Stood Up
Find the two homonyms or homophones in each line35 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation, Debi.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-You put a lot of work into this poem just
with all of the different forms of words alone.
-You also tell a good story with effective
imagery and rhyming couplets.
-You set the scene and premise very well.
-Big brother definitely was upset and
wanted things to be right for his sister.
-Dave didn't appear to be what Ted thought
and they even shared a beer.
-I like the 'bank' line.
-A very good closing couplet.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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-Very nice artwork and presentation, Debi.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-You put a lot of work into this poem just
with all of the different forms of words alone.
-You also tell a good story with effective
imagery and rhyming couplets.
-You set the scene and premise very well.
-Big brother definitely was upset and
wanted things to be right for his sister.
-Dave didn't appear to be what Ted thought
and they even shared a beer.
-I like the 'bank' line.
-A very good closing couplet.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Hi Pam, I sure appreciate the very kind comments for this poem. It was challenging but that is what makes it fun. You gave me the biggest smile with your very thoughtful compliments. Thanks again, my awesome friend.
Love, Debi
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You are very welcome,Debi. I think challenges are a good thing to do; it keeps the brain active, for one thing.
Comment from royowen
I meant to write a poem using homophones, I wrote a stanza but, but never finished, it wasn't important, great poem just to show your skill at writing this fabulous poem Debi. I love these challenges in my writings, but sometimes I've got this backlog of work, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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I meant to write a poem using homophones, I wrote a stanza but, but never finished, it wasn't important, great poem just to show your skill at writing this fabulous poem Debi. I love these challenges in my writings, but sometimes I've got this backlog of work, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Haha, Roy, maybe you were smart to stop at the first paragraph. LOL
It wasn't easy but I love a good challenge and that made it fun.
I get bored with my either 14 or 8 syllable ones sometimes and yet they are still the best for me to use. We all need change sometimes.
So thank for your always kind comments, my wonderful friend. Love, Debi
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Most welcome
Comment from GWHARGIS
I'm still reeling from the instructions for this type of poem. I did enjoy the poem, though. It was a tongue twister by no exaggeration. You are quite the talented poet. Enjoy your Sunday. Gretchen
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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I'm still reeling from the instructions for this type of poem. I did enjoy the poem, though. It was a tongue twister by no exaggeration. You are quite the talented poet. Enjoy your Sunday. Gretchen
Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Hi Gretchen, I sure appreciate the very kind comments for this poem. It was challenging but that is what makes it fun. You gave me the biggest smile with your very thoughtful compliments. Thanks again, my awesome friend.
Love, Debi
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Wow! That looks like a challenge and a half! Very well done and a cute poem but is there a way you can check on how it views on your computer? because for me it was quite difficult to read for somereason. your biography went over part of the poem for some reason. looks like maybe a glitch of some sort. Nothing too bad but might keep people from being able to read it all.
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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Wow! That looks like a challenge and a half! Very well done and a cute poem but is there a way you can check on how it views on your computer? because for me it was quite difficult to read for somereason. your biography went over part of the poem for some reason. looks like maybe a glitch of some sort. Nothing too bad but might keep people from being able to read it all.
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Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Hey sweetie, this doesn't' show on mine so I made my words smaller. Will you please check and see if it's better?? I owe you.
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no, its the same. the poem itself doesn't start for about 12 inches down the page under the title...that includes the artwork down below too
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Shoot, that doesnt show on my iPad or computer. Thanks I will try again.
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maybe you accidnetly backspaced the story way down? i will check again tomorrow to see if it got fixed.
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No, I didn't but could you look one more time and I will get you back.
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Im afraid there's no change. Maybe its on my end?
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No, I doubt it.l thanks so much, sweetie, i will make it up to you.
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no need. i just hope you figure out whats wrong. good night
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I just took the bold off and maybe that will help
Comment from Bill Schott
I see by the project here that some of the wording is rather odd in order to achieve some grammar goal. I guess the goal was reached, but is felt in the read.
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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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I see by the project here that some of the wording is rather odd in order to achieve some grammar goal. I guess the goal was reached, but is felt in the read.
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Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Bill, darn, I just heard that my poem ran over to profile and it doesn't show on my iPad so thanks for telling me and I hope it is better now as I just decreased the size of the font. Thanks again. Debi