Comment from Wayne Fowler

Excellent

Nice story. Not easy in fifty words.
A couple minor issues:
Across the restaurants table, the flickering candle illuminates their smiling faces. - (restaurant's)
She extends out her hand. - 'out' is redundant/implied
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024

Thanks for the correction nd I made a change to the"out her hand".
Much appreciated

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

Did my husband write this? I'm forever eying his fries! Love French Fries with ketchup! My hand is quicker than the fries, I'm afraid. Delightful flash and devilishly funny. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes in the contest.
Sally :))

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 Comment Written 03-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024

Thank you, Sally. Us husbands need to be weary of our fries!

reply by Sally Law on 03-Apr-2024

Us wives, we love our salty carbs! Best wishes in everything.
Sal :))

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

A clever and humorous twist at the end! Well done. I was waiting for something to happen to change the pure romanticism of the first part - but that ending, I certainly dd not foresee. Well done. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy

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 Comment Written 03-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024

Thank you, Wendy.