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Willing Hearts

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Solve a crime and fall in love at the same time?

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Comment from Teri7
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This is a very exciting chapter also. I know it has to be hard on you writing and doing things with your family at the same time. I hope you have a very good evening my friend. Let me know when you have corrected these please! love and blessings, Teri

d you have work than needs your attention
(that)
The used AK-47's. We weren't ready
(They)


 Comment Written 19-May-2024


reply by the author on 19-May-2024
    Thank you for the corrections. I appreciate the help.
reply by Teri7 on 19-May-2024
    Barbara, That just lets you know I truly love and read your work very closely. You are one of my favorites! love and blessings, Teri
Comment from Begin Again
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Glad to hear you are having an enjoyable visit and even finding time for yourself as well. Bravo! Another excellent chapter in the sage of course. Things are getting hotter...between the "war" and also Sami. Great job!
Smiles, Carol

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 Comment Written 19-May-2024


reply by the author on 19-May-2024
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Pamusart
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" Sean described the scene,
Hi, Barbars

You have developed your characters quite well in this convincing story of spies and capers.

This was my favorite part

" "I'm sure you will, Boss. Stay safe." Sean grinned. "Boss, does this qualify me for a vacation?"

Chuckling Noah said, "Of course. Think about where you want to go. I'll see it happens."

Below. I think it should be playing

"We were drinking beer and play cards. Four armed men came in shooting. The used AK-47's. We weren't ready."

Below should be whom rather than who.

For a story of this length I saw very few places for improvement. Quite an accomplish. Thank you for sharing

" Myra Rodriguez - Kidnapped teenage girl who Sami was close to."

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 Comment Written 19-May-2024


reply by the author on 19-May-2024
    I have made the corrections. I appreciate the help. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
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I Barbara, I'm so glad you managed to sneak in a new chapter. And it's great. It also raises quite a few issues. I won't be posting today. I have visitors from Scotland and next week I'm flying to Denmark to see my family up there. I can't wait to see my three granddaughters. I plan to post on next Sunday.
I enjoyed reading this. Ulla xcx

 Comment Written 19-May-2024


reply by the author on 19-May-2024
    I do understand how important it is to see grandchildren. They make everything special. Thank you the kind review.