The Reunion
A mother is reunited with her long-lost son.44 total reviews
Comment from eraserlynch
A lovely story told here. I was blown away by the ending and think it was a great end to a really well developed story. Look forward to reading more soon.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2008
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A lovely story told here. I was blown away by the ending and think it was a great end to a really well developed story. Look forward to reading more soon.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2008
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Thank you so much! :-)
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from RenieReader
What a marvelous idea, Jan. This is just beautiful and it fills my heart with hope that if I don't find my grandson (Andrew) while in this realm, I will see him in heaven. Thank you for this great idea. It makes sense to me.
"It(omit==>'s) seems odd to hear you talking about your life - without me."
"I always knew we'd see each other again one day[.==>,]" Chris said.
Hugs,
Renie
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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What a marvelous idea, Jan. This is just beautiful and it fills my heart with hope that if I don't find my grandson (Andrew) while in this realm, I will see him in heaven. Thank you for this great idea. It makes sense to me.
"It(omit==>'s) seems odd to hear you talking about your life - without me."
"I always knew we'd see each other again one day[.==>,]" Chris said.
Hugs,
Renie
Comment Written 09-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Thank you so much! :-) I do appreciate your comments and I fixed the nits!
Jan
Comment from brightside1099
What a beautiful story. I really enjoyed this and didn't suspect your twist until near the end. It's the kind of reunion every woman who has ever surrendered a child must dream of. I really enjoyed this one.
No nits.
BB
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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What a beautiful story. I really enjoyed this and didn't suspect your twist until near the end. It's the kind of reunion every woman who has ever surrendered a child must dream of. I really enjoyed this one.
No nits.
BB
Comment Written 09-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Wow! Thank you for honoring this with six stars. You made my day. I am so glad you enjoyed it that much.
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from Readywriter52
Your story has a tinge of sadness and happiness about it. It's sad Anna had to give her child up for adoption but happy because he found a good family. I know the trend is for single mothers to keep their children but it's saner to give up the child if they can't handle raising a child. But I agree giving up a child is painful.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Your story has a tinge of sadness and happiness about it. It's sad Anna had to give her child up for adoption but happy because he found a good family. I know the trend is for single mothers to keep their children but it's saner to give up the child if they can't handle raising a child. But I agree giving up a child is painful.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Thank you so much! :-) I do appreciate your comments. Anna's child actually died at birth.
Jan
Comment from mmichelle97219
I had a feeling about the ending, and thought you wrote this beautifully. Having lost children and felt the ache I like the way you painted this reunion. I hope it is how it actually happens. Well done.
Michelle
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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I had a feeling about the ending, and thought you wrote this beautifully. Having lost children and felt the ache I like the way you painted this reunion. I hope it is how it actually happens. Well done.
Michelle
Comment Written 08-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Thanks, Michelle. Much appreciated. I hope so, too.
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from Dave M
Janilou,
So this is paradise. I think that the greatest heartbreak would be for a baby to die. If it were adopted out right after birth, the mother could hope that the child would have a good life. But death is sort of final, at least for us on Earth.
I couldn't find any spag or other problems.
Dave M
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Janilou,
So this is paradise. I think that the greatest heartbreak would be for a baby to die. If it were adopted out right after birth, the mother could hope that the child would have a good life. But death is sort of final, at least for us on Earth.
I couldn't find any spag or other problems.
Dave M
Comment Written 08-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Thank you so much, Dave! :-) I do appreciate your comments.
Jan
Comment from T.S.J.
nIT IN YOUR NOTES , FIRST LINE YOU WROTE IS BE. I think you ment it be. you wrote a very wonderful story and you really through me off in the end. I thought it was about adoption not death. nice work. T.S.J.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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nIT IN YOUR NOTES , FIRST LINE YOU WROTE IS BE. I think you ment it be. you wrote a very wonderful story and you really through me off in the end. I thought it was about adoption not death. nice work. T.S.J.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Thank you very much for the review. I will check those notes! :-)
Glad you enjoyed the story.
Jan
Comment from shadow_wolf319
This is sweet, but... the dialogue is a bit stuffy. I don't believe their reuinion, or the deep emotions. This needs more description of the characters and the dialogue needs something to make it more believable.
I like where you're headed with this, it has the potential to be really good. :-)
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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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This is sweet, but... the dialogue is a bit stuffy. I don't believe their reuinion, or the deep emotions. This needs more description of the characters and the dialogue needs something to make it more believable.
I like where you're headed with this, it has the potential to be really good. :-)
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Thank you for your thoughts! :-)
Jan
Comment from jshep
Wow! I was beginning to figure this ending was going to be a surprise when she heard the music in the shell. Fantastic story. Very well written, smooth flow, no spag or changes to recommend. It definitely tugged at the heartstrings with sadness and joy. Excellent job. You made it all so believable.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Wow! I was beginning to figure this ending was going to be a surprise when she heard the music in the shell. Fantastic story. Very well written, smooth flow, no spag or changes to recommend. It definitely tugged at the heartstrings with sadness and joy. Excellent job. You made it all so believable.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Thank you so much! :-) I do appreciate your comments.
Jan
Comment from Sue-z-Q
Hi Jan:
Lovely story. Heartfelt, tender and warm. You're very good at writing things like this that almost bring on tears for me.
I hadn't figured out that they were in heaven. So that came as a surprise for me.
Nice clean write I'm pleased to report. Thanks for sharing.
Sue-z-Q
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Hi Jan:
Lovely story. Heartfelt, tender and warm. You're very good at writing things like this that almost bring on tears for me.
I hadn't figured out that they were in heaven. So that came as a surprise for me.
Nice clean write I'm pleased to report. Thanks for sharing.
Sue-z-Q
Comment Written 08-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Aw, thank you Sue-z-Q! It is always wonderful to read a review from you.
Hugs,
Jan