Where Do I Go?
For days when I feel like I'm in a room with no doors.39 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
William,
This exceptional poem is so touching; I'm sorry for the boy who died, but at least you gave him comfort.
This is a glimpse of what each of us might go through in our final hours. At 66, I think about it often.
I'm sorry I ran out of six stars already (I did marathon reviewing yesterday), because your poem is deserving.
Best wishes, Cindy
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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William,
This exceptional poem is so touching; I'm sorry for the boy who died, but at least you gave him comfort.
This is a glimpse of what each of us might go through in our final hours. At 66, I think about it often.
I'm sorry I ran out of six stars already (I did marathon reviewing yesterday), because your poem is deserving.
Best wishes, Cindy
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Cindy, for your review. -Bill
Comment from Begin Again
Wow...your poem and the notes are so moving. Nowhere near do I come to understand watching one self slip away, knowing it's coming, and watching how it affects those you love.
I do know the other side -- as I watched my husband slip away... I was his wife, caretaker, and friend. When he passed, I had no idea who I was anymore... the me had been lost a long time ago.
You have done wonderful things and gave this teenager hope and understanding and peace.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Wow...your poem and the notes are so moving. Nowhere near do I come to understand watching one self slip away, knowing it's coming, and watching how it affects those you love.
I do know the other side -- as I watched my husband slip away... I was his wife, caretaker, and friend. When he passed, I had no idea who I was anymore... the me had been lost a long time ago.
You have done wonderful things and gave this teenager hope and understanding and peace.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Carol, this review meant a lot to me and what you shared I hope you are writing about it. Women especially, need you to share this. Thank you for your review. One of the best and I also thank you for the six!
Bill
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Thank you for being so kind. Have a great day!
Comment from patcelaw
What is tragic saying that someone has to endure such a thing as this form indicates. It is very thought-provoking and I enjoyed reading it however it is leaves with a feeling of sadness. May you have a wonderful week and may God bless you. Patricia.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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What is tragic saying that someone has to endure such a thing as this form indicates. It is very thought-provoking and I enjoyed reading it however it is leaves with a feeling of sadness. May you have a wonderful week and may God bless you. Patricia.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Pat, for your review. You are so loyal to my writes. Sometimes a love poem needs to be sad. -Bill
Comment from royowen
Such a sad thing for you to witness, you must be such a special person, and gifted to be able to offer the hand of comfort to these dear people, 16 is way too early to die Bill, such a sad but beautifully written post, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Such a sad thing for you to witness, you must be such a special person, and gifted to be able to offer the hand of comfort to these dear people, 16 is way too early to die Bill, such a sad but beautifully written post, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Thanks, Roy, for your always expected review. -Bill
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Well done
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a moving and emotional poem about appreciating life when you can. It must be hard to have parents who fight all the time in front of him who was dying.
Very sad.
Well done.
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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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What a moving and emotional poem about appreciating life when you can. It must be hard to have parents who fight all the time in front of him who was dying.
Very sad.
Well done.
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Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Jasmine. When he was admitted everyone, including the maintenance staff, intionally came to him and said, "Welcome home."
Comment from nancy Laine
Love this poem! It has a beautiful flow and rhythm. I felt every emotion! Well written! Your use of descriptive language makes the poem leap off the page. I love the first line, it drew me in immediately. Depression feels like this. I could relate to the pain! Keep writing, you have a gift!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Love this poem! It has a beautiful flow and rhythm. I felt every emotion! Well written! Your use of descriptive language makes the poem leap off the page. I love the first line, it drew me in immediately. Depression feels like this. I could relate to the pain! Keep writing, you have a gift!
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Oh, Nancy. I hope you will review my profile. I just finished publishing my sixth book and another is not far behind. Thanks also for the six.
Comment from Wendy G
A poem born of despair. I am glad he was at least able to die away from the fighting of his insensitive parents, and that you created a place of peace for him and others. Bes
Wendy
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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A poem born of despair. I am glad he was at least able to die away from the fighting of his insensitive parents, and that you created a place of peace for him and others. Bes
Wendy
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Oh, Wendy, what a wonderful review. Thank you.
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I meant to say best wishes for the contest, but must have deleted my last bit. Sorry about that.
Comment from gansach
This is a heartbreaking and beautiful poem and a very good entry for the Free Verse Poetry competition. Your author notes help us understand the reason behind this poem. I like the presentation, great imagery, and poignancy. Very well done! You are a very special person to have made this your career, to bring comfort and care to those in need. Bless you!
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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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This is a heartbreaking and beautiful poem and a very good entry for the Free Verse Poetry competition. Your author notes help us understand the reason behind this poem. I like the presentation, great imagery, and poignancy. Very well done! You are a very special person to have made this your career, to bring comfort and care to those in need. Bless you!
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Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Thank you for a wonderful review.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Wow, Bill. This is powerful and shows the condition of the patient as he faces his parents' bickering while he is dying in a patient care facility. I can feel his tears running down his cheek and his inner turmoil of how to face death while facing his parents as well only hoping that one day they will finally be together as one.
Jesse
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Wow, Bill. This is powerful and shows the condition of the patient as he faces his parents' bickering while he is dying in a patient care facility. I can feel his tears running down his cheek and his inner turmoil of how to face death while facing his parents as well only hoping that one day they will finally be together as one.
Jesse
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Oh , Jesse. I am so grateful for your review and your six.
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They were well deserved, my friend.