaeladarling
Acts like this disgust me, and if something like that happened to someone I know, I'd have to hunt them down and beat them to near death. Or maybe I wouldn't stop.
Anyway, you've got a powerful poem here. Thank you so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2009
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Acts like this disgust me, and if something like that happened to someone I know, I'd have to hunt them down and beat them to near death. Or maybe I wouldn't stop.
Anyway, you've got a powerful poem here. Thank you so much for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2009
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It's a good thing they live in another country; I may have done the unthinkable. Thanks for your very kind review. Always, Sue
Comment from fastdigits
The perfect art work to
go with your tale of
betrayal of trust, the
words of tears staining
the pages below the
picture.
Well done
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2009
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The perfect art work to
go with your tale of
betrayal of trust, the
words of tears staining
the pages below the
picture.
Well done
Comment Written 02-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2009
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Thank you for your very kind review. Always appreciated, Sue
Comment from adewpearl
good rictameter form used to demonstrate how traumatizing this sort of violence can be in a person's life - it can be paralyzing and you convey that powerfully Brooke
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2009
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good rictameter form used to demonstrate how traumatizing this sort of violence can be in a person's life - it can be paralyzing and you convey that powerfully Brooke
Comment Written 02-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2009
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I felt that the only way to tell this story was through a ric, which is basically like free verse, but restricts one to the essential words. Thank you for your very kind review, Brooke. Always, Sue
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now you're giving poetry forms nicknames? LOL
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LOL!! Too long of a name. He's become such a friend, I've named him Ric(k). HA!!!
Comment from judiblaze
Once again another wonderful poem. There is a line that bothers me:
Of fear and became a
hospitalized
Victim ------I don't know why it just stopped the flow for me. Maybe, becoming a hospitalized..
Anyhow, very good.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2009
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Once again another wonderful poem. There is a line that bothers me:
Of fear and became a
hospitalized
Victim ------I don't know why it just stopped the flow for me. Maybe, becoming a hospitalized..
Anyhow, very good.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2009
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In a ric, the last word must tie in (not stand alone) with the previous thoughts. So when read, it says, "Traumatized by paralysis of fear and became a hospitalized victim.
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In a ric, the last word must tie in (not stand alone) with the previous thoughts. So when read, it says, "Traumatized by paralysis of fear and became a hospitalized victim. (as she did become). Does that help or do you think it may need work? Thanks very much for your review and honest comments. Regards, Sue