CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Karen B.
What a tragedy life is for those who start down this path. This is a sad and powerful description of what they endure. Well done. Karen
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What a tragedy life is for those who start down this path. This is a sad and powerful description of what they endure. Well done. Karen
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009
Comment from rhymelord
As a neophyte to the study of arcane formats of poetry, I can only admire the ease with which you produce such flowing work. Your sympathy for the poor souls addicted to drugs shows in this lovely piece. However, the "no set meter"
intent fails, I'm afraid. Only one line, to me, anyway, fails to scan and that is "Within nirvana's reign o'er me", which is so close to perfect metre, it doesn't matter. Congratulations.
Reg
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As a neophyte to the study of arcane formats of poetry, I can only admire the ease with which you produce such flowing work. Your sympathy for the poor souls addicted to drugs shows in this lovely piece. However, the "no set meter"
intent fails, I'm afraid. Only one line, to me, anyway, fails to scan and that is "Within nirvana's reign o'er me", which is so close to perfect metre, it doesn't matter. Congratulations.
Reg
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009
Comment from Miska
A sad heartbreaking subject. You write it well, the blissful promise tangled in the terrible result.
The form is interesting, flows well. good work. regards Miska
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A sad heartbreaking subject. You write it well, the blissful promise tangled in the terrible result.
The form is interesting, flows well. good work. regards Miska
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009
Comment from ulster3
Hi sixteez.
This is another excellent work. It is hard to believe you've been writing such a short time. Only because you do it so well! Obviously you should keep on writing. Sorry about your relative. It is hard for all the families as well as the addicts. Fondly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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Hi sixteez.
This is another excellent work. It is hard to believe you've been writing such a short time. Only because you do it so well! Obviously you should keep on writing. Sorry about your relative. It is hard for all the families as well as the addicts. Fondly, Rebecca
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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You can't believe it? I'm in shock! LOL!!! I'm only wondering why it took me 53 years to feel the need to write. Oh, well...as they say...better late than never! I can't imagine not writing now. Too much joy and sadness and experiences to write about. Never can run out of material. Thank you for our very generous review and compliments. Always appreciated, Sue
Comment from minopavlic
Interesting reflection into a devastating epidemic, that many in our present day pay little notice to. However as a result of my own unpredictable lifestyle of intervenous drug user. In 1991, I contracted the incurable HIV infection. This virus in itself is a plague that as well threatens the world.
We all struggle with our own inner demons. Some are fortunate enough to escape the haunting nightmares, while others search deep within their souls for answers in hopes of escaping the suffocating madness.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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Interesting reflection into a devastating epidemic, that many in our present day pay little notice to. However as a result of my own unpredictable lifestyle of intervenous drug user. In 1991, I contracted the incurable HIV infection. This virus in itself is a plague that as well threatens the world.
We all struggle with our own inner demons. Some are fortunate enough to escape the haunting nightmares, while others search deep within their souls for answers in hopes of escaping the suffocating madness.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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no_obstacle, I am so sorry to hear of this terrible news. 18 years since diagnosis is a miracle! Although, I know it isn't easy for you, as I have lost 2 friends to aids. A lot of trauma can come our way in this world. And yes, some do anything to escape it. No judgment from me...as I have seen many try to cope with so many tragedies. Thank you for sharing your own experiences and consequences with this journey that many take. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from bluefly
Hi Sixteezkid,
This is a well constructed poem that captures the plight of the addict, though not giving a grim picture without all the horror of addiction.
Nicely Done!
Scott
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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Hi Sixteezkid,
This is a well constructed poem that captures the plight of the addict, though not giving a grim picture without all the horror of addiction.
Nicely Done!
Scott
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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Yes, I chose not to go with the specific ugliness of addiction, as I wanted to convey the on-going vicious circle an addict goes through. Thank you for your review and comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from Joan E.
You on the persona very effectively and the repeating lines were very powerful. The title and picture you chose to accompany your poem were quite appropriate.
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You on the persona very effectively and the repeating lines were very powerful. The title and picture you chose to accompany your poem were quite appropriate.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
Comment from Hitcher
I love a pantoum, it is definitely on my list of poems I want to try out, Jude is the Queen of the style so her review is the one you should seek out my friend. I left England with an good friend when I was 26 he was heading down the wrong path and unfortunately I could not stop him I left him in Israel when I met my partner, 18 months later he was dead, overdosed on ketamine, when I left him he wasn't injecting but was into the opium[smoking, eating] I could not stay with him lest I be drawn down the same path, I used to love a Joint back in the day, I have long given it up. I think you did a great job, you could of made it darker because their worlds are bottomless,and the fall is endless.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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I love a pantoum, it is definitely on my list of poems I want to try out, Jude is the Queen of the style so her review is the one you should seek out my friend. I left England with an good friend when I was 26 he was heading down the wrong path and unfortunately I could not stop him I left him in Israel when I met my partner, 18 months later he was dead, overdosed on ketamine, when I left him he wasn't injecting but was into the opium[smoking, eating] I could not stay with him lest I be drawn down the same path, I used to love a Joint back in the day, I have long given it up. I think you did a great job, you could of made it darker because their worlds are bottomless,and the fall is endless.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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Hitcher,
I have been threatening myself for awhile to try the pantoum. And told Jude several times. So, today she came out with another one and I said, "today's the day". HA! She was a great help.
Yes, it is all a horror story. Life Over! Full Stop!
I hear you about me making it darker. But, I intentionally stayed away from that, as we all know the ins and outs. I really wanted to capture the "feeling" from the addict's mind- what he/she seeks on a daily basis (the high). I felt the pantoum allowed the repetitive feature to show the vicious cycle.
Thanks very much for your review, my friend! Hope all is well on the homefront (and the beach!)
Sue
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You did a great job Sue! I'm just a tad darker than you is all friend.
it is Tuesday which is family bbq night, so yes it is back to the beach in a couple of hours, ha ha.
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So glad for you....how nice.
NOW SHUT UP!!!!!!
LOL!!!
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Orrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr is it a tad cold over there friend, just take warmth from knowing that I'm happy friend, happy basking in the sun cooking up chicken and stake on the lake front, half naked bodies everywhere, Mmmmm! ha ha ha ha! would you like an ice cream friend, ha ha
Sorry I'm cruel sometimes,
you know I'm just
playing with
You.
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Just do me one favour. Check out the hot men with speedos on AND the ones with the surf life-saving tight shorts for me. And tell me just how HOT they are! Don't worry, I know you're purely a full-fledged heterosexual man. But, the least you can do is fill me in. Bulging upper bodies? 6-packs? Awesome hams?
Just give me that, friend. Nothing but lumberjack shirts here for the moment! LOL!!!
Of course, I'm happy for you and your family! You're my dear friend!!!
Suc is back!
Comment from Roisin
Wow! This is a wonderfully powerful poem. Your message is very strong and your imagery is very vivid. Your rhyme is great too and it flows really well throughout. The picture you chose is great and fits perfectly. An addiction like this is just so sad. It's a vicious circle which is so difficult for the addicts to get out of. You've done a great job here.
Warm regards.
Roisin
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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Wow! This is a wonderfully powerful poem. Your message is very strong and your imagery is very vivid. Your rhyme is great too and it flows really well throughout. The picture you chose is great and fits perfectly. An addiction like this is just so sad. It's a vicious circle which is so difficult for the addicts to get out of. You've done a great job here.
Warm regards.
Roisin
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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Roisin, so glad you liked this work. It is my first pantoum. Was encouraged by Jude. She was a great help! I liked the pantoum for this subject to show that vicious cycle. Thank you so much for your great review and comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from shimmeringlights
Drugs often have such a euphoric effect on the body and brain that being high does feel like being in heaven. Unfortunately they are also soul stealers and addicts sell out everyone including themselves to keep high. Its sad and hard to watch someone you care about go through this. Excellent write and your analogy is a truthful one.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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Drugs often have such a euphoric effect on the body and brain that being high does feel like being in heaven. Unfortunately they are also soul stealers and addicts sell out everyone including themselves to keep high. Its sad and hard to watch someone you care about go through this. Excellent write and your analogy is a truthful one.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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shimmeringlights, I'm glad you "got it" - that I did not go to the dark side on this poem and went with the feelings from an addict's point of view. Your comment on the analogy is very appreciated. Thank you for your very generous review. Sue