The Photographer
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Comment from nomi338
You speak of an accomplishment that I always desire, but somehow lacked the ability to achieve. I don't know if it was a lack of talent, patience, perseverance or all of the above and then some. Your excellent description of a perfect shoot expertly produced, makes me a little green with envy.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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You speak of an accomplishment that I always desire, but somehow lacked the ability to achieve. I don't know if it was a lack of talent, patience, perseverance or all of the above and then some. Your excellent description of a perfect shoot expertly produced, makes me a little green with envy.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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Thanks, Nolan. You won't have to be envious of my photographic talent. It is meager. Let me extend my condolences for the loss of your wife. I hope you had many years of happiness.
Comment from Sugarray77
This is very good and the rhythm and meter flow effortlessly throughout your verse (except in the third stanza) ;). I enjoyed reading about the quest for perfection that the photographer pursues. I would mention that there are 'nits' in the last stanza. Good luck in the contest, Paul.
Melissa
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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This is very good and the rhythm and meter flow effortlessly throughout your verse (except in the third stanza) ;). I enjoyed reading about the quest for perfection that the photographer pursues. I would mention that there are 'nits' in the last stanza. Good luck in the contest, Paul.
Melissa
Comment Written 09-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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Thanks, Melissa. I'll check that third stanza.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a fine tribute to your photographer friend and I enjoyed the rhymes and metre and adored the sentiments here Paul.
Just one suggestion for this line:
(Faithfully (you) try)
You also have a few odd characters in the last two lines.
A worthy six stars, I just have one left.
Love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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This is a fine tribute to your photographer friend and I enjoyed the rhymes and metre and adored the sentiments here Paul.
Just one suggestion for this line:
(Faithfully (you) try)
You also have a few odd characters in the last two lines.
A worthy six stars, I just have one left.
Love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 09-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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Thanks, Christine. I fixed the glitches and am still considering your suggested change.
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Typical accountant behaviour I see, mulling over the details, ha ha ha x x x
Comment from Begin Again
Perfect description of how one must feel when they capture a moment ... sometimes one that makes you stand in awe .... most definitely a moment that will never be repeated exactly in the same way again. I enjoyed your poem very much.
PS Two little gremlins are attached to the poem's last two lines.Maybe it's a smudge on the camera's lens. LOL
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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Perfect description of how one must feel when they capture a moment ... sometimes one that makes you stand in awe .... most definitely a moment that will never be repeated exactly in the same way again. I enjoyed your poem very much.
PS Two little gremlins are attached to the poem's last two lines.Maybe it's a smudge on the camera's lens. LOL
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 09-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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Thanks, Carol. Your PS is very clever.
Comment from Sue Smith
Love how this poem is stuffed full of images which really brings it alive. The rhyming scheme works well and gives it a momentum which keeps us reading. The only improvement I can see is to strive for slightly more original images in some places, just as your photographer searches for a unique image to photograph. As an example 'time worn lines' is a phrase that's used a lot when describing an older person. With some minor tweaks like that I'd rate it a 5/6
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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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Love how this poem is stuffed full of images which really brings it alive. The rhyming scheme works well and gives it a momentum which keeps us reading. The only improvement I can see is to strive for slightly more original images in some places, just as your photographer searches for a unique image to photograph. As an example 'time worn lines' is a phrase that's used a lot when describing an older person. With some minor tweaks like that I'd rate it a 5/6
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Comment Written 09-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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Thanks, Sue. Your observation is right on. That line is indeed "time worn".
Comment from papa55mike
Well, I happen to be a very amateur photographer and love old crumbling houses or a car with a tree growing through the hood. What a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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Well, I happen to be a very amateur photographer and love old crumbling houses or a car with a tree growing through the hood. What a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 09-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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Thanks, Mike. I've got an old hay rake up beside my field with a tree growing through it. I should probably take a picture and write a poem about it.
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Yes, you do! It would be great.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this rhyming contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading and had to smile as I read. Before my husband went into the Army, he was an editor of a local newspaper and took his own photographs. He always says one need to make a picture not take a picture. In your final paragraph there's a few extra symbols. Not sure there's a way to correct that. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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Thank you for sharing this rhyming contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading and had to smile as I read. Before my husband went into the Army, he was an editor of a local newspaper and took his own photographs. He always says one need to make a picture not take a picture. In your final paragraph there's a few extra symbols. Not sure there's a way to correct that. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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Thanks, Barb. Sort of like "making" a poem.
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Paul,
This is such a great poem. I usually see beautiful things when I don't have my cell phone with me.
I love how you describe the "hunt" for that one special photo.
Note: in the last two lines,
There are some "unwanted" characters.
Great poem,
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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Paul,
This is such a great poem. I usually see beautiful things when I don't have my cell phone with me.
I love how you describe the "hunt" for that one special photo.
Note: in the last two lines,
There are some "unwanted" characters.
Great poem,
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 09-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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Thanks, Cindy. The only good thing about my cell phone is the rare picture that I might take.
Comment from RodG
Although I enjoy taking pictures, I am not the photographer focused on in this rhyming poem. You make it very clear what his goals are, the EXACT image he is trying to capture and preserve. I commend also your use of 4/3/4/3 stanzas to tell your tale. Rod
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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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Although I enjoy taking pictures, I am not the photographer focused on in this rhyming poem. You make it very clear what his goals are, the EXACT image he is trying to capture and preserve. I commend also your use of 4/3/4/3 stanzas to tell your tale. Rod
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Comment Written 09-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024
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Thanks, Rod. I am a lot better at writing poems than I am at taking photographs.