Comment from lancellot

Excellent

I see this is only part one. So, that means there is more, perhaps something deeper to the story. That the boys would find the old woman and aid her was pretty telegraphed, and the backstory to gain the readers sympathy for her. I'm sure that will come up later.

We'll see what develops. A young/old friendship perhaps or a surprise.

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 Comment Written 04-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024

This is only three parts where Valerie has to get back at Reggie. The next chapter will see Valerie busting a gut to get revenge on her brother. It's a youngsters story. I'm working on editing The Descendent at the moment. So this is just to keep my brain active.
Thanks for reading, Lance. :) Sandra xx

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

I very much enjoyed the story. I especially liked how that you were able to with words give us the English accent to the words. It flows very well when read aloud and it speaks well in the English accent. Patricia .

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 Comment Written 04-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024

Thank you, Patricia, I'm glad you liked it. It is only three parts. Valerie has to get her revenge on her brother. Warmest hugs, my friend. Sandra xx