CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 138 "The feeling's mutual..."A collection of poetry
116 total reviews
Comment from Word Weaver
Empty canvas stares
Blankly back at artist
Wanting to be brushed
By strokes of genius
What a master piece, my dear! It gives a specific image of an artist trying to decide what strokes he should add to his work, while the canvas (or paper) is urging him mutually. Bravo, my dear! Keep on writing. Enjoyed it very much, Word Weaver.
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Empty canvas stares
Blankly back at artist
Wanting to be brushed
By strokes of genius
What a master piece, my dear! It gives a specific image of an artist trying to decide what strokes he should add to his work, while the canvas (or paper) is urging him mutually. Bravo, my dear! Keep on writing. Enjoyed it very much, Word Weaver.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
Comment from Windhover
Excellent conceit nicely rendered within the constraints of the competition. Makes me think ( what's rare is wonderful!) Thank you. >W<
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Excellent conceit nicely rendered within the constraints of the competition. Makes me think ( what's rare is wonderful!) Thank you. >W<
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
Comment from Nightwind1
That was wonderful! I often feel this way when I look at my writing journals with a blank mind. They beg for me to write and create.
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That was wonderful! I often feel this way when I look at my writing journals with a blank mind. They beg for me to write and create.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
another excellent piece of work. I don't know how you do it. I have read several of your poems now and each one is so well written with so few words that speak volumes
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2008
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another excellent piece of work. I don't know how you do it. I have read several of your poems now and each one is so well written with so few words that speak volumes
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2008
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Goldwell, I really appreciate your very kind words! Keeps me encouraged to keep on trying to write. This site is a GREAT place for people to learn. And thanks for your most excellent review! With regards, Sue
Comment from guerillapoet
A good use of the contest's rules. The word choice is nice, with some that offer a nice amount of imagery. It's a decent piece that doesn't let contest rules interfere with its message.
Nice work.
GP
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2008
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A good use of the contest's rules. The word choice is nice, with some that offer a nice amount of imagery. It's a decent piece that doesn't let contest rules interfere with its message.
Nice work.
GP
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2008
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GP, as always, I enjoy your reviews because of your very specific comments. Thanks for your very kind review. With regards, Sue
Comment from Jewell McChesney
Wanting to be brushed
By strokes of genius ...
WOW that is SO VERY GOOD! The metaphor is perfect,
even using cliche'd lines but in a different way.
Love it. I might be able to do THIS, even. I rarely write formed poetry or color within the lines. hehe
You're so talented. Thanks for sharing this one.
I have one of those canvases right now, staring at me!
Jj
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Wanting to be brushed
By strokes of genius ...
WOW that is SO VERY GOOD! The metaphor is perfect,
even using cliche'd lines but in a different way.
Love it. I might be able to do THIS, even. I rarely write formed poetry or color within the lines. hehe
You're so talented. Thanks for sharing this one.
I have one of those canvases right now, staring at me!
Jj
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
Comment from enjoi
Considering the format you chose here, the brevity, I think you did well with this. I saw no errors with the piece, and I like the turn you made in the poem. Good stuff, over all.
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Considering the format you chose here, the brevity, I think you did well with this. I saw no errors with the piece, and I like the turn you made in the poem. Good stuff, over all.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Sixteezkid
good one you put a smile on my face-
the same thing goes for all writers
(blank page and blank mind).
Excellent entry for the contest.
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Hello Sixteezkid
good one you put a smile on my face-
the same thing goes for all writers
(blank page and blank mind).
Excellent entry for the contest.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
Comment from phild
This was very good. It read very smooth, almost like a sentence rather than a poem. You used 15 words, and formed a picture for the reader. Not only a picture of now, but also a picture of what be. Great job.
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This was very good. It read very smooth, almost like a sentence rather than a poem. You used 15 words, and formed a picture for the reader. Not only a picture of now, but also a picture of what be. Great job.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
Comment from Nanny 6
Oh the bond of the canvas with the artist. Your poem expressed the perfect image with so few words. I enjoyed it very much. Good luck in the contest. Judy
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Oh the bond of the canvas with the artist. Your poem expressed the perfect image with so few words. I enjoyed it very much. Good luck in the contest. Judy
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008